The Axe Master

Self-Published

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Description

He lived his life stuck in jobs that he hated, and at the age of 35, his body gave in to stress, and he spent more than twenty years in a hospital bed, abandoned by his family and friends. And finally, he died, regretting how he lived his life.

However, that was not the end, as a god from another world took piety of him, and decided to take his soul to another world to help him with a task, and as a reward, give him something of his wish.

However, he surprises the god with his wish: A healthy and young body.

The god agrees, but in the end, just that would be lame, and his soul can still handle more, so he decides to give a few more…

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2018
Author: Kuromori

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.8/ 5.0
Followers: 450
Views: 21,986

Chapters(11 total)

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Community Reviews(8)

TreyonRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
K lets start with the beginning of the story... its almost a hard copy of the gamer but soon it starts to develop in what makes it unique, the style is using the POV of the various characters focusing on the MC and its a first person view so we get to know their thoughts.
The story starts almst the same as the gamer but soon it goes in an original direction. The way the MC interacts with the other characters its amazing in my opinion and its quite funny too. i got excited quite a few times while reading.
Another good thing is the way that the world is presented and the laws of the universe and magic that the author has presented. They are very original and its something i havent read anywhere else
The character are full of life and the MC is a mischievous person that likes to tease people but never goes overboard, he is quite protective and likes to do "evil" plots if you can call them that where he pranks someone and then helps them out as if it wasnt his fault getting a good impresion of others XD.
Now the problem... its the grammar i dare to say that there are more than 20 gramatical errors per chapter with the main thing being missing letters, misplaced letters, a little redaction issues but they dont affect much the reading; Like "I strong" it should be "i am strong" Or Beutiful instead of beautiful, such mistakes.
The author told in a chapter that he has attentional disorder so he cant fix the grammar so a proofreading is needed, the issue is not much, just fix the misplaced letters.
Another thing is the use of japanese words, since i like anime and manga in general i have no probs with the words but for other users they would be like WTF is that? torii? can you eat that?, if you want to use those words pls follow an explanation on what they are, in this case a torii is a traditional japanese gate that is used on temples, those tipical red ones just before the huge stairs.
I believe that if you fix the grammar and redaction issues you will get top 25 easy.
dissociatedRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
..they can get real picky with things. Honestly, your story does have some issues (ex:grammar, etc.) but it doesn't mean it deserves a rating lower than 2. I've been on RRL for quite some time now and I've seen stuff that's WAY worse and downright stupid. I'm a casual reader so I take everything in very easily. Game-like settings in real life? Sure, why not. MC has amazing luck and finds a legendary treasure right off the bat? OK. It's clear that as an author, you're writing for improvement, fun, etc, and as someone who can't write even if you gave me a million dollars, your effort is worth something. As you continue writing, keep other's reviews in mind and try to improve but don't let it get to you like so many other authors have. It's quite sad to see someone just stop in the middle or beginning of the story because people were being real mean and judgmental. I'm not saying other's opinions like the reviewer before me are wrong but everyone has their own opinions. This is mine and mine only so if anyone disagrees with me, it is perfectly fine.
Dear author, please remember that you have no obligation to fulfill a reader's wishes. If you have no time or have no motivation, it is okay to take a breather and wait for the right time to pick up the story again. It always pains me whenever I see a low rating or review on any story as the author, regardless of whether the story was crap or a masterpiece, did put some degree of effort into their writing. I don't believe your story was crap but I don't think it's a gem either. There is definitely room for improvement and I suggest you start with grammar first. After that, your pacing and descriptions. It's still too early to give a full blown analysis of your story and so, keep uploading chapters every once in a while and we'll see how this story goes.
SobekRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
The story is ok, its pretty much recycled from any other fic or book or LN you have ever read. But there is just one thing I want to ask. Is it actually that hard to use spell check? You don't even need a proofreader. I guess i just can't understand since English is my primary language, but is it really that fucking hard to download google docs, set the language to English, copy and paste your chapters into it and click through spell check? Iv'e seen soo many fics that could be decent except the authors are too lazy to just ask one of the many English speakers such as myself, who are willing to look it over for them for help. Or just use goddamn spellcheck. To be honest this isn't just directed at this fic, its directed at many many other authors on this site. Iv'e just become fed up with it at this point. After reading almost 150 fics on this site and having 50+ in my fav/follow list about 60+ of the things I have read have been lacking in the grammar department. Let me ask again is it really that hard to send someone a doc over Email and then have them check it for grammatical and spelling errors????
Well glad I got that of my chest, it will probably take me another month of reading bad grammar before I explode on another poor souls review section ;)
MattajRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
At the beginning I thought of dropping this story because of mistakes in grammar and vocabulary but also it was a bit boring. Fortunately I kept on reading and it gets better around chapter 4.
Author require a proofreader because it is still hard to read but you should get a general meaning. Author also used words that are not used or commonly used in English and they should be explained because when I was reading first few chapters, sometimes I had no idea what some of the words meant (and I did not research them as I was reading on mobile device).
Improvement is clearly visible as the story goes but adding tables (which from title and summary should be present) should give a nice feeling to this story which from title and summary should be present.
Book CultivatorRoyal Road
★★ 1.5
This is my personal review
Style Parameter:
Your style is something difficult to change, it will only change if you write and read other authors’ works, changes are not necessarily bad, in your case, it will be very beneficial.
Your grammar intereferes in the style, it is the reason why you got…
Rating: 2
Story Parameter:
The story would be 2.5, but because you wrote something very short and is practically a “The Gamer”, you got a 2.0 out of 5.0( which means 40% ).
Can be changed if you write more chapters with a base of at least 1000 words.
Rating: 2.0
Grammar Parameter:
Just… Well… You’ve got a 0.5 because I’m not the monster to give 0.
Rating: 0.5
Character Parameter:
Nothing is really shown about this character.
Can be changed if you write more chapters describing the complexity of the character.
Rating: 2
Overall Score Calculation:
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( 2.0[Style] + 2.0[Story] + 0.5[Grammar] + 2.0[Character]) / 4 = 1.625
1.625 >>> 1.5
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PS: Keep uploading chapters and I will update the review.
SaphyronRoyal Road
★ 0.5
The grammar is really bad. The synopsis has grammar errors. You will keep finding these over and over again.
emberwingRoyal Road
★ 0.5
The story elements are ripped from many other stories and the characters are boring and barely introduced.
The grammar is usually alright but still has many mistakes.
The author places really bad jokes in the story, some of which he get's wrong "i feel a disturbance OF the mana" bad presentation and that is ignoring the fact that it was supposed to be IN.
The only funny joke that i could find was that the author even claimed that it wasn't fan fiction.
gnarlytreemanRoyal Road
★ 0.5
The grammar and spelling are so bad they ruin the story. There are 3 spelling mistakes in the first sentance.