Teshallah the Sixth

Self-Published

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Description

When you go to school with a group of murderers, what's the most obvious thing to do? Well, find them. No, actually, a better idea is to hide away, but not when you're the only one on the lookout for them. Neuire Moddes, the son of a pair of investigators decides to take things into his own hands when his father gives up on Neuire's mother's killers. There's only one problem. The sixth murderer seems to be clinging a little too much.

The cover is not finished, and was done by a friend of mine. It's definitely, probably, maybe not, yet at the same time maybe, going to change.

While uploaded later, this is still an older story. I’m trying to catch as many grammar mistakes as possible, but I easily slide by many. Be an Itra for me, and find them…

This is a tale from Taireah. (Chronologic placement: One Year beforeIllate and Itra: The Collection, and a few months afterKing of Biscuits and the Queen of Turkeys.

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2023
Author
Brave-Lizard

Tags

TRAGEDYDRAMASLICE OF LIFESCHOOL LIFEMALE LEAD

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4.3/ 5.0
Followers
2
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3,515

Chapters(19 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

  • The Reality Next DoorRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 3.5
    First off, I want to say, despite some grammar issues, but mostly redundant wording, I will get into that later, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this book so far.
    Story: The story is pretty straightforward, but I am not sure yet who exactly the killers are. I sense that there should be some red herrings and not everything is as simple as it seems. The story is right about what it says on the tin.
    Style: I enjoyed the style of writing, it was consistent, and I am glad that it was clear who was speaking at times. The weird names bothered me a bit, but that is probably just since these names are uncommon in Dutch culture.
    Another thing that I found odd was the length of the chapters, one was 500 words, and the other, 2198 words.
    Grammar: Many of the lines when someone speaks are missing capital letters, which got annoying a bit after seeing many of them. There is also a lot of redundant over wording of stuff. I also saw numerous missing commas. The grammar needs some improvement, but overall, it did not bother the story too much.
    Characters: There is nothing wrong with the characters, I am curious to see most of them develop further into the story.
    All in all, a good read!