Renewal : A Daughter of Fate - VILLAINESS/LITRPG/CULTIVATION/OTOME - (Book One Stubbed)

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Death has a funny way of finding Lynette Heversham, but after three lifetimes filled with pain, anger, and misplaced emotions, she finds herself waking, yet again, as her younger self.

Cursed to re-live as the Crazy Cerue Lady, can she survive her fourth time round, or will her past as a villainess bite back to haunt her? Can she survive the Viscount’s household when they have killed her before? As the unwanted adopted daughter, can guidance from the gods push her to unlock the power of her core to fight back against the summoners and demonic beasts who wish her dead?

Will this life finally hold the threads to change her fate?

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This is a developing story I hope to improve and bring my ideas to life with. It follows a rise in power for a young girl exploring a system of magic and complications of country politics and the monsters that threaten the Zopan Empire. I would appreciate any comments on your thoughts on the story so far / where I can improve.

TO NOTE :

This is light LITRPG - It is not the main focus but comes in around chp 5/8. There is Otome inspiration mixed in.

Progression Cultivation - This is combined with the LITRPG system but is more central.

Romance - This will be a slow-burn romance, again not the main focus, but it will be there. You will have to guess who this may be for a while :P

Regression - This is a Villainess who has regressed, experiencing a part of her world she didn't get to in her previous lives

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Status: Ongoing
Year: 2024
Author: JaffaJessie ( J.L.Rabone )

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Rating: 4.5/ 5.0
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Chapters(15 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

BrGastlRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
We aren´t that far into the story yet so I can´t review to much about it. Though it looks like it will be a very promising and ambitious work which I always support - an advanced review might happen at chapter 80+.
The setting is relatively common; nothing over the top or revolutionary we haven't seen in some form. More or less Villainess-MC gets a chance to relive her life and correct her mistakes. While we also see game like typical LitRPG System and Stats.
Though what I like is that the author isn't just reproducing some generic content. Hes adding his own ideas to it alike combining LitRPG with Cultivation. And the Likeability thingy; is that some Otome game implementation? I like it though. It makes characters and their relationships between each other rather complex and we will see probably many thrilling conflicts between them which makes the whole story much more genuine and complex than typical levelgrinding progressive LitRPG novels. I can totally see myself pulling out a chart and drawling lines in potential future chapters. At the moment we didn't get to much world building, but I can at least say that it feels like a world like ours just with a pinch of magic and RPG system. Nothing about it feels artificial beside some gods having their champion with some adventoureous fate though thats given for any story beside SoL.
Some people critizised the editing and language, though I have to say its didn´t really impact me. I barely noticed anything - though my english is just my 2nd language - and the author is already bettering himself over the past chapters nothing really which should deter someone from reading.
Doglia5Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The author's focus on the main character pays off. The way that it is a regression instead of an isekai replacement brings depth to the main character's trauma and reactions. The trauma and reactions are written well without being over blown or hand waved. The premise is a bit over done but the way the author makes their work unique is worth it. I noticed very few grammar errors. Of the grammar errors I noticed they did not interfere with the flow of the story. The main character has access to a system that allows her to see their likeability with each "character". At first I thought that this would end terribly as the main character wears a mask to farm likeability without any character development. However the author works around this very well and successfully develops their story and characters despite the common limitations of the implemented system. The author's method of utilizing the soft lit-rpg elements is very well implemented where system skills are a measure of the person's ability not how much the system boosts that person. Like most novels this novel is not for everyone. The main character has experienced trauma and from what I have seen the author is not afraid to explore it. I think it is a great read and one of the best villainess novels out there that transcends the op mc mary sue nature most of them eventually follow. The main character is a little immature for her supposed age but if the author digs into that more with the trauma aspect and utilizes character development this can become a high point of look how far she's come from naive sort of emotionally weak but kinda coping while somewhat being able to defend herself. I think that by the end of the army training arc we should see that development at least in the self-defense and coping aspects. Of course I am just a random person on the internet so like you should with everything take my review with a grain or handful of salt.
DynalonRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
There are only 10 chapters so I will keep it short - it is surprisingly good. Grammar and style are above average, world-building is well done, characters feel alive (especially MC).
It is too soon to judge litrpg elements, but they are present in small amounts. Only thing which might be a problem for some readers is release schedule of new chapters, it is very irregular.
RenuxRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I recommend this series, especially those who enjoy the "I was reborn in a noble house" type dramas.
What's great about this one is it's an ADVENTURE. There is action and angst in equal measure.
I admire this writer's pacing and have bought the book on Amazon. Worth the read. Keep up the great work!
[writing more to hit that 200/w minimum for advanced reviews]
Re: the Stats
What makes this one stand apart compared to other RPGLits is that along with stats (that we really don't see much until maybe a third way into the story, then they become regular) there are also the visual novel elements of "likability" with some of the characters. Please note, "likability" does not equal romance.
Character that have the "likability" value may have the power over MC to end her life
Re: the Adventure
I hate to admit, but too much action and I get bored. This one did not have this problem. Fighting scenes were split with inter-character tensions, discovering new places/power, etc.
Re: the sub-characters
I LOVE THE WOMEN IN THIS STORY. This is sooooo rare for me. None of them are annoying. Her sister is unobservant, but that's her character's weakness.
The male characters...how do I say this...the MC has been abused by family/servants/society. People believe she is a liar and not as noble, so they treat her poorly. This will anger you, and that's what makes writing good, getting the reader to have an emotional reaction. I am very excited to see how the "likability" characters develop.
Thank you author! You're inspiring!
TikizaRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This is one of the most captivating books I’ve experienced this year—a true standout that has left an indelible mark on me. From the very first chapter to the last. The characters are the beating heart of this story; each is vividly drawn, dynamic, and unforgettable. The main character, in particular, feels refreshingly authentic—flawed yet endearing, their growth over time mirrors our own struggles and triumphs. Their voice is so distinct and relatable that you can’t help but root for them every step of the way.
What truly sets this story apart are the masterfully woven flashbacks. These throwbacks don’t just fill in gaps—they deepen character motivations, reveal hidden layers of conflict, and create a rich tapestry of history that makes the present-day plot even more compelling. The author’s skill at balancing past and present is seamless, offering moments of reflection that feel earned rather than forced.
The story itself is pure joy to consume. It’s filled with wit, and emotional beats that resonate long after the final page. I’m already itching for a sequel; there’s so much potential, and I’d love to see these characters return. If you’re looking for a story with unforgettable moments and characters, do yourself a favor: read it. You’ll thank me later!
FaeronRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Gives me "Villains are Destined to Die" flashbacks, in a good way. I think Lynette is a smarter protagonist, and her story is easy to sympathize with. The start is very engaging, and I'm excited to read more as the Writathon continues. :)
There are some small grammar issues and typos, but overall a solid command of the English language.
Vera Anne WolfeRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Overall Score: 4.5/5.0
This is a very promising story hindered only by the numerous moments of déjà vu in the opening. (Details below under story score).
Lynette Heversham has lived three lifetimes of misery that all end in death. Upon awakening to her last and final life, she prays to the gods for answers and guidance. She is granted access to a System (Otome Likeability Meter) and quests that are meant to guide her fate and increase the odds of her survival. Her first quest is to escape her horrible adopted family and join the Army even though she lacks physical strength and has a very weak magic core.
The mystery behind Lynette’s 3rd life and death, when she is framed for the death of two boys (members of the royal family), also hangs in the background. Will she be able to avoid her abusive husband and the politics that tangled her up in this deadly disaster? For what reason has she been repeatedly reborn that the gods themselves cannot answer?
Overall, the pacing and characters are quite enjoyable. If you enjoy stories about a misunderstood Villainess surviving against a world that turned its back on her, then you will likely enjoy this one as well.
Note: Every time Lynette regresses, her mental maturity returns to that of her younger self. That said, she is not without logic and cleverness.
Style Score: 5/5 I enjoyed the writing style of this. It’s simple and easy to follow. While I don’t usually read First Person POVs, the writer has kept the narrative active without getting lost in the internal turmoil that seems prevalent in some 1st Person POV. That said, there is a surprising absence of any internal thought, which makes me wonder why they didn’t use 3rd Person POV, but after the first few chapters, I hardly thought about it at all.
Story Score: 4.5/5 It’s hard to judge this at present, given that much of the story mirrors a certain well-known otome isekai manga. I won’t name it here, but if you’ve read it, you’ll immediately recognize the similarities. Tha
jaristosRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Many times when beginning a story it can be a slog trying to find the interesting parts. Well, not too often with the stories I actively follow, but for those I try to give a chance to, yes. This story is not one of those. It drew me in with sharply drawn characters, a relatable main character, and interesting relationship dynamics. Oh, and an execution, but that's not exactly a spoiler.
The game elements are introduced fairly early on as there is an Otome angle to this story that I've found entertaining. Reminds me of some novel translations I've read online. Almost had me looking for death flags.
This does not appear to be a story of an overpowered character, though I could be wrong. It's early days as of this review (chapter 30 or so?). As a matter of fact, the character is still very weak, but there are fun signs of her having some hidden, special talents.
I like the style of the story: so very British. Though -- if this can be counted as part of style -- the addition of Jains seems...odd. There are no other Asian elements outside of the cultivation. But then I guess most swords mentioned in fantasy stories could be seen as out of place. I was reading an interesting comment yesterday on the history of scimitars, for instance, and now I think I'll cringe whenever one is brought into a story.
As to grammar, it's mostly solid, but there are some odd sentence constructions, a few not-quite-correctly used words, and the formatting of the dialogue just can't be correct, British rules or not. I don't recall ever seeing such odd formatting. (Sorry to keep bringing it up, but it nags at me. It's my autistic/pedantic side.)
The pace of the updates means I'm going to have to let it sit and buildup, which is a pattern with a number of the better quality stories I follow. Writing ain't easy folks, so it's entirely understandable.
Honestly, if it weren't for a few quibbles with grammar or small mistakes left in at time of reading, I'd just slap a five star on this story.
MiG-25 FoxbatRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I enjoyed my read of this piece. The main character is a good protagonist, her antagonists are people you want to root against, there's some strange things going on in the background, and the world is full of mysteries. Even the LitRPG element doesn't feel as obtrusive as it does in other works I've read. At least it's got a reason to exist in-setting.
Style: 3.5/5
Ignoring the litany of small errors, the author has a pretty good style. What I take issue with is how wordy it can get. There's plenty of very long sentences that were easy to lose track of, and sometimes the characters sound more like encyclopedia entries than actual characters. The dialogue in general needs another pass. If the author broke up some of those long sentences and reworked the most egregious bits of dialogue (especially in the earlier chapters) the whole work would reach much more smoothly.
Story: 5/5
I care about these people and what happens them. Zoopan- I mean Zopan is a dangerous and mysterious place. Our protagonist starts at the bottom of the pile. She is not overpowered, she is not dangerous, she struggles and suffers because the author is aware facing adversity is more interesting than steamrolling problems immediately. Good stuff!
Grammar: 2/5
Here's the litany of small errors I mentioned. More than half the dialogues end without punctuation, and in the early chapters they're outside the quotation marks. I almost dropped the story in the opening paragraph because of this, I only kept going because I told the author I'd give this story a shot. Not only that, but there's scores of missing commas, missing apostrophes, and uncapitalized letters that ought to be capitalized, especially in the early chapters. The author is better about this in later chapters, which I'm giving points for, but the early ones are rough. Really rough. And it's the first impression that matters most, unfortunately. This is what I mean by "in need of an editor." Some might think I'm harsh, but these rules of
ErdosRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
The otome setting forces character archetypes and relationships particular to the genre. There also are quite a few story developments that are forced by the author—by actual divine intervention, even. Yet, the text itself is complex and nuanced enough to make for a compelling journey.
An archetypical story, but an enjoyable one.