The Spell

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Status

Completed

Year

2022

Author

Mad Sadie

• Simple assignment
  Jan 3, 2022

Reviews

Community Reviews(3)

• Jakis_tam_nikRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I love you and i hate you. Your stories are great but they are short! Give me moar.
  World building is great in mere 3 pages you sucked me in, characters seem good and grammar is peerless or i think it is. Only downside is it's length. Overall i love and hate it.
• RznRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  This was an interesting read, but the worldbuilding here ended up being the weak point that caused me to suffer from internal commentary and broke my suspension of disbelief. Magic and magic schools are something of a dangerous topic in fantasy because they inevitably have to walk the line between the students and arcane awesome power.
  My issues began with the application of lava to the courtyard and its seeming endurance. For so many reasons this would have to be immediately rectified and the fact the groundskeeper at school can't fix the error of a child/student and is going to go along with it was a bit of a red flag. Then came the actual spell itself - if it is forbidden then how did this get figured out so easily. There are different levels of things one should not do, it is hard to tell exactly what where it falls between 'reanimating' dead creatures with electricity and making a nuclear reactor in your backyard. Though the implication is clear that such a thing might be well beyond even either of those.
  Sorry to be a bit of a realist here, but threatening to kill a precocious student unaware of forbidden applications of magic is a bit harsh. When children wield such great power as to upend society and they are naive and unable to even comprehend the ramifications it just gets me.
  Sorry to rant. The prose was good and the idea was interesting, it just clashed a lot stronger on me for worldbuilding, premise and execution because I was mentally grinding my gears over every interaction - including how the groundskeeper aided in what should have been obviously a forbidden spell (even if he was non-magical because it is a magic academy and he is of the staff). At no point did the senior in this situation seem to think something was off? Leads me back to the example of building a nuclear reactor (a real example btw) which should set some alarm bells off in his head.
• MK bk-201Royal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  Probably not a fair review since i have not read the base material, but i feel like story by itself lacks a lot explanations, such as why is the spells of the type this girl made forbidden, consequences, etc. would probably be a lot better if it were a couple of pages longer.