Lost Scout

Self-Published

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Description

Glenn was an engineer in his past life. Waking in a new world as a Scout a non-combat class in a world of magic and wonders, Glenn is forced to fight for his life trying to find anything approaching safety. Join him as he explores a new land that seems determined to kill him as he learns what it really means to be lost.

The story is still a W.I.P. I will post a tag after each chapter title, (Final) when they will no longer be changed.

Feedback as always is welcome.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2025
Author: Talver

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
Followers: 6
Views: 4,071

Chapters(16 total)

What readers say about Lost Scout

“Take your time because honestly, Lost Scout is a story brimming with potential, creativity, and heart. This story has massive potential. The worldbuilding is creative, immersive, and alive with detail. The way game mechanics and magical systems are integrat…”
cursedclarkeRoyal Road3.5 / 5

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cursedclarkeRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Take your time because honestly, Lost Scout is a story brimming with potential, creativity, and heart.
This story has massive potential. The worldbuilding is creative, immersive, and alive with detail. The way game mechanics and magical systems are integrated feels organic, not forced and when it leans into this, it truly shines. Glenn’s inner thoughts and modern perspective create a compelling contrast with the world around him. Alica, in particular, is a fantastic supporting character. Her voice is consistent, grounded, and carries a lot of emotional weight.
That said, the story is fighting against itself. The biggest issues are technical:
Grammar and Proofreading: Typos, misspellings, and punctuation issues are rampant, and they’re actively killing the momentum. Basic errors (like “minuets” instead of “minutes”) pull the reader out of the scene again and again. This story deserves clean prose. If self-editing isn’t your strength, bring in a beta reader or grammar tool or even better, go to Bookfox on YouTube. His channel has excellent craft tips and checklists for self-revision and prose polish. It would genuinely take this project to the next level.
Avoid Opening Chapters with a Wake-Up Scene: Beginning with someone waking up is one of the most common, and least engaging, openings in fiction. If it’s intentional for thematic reasons, make it absolutely necessary and fresh. Otherwise, drop the reader into action, mystery, or conflict to hook them faster.
Glenn’s Dialogue is Inconsistent: Sometimes he’s witty and dry, sometimes panicked, sometimes strangely calm. It’s okay to show range, but make sure his voice is anchored. Right now, he flip-flops between tones so often it weakens his believability. Nail down who Glenn is under stress, and have his reactions build over time.
Pacing Is Too Rushed: Important revelations (like a dragon den, a massive forest fire, or interdimensional quests) are thrown out so quickly they lose impact. Slow down. Let the tension build