Gods of Samrasa

Self-Published

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Description

Long ago, in the faraway land of Tarasif, there lived a great King named Samrasa. Under his rule, Nendas Hasafa has grown up, seeking to prove himself in the wars. But with the coming of Samrasa to visit his uncle, a new life is thrust upon him. And as the progress of the war, it becomes clear that events are far beyond the control of any man...

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2024
Author: WilliamGabriel10

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.2/ 5.0
Followers: 2
Views: 4,002

Chapters(21 total)

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Community Reviews(3)

TreesworthRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This story is just starting out and get the sense that WilliamGabriel has some really big ideas for it. He promises a world which is full of conflict where the politics and religion of the world seem to be involved in an intricate dance that is intriguing in its potential.
I am really impressed with the volume of William's other works and I’m sure if you liked his last books you’ll enjoy this one!
Style - The punchy and really direct conversations between the characters in the first chapters is refreshing. Their interplay is a great way to provide exposition and the conversational structure of the first few chapters flow effectively.
Story - The story so far hints at an incredibly deep world with complicated politics and religion. The names of religions / states and people have a firm theme and are thrown at the reader thick and fast giving an overwhelming sense of a rich world, ready to be explored.
Characters - The first few chapters are multiple characters engaged in quite confrontational discussions. I am looking forward to seeing a change of pace to show some depth to the characters as they develop.
Grammar - Looks sharp, I only found one minor typo.
WordWorksRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Gods of Samrasa seems to have a lot of depth and it is obvious that the author has created a very vast world to work from. It is clear within the first few chapters that the world is huge and that the story will expand significantly!
Style: One very interesting part of the style of Gods of Samrasa is the inclusion of footnotes at the end of some chapters. They add some mysticism and intrigue the reader to wonder about whether the narrator is also a character in the world. It also adds some depth and background while hinting at further development down the line.
The way that sentences are broken up is also interesting, it makes the chapters more digestible. It's easy to read through without getting lost in dense paragraphs. The author also includes a great deal of description and setting the scene is a strong point in this work!
Grammar: Grammar is the area that could use some help in Gods of Samrasa. There are some errors that could use editing. Overall, I don't think it affects the content of the story except in some spots where it can be hard to determine who is speaking. It does not hurt the story quality significantly, but cleaning up some typos and punctuation would help. As mentioned above, the smaller paragraphs make the story easier to read and I appreciate that the author keeps sentences tight without running on. Writing description without droning on or crafting confusing sentences is a positive regarding the grammar in Gods of Samrasa.
Story: The story in Gods of Samrasa is interesting, there is very deep lore that the author is slowly unveiling. There is clearly a massive amount of history and legend in the world of the story and it will be very interesting to see how it unfolds. The interplay between mortals and gods is very cool and how that connects with the politics of the world is very interesting. There is a ton of depth and a huge world to explore here. I think that's the biggest strength of the story!
Character: The author introduces several inte
KaiWhiteGSDRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Let's dive into this epic saga and break it down, shall we? Buckle up, because we're in for a ride through political intrigue, divine interventions, and some accidental chapter duplication.
Style: The author's got a knack for creating an immersive world with some seriously cool fantasy elements. A fortress in a mountain surrounded by a whirlwind? That's some top-shelf imagery right there. The writing style is generally solid, with a good balance of description and dialogue. However, it sometimes leans a bit heavy on the "tell" side of "show, don't tell," especially when it comes to character motivations and world-building. That's okay though because I evidently have that same issue. There's room for improvement in painting more vivid pictures through sensory details and letting the reader discover things organically.
One area that needs particular attention is the dialogue. It can be a bit choppy and abrupt at times, with characters speaking in short, disconnected sentences. For example:
"A result of people believing they will work," said Taha as they neared the boarding house. "The 'Gods' everyone sees are mass hallucinations. They are a result of the collective unconscious. Or an elaborate hoax.
"Doesn't matter to me.
"They do not exist.
"Anyway, it doesn't matter what I believe. We've got to get out of here and fast. Tamar will be after us soon." They found their room, got their things together, and left after paying their fair.
This staccato style can make conversations feel unnatural and disjointed. Smoothing out these exchanges and allowing for more natural flow would greatly enhance the reading experience.
Story: Plot-wise, we're looking at a complex political fantasy that's shaping up to be pretty darn intriguing. The story kicks off with a bang in the prologue, throwing us right into the action with Taha bound and disoriented. From there, we dive into a world of scheming nobles, religious conflicts, and divine avatars. The pacing can be a bit uneven at time