Forsaken By Humans

Self-Published

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Description

"I'll kill them! All of them! I'll even become a demon king if the whole humanity tries to stop me!"

Everyone dreams of being the best knight who protects the Vraecia empire. But it doesn't really matter to the 8 year old Noy now. All he wants to do is tear apart that empire, and painfully kill the emperor and all those involved who betrayed and killed his family.

This is my first ever novel. So, do point out mistakes and any other things that I am doing wrong.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2022
Author: Blue Xenon

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Rating: 3.3/ 5.0
Followers: 8
Views: 2,949

Chapters(11 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

Lord Baron BearRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
I don't usually do reviews but I think this story deserves one.
To start this novel is still very new so things could change; but so far it seems to be a power fantasy which I love. Powerful characters that dominat everyone around them has always appealed to me.
This novel is hard to rank for me because I see the potential but there are a few flaws.
The overall plot is the standard family murdered I want revenge cliché. And from there the story goes about where you think it would. And that come with it's usual problems. I don't think this is bad but you shouldn't come here looking for some brand new idea.
The other negatives are the writing seems a little stiff and awkward nothing the author won't fix with time and experience.The mc also gets pretty lucky with various things. And the chapters are really short. As I've only read up to chapter 6 that's pretty much all I have.
A few ideas to fix the problem's would be to combine some chapters to make them longer.
And have the mc not get as lucky as he has. A little luck is cool but so far it feels like power is just falling into his hands. Even if he trains really hard having to many things go his way just because is a big turn off. For example instead of him becoming a magic swordsman because he happened to drink some super rare magic water. How about his teacher teaches him a way that humans don't know about.
To the Author I don't wanna come off as negative as I enjoy your story so far I just wanted to give a little feed back.
Ps- sorry if the review isn't to good not used to doing this. Hope you keep writing.