Children of the Sun

Self-Published

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Description

Abigaël Chase, an ordinary physicist with an ordinary life on Earth got transported to another world. A world of magic and war, a world where death was never very far. She unexpectedly survived for many years thanks to a hidden power she didn't think she had. The same power that many people, gods and demons alike, wanted to annihilate no matter the cost. Hunted and cornered, Abigaël bet everything on a daring move which nearly ended up in her death. Having acquired a new body, Abigaël must do everything in her power to return to Earth. For Earth was in danger and only herself held to key to its survival.

WARNING : It will contain mature content. I checked LitRPG not because there will be game-elements (pop up screen from the "system", the god or something like that) but because of the world mechanic itself (there will be level up, quest/mission, guild, etc?).

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: BraveHeart

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Rating: 5.0/ 5.0
Followers: 3
Views: 2,714

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OpCrystalRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I almost passed this one up. If I'm honest, I had zero expectations going into this, partly because your synopsis is hella cliché, but also because you didn't capitalize your title right. It looks sloppy and amateurish, and I went into this expecting the same from the writing. The title is the first thing people see, it's a first impression, ans if that impression is bad, people won't even bother checking if their impression was well founded or not.
Having said all that, I'm enjoying this story quite a lot so far. Grammar is good, world building is pretty fantastic so far. Gotta admit, first thing I usually do when reading a new fantasy type story, is try to poke holes in the world building. Yours is pretty solid though, magic elements are well ordered, classifications are well thought out, various realms and planes are well ordered and classified. There aren't any glaring plot holes I've seen so far.
Characters are good, so far I would just say there are too few, and really the only mentioned ones besides dear old MC are nobodies that get forgotten within a chapter. I'm just chalking it up to it being only at 8 chapters including the prologue at the time that I'm writing this. Though I will mention the whole fiasco with the fire princess in the forest feels like it ended far too quickly for me; like it might as well had never been there and the story would have progressed fine. From the MC's standpoint it was ended cleanly and definitively, the girls will never bother her again. From a readers perspective, not enough conflict, once their memories were altered, it basically removes any possibility of them being any sort of plot point, so why include them at all?
TL;DR - Puntuate your title, looks sloppy. Great work so far, but rather early to make any definitive judgment on storyline