Twisted Destiny [OLD DRAFTS READ NEW REWORK]

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Description

"In a reality forced on him twisted by fate, redemption comes at a deadly cost."

Alexis watched, powerless, his friend killed by the devil's claws.Above them, the sky shattered, revealing a monstrous, titanic eye and the world plunged into darkness.

Alexis awoke in a pitch-black cave, his past just scattered fragments of pain and half-remembered faces. Worse yet, a monstrous creature snacking on him, gnawing at his flesh as he struggled to remember who he was.

Now, haunted by fractured memories of a distant past and family which came back every time he battled to death, Alexis stumbles back into a grim reality drenched in blood, death, and monsters, all for a way back.

What to expect:

[+] Slow-burn dark progression fantasy, with an awesome diverse power system.

[+] Strong MC that slowly finds his way to absolute power.

[+] MC is male. There are no romance plots planned for the first few books and ofc no harem.

[+] Most Important of all he has a kitten overlord later in the story.

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Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2024
Author: Lightxis

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
Followers: 854
Views: 119,258

Chapters(98 total)

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Community Reviews(5)

Camadt (Alex Hancock)Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Overall 5/5
This is a dark tale of having to push past your limits to survive while starting with nothing but what you can kill. If that sounds like your type of story, I highly recommend you chack this out!
Character 5/5
Alexis Drakesier holds the main focus through the first part of Twisted Destiny in an I Am Legend kind of way, except trust me, you won’t cry for the dog. The MC starts off without knowing who he is or how he got where he starts. It quickly becomes apparent that this is the aftermath of a “fight” that was more of a thrashing. But through sheer determination, Alexis claws his way forward with grit and determination that promises that this will be a grand story about rising to the challenge and overcoming adversity.
Grammar 5/5
No complaints here. Lightxis is spot on with their descriptions and wording.
Story 5/5
The story is one of coming back from nothing, almost on the first day of the post-apocalypse kind of way.
Style 5/5
You know when you’re wincing and feeling the pain that the author is doing a good job, and let me tell you, I HURT after reading this. Lightxis does such a good job of describing the environment that it felt like I was really there, which I was very thankful that I wasn’t.
I.luv.AstolfoRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Twisted Destiny is not a story for the faint of heart. From the opening scene, you’re thrust into a brutal world where survival is a bloody, desperate struggle. The atmosphere is thick with tension, and Alexis Drakesier’s journey pulls you into a relentless battle against not only the hostile world but his own shattered memories. The rawness of the writing, paired with vivid descriptions, makes every fight feel visceral and every setback sting.
Above was what I felt from the immersive story telling's and the potential of the story, Now some thoughts and nitpicks.
I really love how well the actual grimdark scenes has been portrayed especially with how the main character has to harvest stuff from the monster himself finding all the things that could be butchered from a monster, I loved that part. The fights were good quick fast paced.
The things that I felt bad was the execution of the story, some chapters felt unnecessary and info dumpy... Do note that I loved the concept with shattered reflections if they were rare not every few chapters.
All in all I am liking the story and on Patreon we actually get some more into power system. Which is good just a little way to slow. Nothing that can't be improved.
John Stax (Fobywoby)Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Alright, let’s talk about this. This start was in-tents, practically camping, how intents it is.
This piece grabs you by the guts and doesn’t let go, much like the scene it starts with.
The writing is raw, visceral, and relentless in how it pulls you into the scene. You don’t just read it; you feel it. The imagery is so vivid it practically splashes blood on your shoes.
From the gnashing teeth to the smell of decay, you’re right there in the cave, suffocating on the rot while trying not to gag.
Come prepared and with a plastic sheet for splash.
I haven't gotten too far into the meat and potatoes of the story, so can't review that side with much specifics.
It’s got this steady, deliberate pace that mirrors the main character’s struggle. Every detail, every slice, every crunch, drives home just how desperate and grounded the fight for survival is.
It’s got a gritty, determined edge you want in a survival story. The protagonist’s thoughts are raw and unfiltered, but they’re also laced with this biting self-awareness.
In short, this piece is brutal in all the right ways. It’s messy, it’s intense, and it leaves you as breathless and battered as the protagonist. It makes you feel something, even if what you’re feeling is a mix of dread and the sudden need to check behind you. Solid work.
Christian425Royal Road
★★★ 3.0
The grammar and punctuation in the current chapter, the chapter between five and six, is horrendous! Run-on sentences, a serious lack of commas, and I've even noticed several instances in prior chapters where the same sentence is repeated twice. It's making it difficult to follow along and it ruins any chance of getting immersed in the storytelling.
I know these chapters have already been edited, but they need to be overhauled in a big way if you want to keep new readers. I'm going to give this story a few more chapters. If I can't focus on the actual story, mostly because I'm getting distracted by poor grammar, punctuation or other such things, I'll probably abandon this book.
Also, the flashbacks don't seem real to me. As someone who suffers from them, I don't get a real sense of emotion from the MC when his memories surface. Something about them just feels off. I'm not sure I would classify them as flashbacks. If the story picks up and the writing improves, then I'll definitely come back and edit my review of the story. If not, then I'll leave it as is. I feel like the story had potential. Hopefully, the author can fix things up a bit.
younghustla917Royal Road
★★ 2.0
Overall 2/5
I came to Twisted Destiny with really high hopes and was pleasantly surprised on how well done some of the prose was, unfortunately the story is constantly interrupted by unnecessary flashbacks and an annoying need to expand on things that were particularly irrelevant. There were a few inconsistencies as well, such as when his bone swords randomly became steel.
Concept 4/5
There seems to be a very good outline of a story here, I think the problem is with execution and showing, not telling the reader what is happening. I've only read up to chapter 17 and I feel like there's been a flashback almost every other chapter. I understand that the MC has lost his memories and he gets them back that as he gets more experience, but the rapid pace that the flashbacks ruins takes away from the narrative spark that these flashback are suppose to be.
Style 3/5
As a dark fantasy story, the prose and the writing style fit perfectly but the early use of too many Is in a paragraph is evident in the first few chapters. This is a serialized story and while I can understand going at a slow pace to get your setting laid out perfectly, there are entire chapters that shouldn't exist.
For example, the two chapters explaining whats's found on the dead elf should maybe be one chapter. the surrounding paragraphs makes it seem like you were trying to meet a character count.
Character 1/5
The character is just too bland and cookie cutter fantasy for me. Only reason I didn't give it a zero is because the magic system was building up to something that might've been unique.
He's a Prince with a stern and cold mother and a loving & close group of family.