Primordial Ascension - Sybil: A LitRPG Adventure - Stubbed!

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Sybil Book 1: Primordial Ascension onKindle Unlimited

Magic is fading, and humanity is at the brink of extinction.

Sybil lived and breathed the life of a miner, delving deep into monster-infested caverns and perilous shafts, risking her life to unearth Relics of an ancient past for food and shelter. That is until one day, she discovers a Relic that would change her fate from a simple miner to an Ascended ⁠— a Relic that connected her to the magic that was once lost.

[You have acquired the aspect of Fallen Flames.]

A Relic that gave herfreedom.

Cover art by Kaimo commissioned byMelasDelta.

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Status: Ongoing
Year: 2023
Author: Azrie

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Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
Followers: 2,136
Views: 162,387

Chapters(14 total)

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NoddixRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
From the beginning Sybil is in constant survival mode and faces challenges from starvation to monsters, forgotten mysteries and machinations behind the scenes. As we follow Sybil along we slowly discover more about the world she lives in and the system she uses.
The story is fast paced with occasional respites. There are no big Grammar mistakes that stopped me from enjoying the story. Like mentioned in other Reviews there are some scenes that could use more polishing, but then this is a webstory and not an edited book and for that the overall quality is good.
damusic2meRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Really nice story so far. It's frequently updated, easy to read, not going all over the place. Easy light read, but draws you in. Thank you for this on Azrie, I love te see where this story goes.
The litrpg inner 'feeling' for certain updates is not my thing, but the setting is great.
IdrcanywaysRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I love this story! The darker setting is refreshing and I'm always a sucker for hope prevailing in hopeless situations. You can really feel the inspirations from souls-likes in the writing and mechanics of the world which is something I didn't know I needed till now. Definitely worth the read!
MDWRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Sybil isn't nothing special if not for her determination. In a dying world where magic is soon to be forgotten, she alone holds a piece of a cryptic puzzle.
[...] Meet me at the end of the world.
But the world has already ended. Humans are pariahs. Cast into the underground, hunted by monsters too strong to defeat. They scrape and mine the dregs of an old civilization. Trinkets that might be toys to the ancient ones, now priceless treasures.
One girl will fight against demons, both inner and outer.
Azrie is known for making grounded, believable, and real characters. I'm eager to see where this story will go.
CrowardRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
If you glossing through the reviews to find out if you should read the story, then yes, you should read Sybil.
Okay, let's start with grammar before I beging rumbling. It is fine, there are some mistakes here and there that got me confused for a moment, but I believe most people will hardly care or even notice. I, for one, just spotted a few because I was reading at a snail's pace 'cuz of reasons. The story flows well, so who cares?
So, let's talk about everything else, and the things I really care about.
Right now, I am loving the setting. If there was something I was lacking to read, it was a LitRPG set into a darker fantasy world than the usual, and Sybil is scratching that itch quite nicely. This catastrophic event that led the world to a retrocess, one that, mind you, we don't know the real real cause, is a big bonus too. It makes the story more than only grinding for numbers and become some kinda of god — we've got things to unravel as we read.
That said, early chapters were a bit though to get through, mostly pecause of the distinct point of views. Some were really nice (Overseer), but some I felt were there just to fill the word count, and the story would have progressed and flowed nicely without them. However, once things picked up some pace (chapter 12-ish I think) I just finished the remaining chapters in a blink.
As a character, Sybil is still a bit lacking for me (although I love how her name also, sort of, connects with the theme of fate), maybe because she is just following in her father's steps and doesn't really know what she wants to do. However, it is still pretty early in the story, so I am not that concerned too. Now, the mysterious and somewhat nonchalant figure that is her father is another matter — and I personally love him and am ready to call him daddy.
By the way, I am eagerly waiting with my fingers crossed for him to turn out to be the last enemy. Maybe Sybil has to kill him to rebuild the Golden Era, or some shit like that. The daddy be
chaogoesmuRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
If you are looking for combat and systems you are in luck. The combat is very well described and manages to stay tense without too much deux ex. If you are looking for that stop reading this review and go read it, it's phenomenal at that.
That said the world and character building is extremely slow it may as well have only one character so far through all the chapters I've read and mc goes full murderhobo. If asked about either of those things I'd say other series have managed to create more in a tenth of the time. World's doomed magic dimension hole got stoppered everything go down the hole, and people are evil, that's literally all you need to know and the author is not putting any more effort into it while there's a fight to write about.
Not for me as I'm more character and world focused but for its intended audience of combat junkies wanting a dnd session in book format it's really just that good at what it does.
milkman7121Royal Road
★★★ 2.5
A good idea, wonderful worldbuilding, bogged down by copious exposition and unexplained instincts that of course turn out to be right.
I don't know if it is intentional, but a character,
the dad
seems like the author is trying to make them sympathetic, but they come across as just an abusive dick.
Clean up the exposition, let us see the characters interact before the inciting incident, and I'd likely love the rewrite, but the preventable issues bog this down too much for me to enjoy it.
Hellothere_1Royal Road
★★★ 2.5
The worldbuilding, premise and setup of this story all sounded amazing and appear really interesting from what I've read so far, and I also haven't noticed any major mechanical issues but for me it's all being brought down by the main character essentially being a bland as fuck murderhobo.
Example (very mild spoilers):
Early on in the story one of the mine supervisors realizes that in order to still be alive, Sybil must have found a relic and kept it to herself rather than handing it in as ordered. This provkes a strong emotional reaction in him that by doing so Sybil has betrayed not just the mine, but also humanity as a whole, which is heavily reliant on relics to survive.
This of course raises the question how Sybil thinks about all of that:
Does she feel that due to her enslaved status she doesn't owe her masters anything?
Does she just not care about humanity's fate?
Does she think her own quest takes precedence?
Does she think the whole thing about owing humanity is just propaganda?
Does she think the prospect of freedom is worth the risk of having to fight people if she is discovered? Or does she not worry about that because she thinks her chance of discovery is low?
The answer is that we just don't know because Sybil never consciously thinks about it at all. It's like she doesn't even know that she's supposed hand relics over, or that not doing so might put her life at risk, even though digging for relics is literally her job as a slave and she's stuck in a mine with only one way out.
And when she is eventually confronted,
she just calmly murders the fuck out of several supervisors without any emotional reaction.
There's no regret or guilt at having to kill another human being to keep her freedom and dignity, no vindication at getting revenge against the people who kept her a slave, not even any comment about not feeling anything or not knowing what to feel about the act, no nothing.
She just happily notes that she got lots of XP from it and moves on.
All of
RelicoRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
Lack of character development. lack of protagonist development. Lack op protagonist survival instinct even when in face of death. with is a lot. And enemy there, injured. and enemy beast here get clawed and chewd still don't try to avoid then get pinned all the time. which is in almost every encounter other thankilling mosters lower then mc. also mc is so bland. and world development is maybe good but lots of pieces is missing. and timeline is also chaotic. and there mc's point destribution, i mean its okay for be agile for magic user. but mc is using pickaxe to combat in close quarters but spend only 2 points to strengh. which she is complaining lot dense in start of the story. which means it's weight a lot. still keep using picaxe a lot. and endurance isn't getting anything. why not? mc is getting mutiliated every time while facing anything a bit stronger than her. and able to survive 5 day's without water and food. still don't ration thast she got from humans when she was knew she wasn't going back s quickly.
Well lastly it needs lot of development. mc at start seems like will be a good character. but as story proggress she turns out greed for power up so quickly and the ever present approval of daddy. and lastly "Strong Plot Armor".
EveningRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
After finishing chapter 10 I can say that this story feel very forced and for some reason just pushed main protagonist to do dumb stuff. Why is she suicidal trying to go to places when she should be going back to camp as fast as she can. Why is the supervisor dumb and does not help her and trys to take her back after first meeting he was legit told to get her back like why? Also on second meeting why is she killing people whe she can just try to talk it out or something??? Why is the guy asking wierd stuff when she clearly said she going back. Could of just said to give back relicts if they so needed instanly or be smart ask about them then if needed ask for her to give those and after if needed they can ask her to strip and be searched by a woman if needed or acctully talk it out like legit this is very porly explained and actions done are dumb that anybody in power and in dangerous situation would not do.
I do like premise of story but it needs a rewrite and real human interaction and choices that don't feel illogical to a reader (pushing yourself deeper in mine for example and trying to strip people naked in middle of dangerous area) and remove pointless murder. Like legit why would protagonist kill supervisor with zore guilt. ( don't know if there is no guilt but I sure as hell bet there is none cause this story feels predictable ) also it would be nice if things were more planned before writting cause I'm very lost in what's going on in the story what protagonist morals are what she wants to do, why is she doing the things she's doing?