Lord of the skies

Self-Published

Community Rating

Description

A young man grows being shunned for being different, he only has a few friends and his family.

When a system arrivesin a world, everything changes.

What would you do if a system that says it's going to save everyone, throws you at a jungle?

What happened to his family? Are they alive?

Find out following the steps of Bryan Fulgur.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2019
Author: Guimaros

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.7/ 5.0
Followers: 142
Views: 71,236

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Community Reviews(3)

Nomad1791Royal Road
★★★ 3.0
Needs a editor. Worlds ok characters are ok, Grammer mistakes in every chapter some simple and easy to overlook others bit more jaring. Overall 5/10 you got talent and a decent imagination just need to polish up good luck 👍
RyancostRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
You need and editor. So many past tense mistakes. Plural mistakes as well. Decent afternoon read. It has potential but you are moving too fast. Like summarizing a story. Characters have no depth. Their friend samuel is just like a polyfiller. Do not write to finish the story, write to fill the world with characters and background stories.
chakforRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
The premise of the story is pretty basic. A system happens, a couple is split up, guy goes through a tutorial and finds the girl, yada, yada.
Overall: There's potential, but it needs polish to shine.
Style: Basic, nothing to write home about.
Story: Again, nothing overly original, but it's Gamelit so that's pretty forgivable.
Grammar: Bad. There are mistakes all over the place. There are some very awkward word choices that make me think that it's being written by somebody that learned English as a second language (if this is the case I extend kudos to the author for their attempt and hope they keep practicing!). There is a plethora of mistakes in tense, as another reviewer has stated. Don't swap between first and third person perspectives.
Characters: Completely forgettable. They're like cardboard cutouts. Take some time and actually think about each character and their motivations.