Beast Wars: Echos of a Lost home

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In his final year of high school, Francis Robinson seized his last opportunity to confess his feelings to the girl he had admired for three years, however, his courage led him to an unexpected revelation: she was already involved with the rich kid school bully.

Devastated by this revelation, Francis' emotions overwhelmed him. Leading to a fatal accident as he crossed the street in a daze, but instead of an afterlife, Francis finds himself awakening in a mysterious room.

While just looking forward he sees a middle-aged man with round glasses as having a lit Cigar in one hand and the other busy writing down inside a book like many other books kept in a large pile on the counter.

Book links for Book 1:Beast Wars: Echoes of a Lost Home - The Quivering Quill

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Status: Ongoing
Year: 2024
Author: Harem lover

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Rating: 4.0/ 5.0
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Chapters(33 total)

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“So, found this material by random redirects from other materials, and was not disappointed. Definitely something to put on a follow list for the upcoming chapters and, hopefully, grand story. Will start with easy topic Grammar: encountered some rare misspel…”
NolanDaneworthRoyal Road4.0 / 5

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NolanDaneworthRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
So, found this material by random redirects from other materials, and was not disappointed. Definitely something to put on a follow list for the upcoming chapters and, hopefully, grand story.
Will start with easy topic
Grammar: encountered some rare misspellings, not more than one or two per 1-2 chapters. Though rare, they may break pace of reading, since nature of those mistakes are completely different words because of bizarre typos. Also I think some sentences could use additional commas to separate structures since some dialogues can feel like monotonous wordings, as if lacking intent and stress on particular emotion. So I give 4 stars.
Which leads to
Style: sentences and entire paragraphs quite often, in my opinion, worded and structured in a really unusual way. I had to stop and reread things to get whether or not I understood correctly. This might be entirely personal thing, since I'm not very versed in many different writing styles. Entire story is written in kind of outsider-POV, we are just witnesses of actions and little to none glimpses on internal dialogues/thinkings. Putting 4.5 stars.
And now we move to serious things
Story: right off the bat we start with protag finding himself in ethereal place/limbo/whatever-that-place-is and going through reincarnation, almost instantly, by the god. After that we immediately placed in action
of a racial war, more like genocide even
. And I dont know how to describe it, but everything feels both very rushed and turtle-slow at the same time: we are going through 2 Significant timeskips,
completely missing out on characters childhood and youth.
, yet simultaneously each action sequence take several chapters. In just 21 chapters we have only like 3-4 Days worth of story progression
while the story in itself progressed whole 19 years
. The "prologue" takes 1 day worth of story, but spans in 7-9 chapters - almost half the currently written story. I would prefer 1 extra chapter between each timeskip to get us some time f