What I'll Become

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2018

Author

Allseph2

• A genuine smile
  Aug 10, 2018
• Jackson
  Jul 29, 2018
• Courage
  Jul 14, 2018
• My First Savior
  Jul 1, 2018
• Sarai
  Jun 27, 2018
• The Girl
  Jun 18, 2018
• We're Okay
  Jun 7, 2018
• Shame
  Jun 4, 2018
• A decision.
  Jun 1, 2018
• Nightmares
  May 31, 2018
• The Boy Part 4
  Jan 27, 2018
• The Boy Part 3
  Jan 22, 2018
• The Boy Part 2
  Jan 19, 2018
• The boy part 1
  Jan 17, 2018
• A Horror
  Jan 17, 2018
• Life
  Jan 13, 2018
• I Found a Purpose
  Jan 11, 2018
• My Loss of Faith
  Jan 10, 2018
• My Awkward Beginning 1
  Jan 10, 2018

Reviews

Community Reviews(2)

• God_is_GoodRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  This story is portrayed in a really unusual format- simply giving us a few paragraphs at a time, each one rich with meaning and emotion.  Every word of it really made me think about life in a deeper way- an unusual way.  This story is very short as it is, but it's certainly worth giving it a try.  I think it will touch you in ways deeper than you might expect.
• CultivatingCrippleRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  First of all, I'd like to say these 4.0 stars were given by heart. I truly believe I haven't wasted my time reading this. It was interesting in a way.
  While the character is pretty much the entire plot, the biggest asset of this work in my oppinion is the pacing. I don't know if it's just me that thinks like this or if the author even intended for it to happen the way I'm portraying, but the flow of the narrative really adds to the way I perceived the entire thing.
  The chapters are extremely short, character lines are mixed in between the descriptions and often commas are misplaced or even lacking. It should bother me, especially the later, but it doesn't because the MC's world and mind are so fucked up that it feels natural to be barraged by heavy thoughts from such an unstable mind. His feelings come crashing with no sign of stopping and the text is so speedy that I have no time to process what's going on before jumping to the next sentence, and I know it's gonna be fucked up, I know it's only gonna get worse but then the chapter ends and I have to click next.
  This buildup of tension makes me want his suffering to end as much as he does, and I don't know if he's going to be happy, sad, even more broken or actually die at the end - hell, sometimes I really think he should pull that trigger and be done with it. I need to know how it's gonna end.
  Now then, to its shortcomings.
  I've mentioned that the passages go very fast, but it's so fast that details get lost in between. There are things mentioned on previous chapters that I didn't even bother remembering, especially physical descriptions. In comparison to his thoughts, they have zero impact in my oppinion and only serve as transitions to what is actually important. At the beginning it's alright, but when the author gives longer chapters I see more details which are pointless to mention.
  About the commas, they add to the experience, but even then, their "misplacement" should be planned more carefully.
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