Venerable (Warhammer 40,000 / WH40K)

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2022

Author

Wong40k

• CH.06 CONVOY
  May 29, 2024
• CH.05 THE CLASH
  May 29, 2022
• CH.04 CONTACT
  May 25, 2022
• CH.03 VILLAGE
  May 22, 2022
• CH.02 DEEP STRIKE
  May 19, 2022
• CH.01 AWAKENING
  May 16, 2022

Reviews

Community Reviews(5)

• CareerpancakesRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Classic tale of Space Marines vs Orks. Serves as a brisk introduction to the setting to see if the reader wants to learn more before they invest in something meatier. A short story that would not be too out of place next to official publications of similar length and purpose.
• Frosty I. FrostRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  The title says it all, Vaax is a gigachad. Cunning, strong AF and praises the Emperor. More of this please!
  Also, using an ork to bash other orks is hella creative and I loved every second of reading this story. And for real, an Iron Hands successor being entombed in a Dreadnaught Armor should be a dream come true. Flesh is weak? How about becoming a walking, talking death machine made out of adamantium?
• Kio-chanRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Grammar:
  The narrative demonstrates a proficient command of grammar, with clear and concise sentence structure throughout. The use of descriptive language effectively conveys the atmosphere and tone of the story, enhancing the reader's immersion in the world of the Iron Lords. Dialogue is punctuated appropriately, and there are minimal errors in spelling and punctuation.
  Overall, the grammatical execution of the story is commendable, contributing to a smooth reading experience and allowing the reader to focus on the unfolding narrative without distraction.
  Story:
  "The Iron Lords Chapter" presents a compelling narrative set within the expansive universe of Warhammer 40,000. The story immerses the reader in the grim darkness of the far future, exploring themes of duty, honor, and the eternal struggle against xenos threats.
  The pacing of the story is well-managed, with tension steadily building as the protagonist, Dreadnought Vaax, embarks on a deep strike mission to confront the Ork menace. The narrative effectively captures the atmosphere of anticipation and apprehension as Vaax descends into the chaos of battle, encountering unexpected challenges along the way.
  The incorporation of details about the Iron Lords Chapter, such as their strict adherence to the teachings of the Codex Astartes and their disdain for xenos species, enriches the world-building and adds depth to the story. The use of Warhammer 40,000 terminology and lore enhances the authenticity of the setting, appealing to fans of the franchise.
  Overall, "The Iron Lords Chapter" delivers an engaging and action-packed story that will captivate readers familiar with the Warhammer 40,000 universe while also offering an exciting introduction for newcomers to the series.
  Character:
  The characterization in "The Iron Lords Chapter" is primarily focused on Dreadnought Vaax, the protagonist, who emerges as a stoic and formidable warrior of the Iron Lords Chapter. Vaax's dedication to the Emperor and his unwavering c
• Wallfacer 5Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  I loved this story. The writing especially is very strong. Your use of prose and dialogue is very adept, definitely compelling.
  If I had a bit of constructive criticism, I would say that the character of Vaax himself is very odd for an Iron Hands offshoot space marine. He talks quite a bit, he has a temper, and he is super emotive, as much as an entombed space marine can be. This is very great writing, but definitely doesn't track with the Iron Hands and their offshoots. Medusans are super blunt, brief, and described as monotone. Aside from Iron Fathers with their frequency augmented voices, the sons of Medusa don't really talk at all in the fight. Their speech is Laconic. So it gave me a little whiplash. My context for saying this is BL novels like Wrath of Iron.
  Aside from that rather nerdy detail, I loved this story! Please produce more!
• LacunyktRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  [This review was spurred from a forum post.]
  First off, let me be clear that I know nothing about Warhammer 40K, besides its existence. So take all of this with several grains of salt!
  Naturally, I was left a bit hungry from chapter to chapter, since the writing does little to guide those unfamiliar with the video game it's based on. But perhaps that was the intention! It's definitely clear how much the author enjoys Warhammer, and that alone is nice to see. Their love of that fictional world is very evident, and it shines through the writing. I just wish I could understand more about what was going on – but I 100% understand that this story isn't intended for readers like me. I can't speak to how much Venerable is a fanfic, or how much material it pulls from its source. It reads as more of an homage, which is cool! It's definitely creative and interesting. I liked the kind of sci-fi, dystopian atmosphere!
  Content-wise, the story reads as very fast-paced, and slightly disjointed at worst. I'm inclined to say that even if I was a Warhammer expert, I would still wish for smoother pacing, more detail, and more character development. But all the necessary foundations are solid! I was endeared by several characters – certainly Vaax – which made me want to know more about them. It just felt a bit as though as soon as I would get comfortable in a scene, I would be whisked away somewhere else.
  Lastly, syntax/grammar and sentence structure could be tightened up a bit. I think some more varied language would lend itself amazingly to Warhammer's gritty and punchy universe. However, I understand that the author's main focus is on paying homage to the video game itself. And to that, I've no doubt they have done it justice.