Under The Sun
Self-Published
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Description
Thousand-word short story for a past contest.
What profit hath a man for all his toil, in which he toils under the sun?
Information
- Status
- Completed
- Year
- 2023
- Author
- Danchive
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 3.0/ 5.0
- Followers
- 3
- Views
- 216
Chapters(1 total)
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Community Reviews(1)
- RznRoyal Road★★★ 3.0This piece has a pretty straightforward religious theme given the elements, references to the Vatican and what appears be a journey into the Earth. My main concern with the piece is the apparent contradiction in the descriptions of what is exactly going on. It does not make a lot of sense because it does not clearly define how things work - particularly the ending. The choice of the MC being Noah Oppenheimer serves as a clue. Overall, the piece has a good idea and yet the execution and conveying of the important information hasn't dispelled the confusion. Reading it through twice, the problem is the lack of defining the situation in the beginning - as one assumes this is on the Earth's surface. The piece is not bad, just it struggles to reach the reader with its message.