This Life of Sin

Self-Published

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Description

Cindy had spent the vast majority of her short life as a less than wholesome person. Little did she know that the decision to pick a kid's pocket one freezing afternoon would lead her to loosing that miserable life. But that wasn't even the most shocking part, if you could believe it!

Follow Sin on her mission to live a life of comfort (So little comfort to be found) surrounded by cute animals (They are still cute if they can swallow you whole... right?), and lazing around (She will get to be lazy... one day... someday...).

This is originally written on Wattpad :)KitCorbeau (@KitCorbeau) - Wattpad

Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2025
Author: KitCorbeau

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.8/ 5.0
Followers: 60
Views: 12,923

Chapters(19 total)

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DefinitelyNotAReptileRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
First, the story is quite decent. If you're the kind of reader that is here for a story only and can disregard the way it is told entirely then this one might be for you. There are light litRPG elements (which really should be added to the tags, when your character has an in-story status screen you can't really argue otherwise) but they are kept quite surface level and it's a delight to finally read anything litRPG that doesn't derail the pacing by going into pages of detail into the system. The pacing is actually, in general, quite good if a bit on the quicker side of things. The world itself is well built and while it's not anything very creative it serves the story very well and keeps me interested. The characters are mostly well thought up and I am easily getting at least a little attached to some of them. There is also a depth to the main character that is felt throughout the story and it's very nice to see.
Sadly, this story is told with a style and grammar that is a great disservice to it. Usually a middling style doesn't add to a story but it's rare that it drags it down with it this hard. The first person point of view is coupled with dialogue that had me cringe relatively often. The vocabulary is very simple and the descriptions are often dry and too simple to give the reader a good idea of what things might look like. All of this is compounded by the fact that the grammar is atrocious. I have rarely seen words be butchered this badly and consistently. For example, 'clothes' is written as 'cloths' EVERY TIME the word appears in the story. There are often commas where you shouldn't see one and it messes with the flow of reading, and the syntax is either very basic or awkward. I found myself getting so annoyed with the grammar that I questioned more than once if I should continue reading, especially when the author could solve most of the problems with readily accessible software.
In conclusion, if the story gets edited at some point it would be an automatic