The Fledgling of Frostholm

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Zenithor is a master sorcerer at the end of a long life of regrets and losses. Five people stole from him the last ember of hope in his life. Not having the tools to investigate and snuff out these five himself, Zenithor creates Aellaria. She was the product of his anger, born saturated in hate. Reincarnated Fury aimed at five students at Spire, Element's most prestigious sorcerer's college. Will Aellaria drown in college life's pettiness, pain, and hatred? Or can she find hope within Spire's illustrious walls?

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2024
Author: C.Z.Richie

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Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
Followers: 96
Views: 28,768

What readers say about The Fledgling of Frostholm

“Very unique!! I always wanted a reincarnation that came from the effort and skill from the reincarnated. Beautiful story, I like tha characters, keep it up! The fact main hero is not at all overpowered is a bonus too and i love that the main character wins…”
TimIsMyNameRoyal Road5.0 / 5
“This is, on a fundamental level, a difficult story to read. Even through the end of book 1, the story is unsatisfying to a reader and exceptionally confusing. Normally I would have dropped it around chapter 10 or so (once I got a good feel for the story), b…”
luda305Royal Road2.0 / 5

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Community Reviews(2)

TimIsMyNameRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Very unique!! I always wanted a reincarnation that came from the effort and skill from the reincarnated. Beautiful story, I like tha characters, keep it up! The fact main hero is not at all overpowered is a bonus too and i love that the main character wins though skill. I would wish for this to be a more of progression fantasy than revenge story, as the magic system is pretty cool, but thats my personal wants, and dont detract from the story.
luda305Royal Road
★★ 2.0
This is, on a fundamental level, a difficult story to read. Even through the end of book 1, the story is unsatisfying to a reader and exceptionally confusing. Normally I would have dropped it around chapter 10 or so (once I got a good feel for the story), but there were extenuating circumstances and, despite its flaws, there is a good page-turner quality about it that makes you want to see just what will happen.
I'll start with the good.
Character: The characters are very well written and come across quite distinctly. Aellaria's mind is a mess, but that's intentional.
Grammar: No complaints about spelling, punctuation, etc. Near perfect.
Style: This is a significant problem both early on and throughout the book. Despite the grammar being technically correct, the way in which sentences are chosen and put together and then into paragraphs makes the reading feel rather choppy. This doesn't ever go away.
Moreover, the exposition is all over place. There's a lot that we don't need as an audience, and then there's some exposition that never occurs. On the latter, there is at least one major plot hole (discussed below) right from the beginning which is never addressed.
Story: I have a lot to say here
First, I'll start with the synopsis and tagging as I do think they're a bit misleading. So the basic premise is that Zenithor is a master sorcerer who is very old and liable to die soon. 15 months ago, his daughter, who was the equivalent of a high school student, committed suicide. And, in his investigations, Z found out (roughly) that five of her fellow students were responsible for her state of mind that led to her taking her life. He creates a new body (or flesh golem?), and then pulls off an impossible piece of magic to reincarnate himself into this new body (of a young woman), with the intent to attend the college the five students will attend in order to get revenge (or vengeance, it's not entirely clear). Now Aellaria, she's an angry young woman ready to kick some a