The Darkbound Dominion - a litRPG progression fantasy

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Description

When a shadowy infiltrator is betrayed and killed by the very empire he served, he expected to burn in hell for his committed deeds.

But instead of baking in the fiery pits of damnation, he finds himself in the body of a child in an impenetrable, ever-present darkness, not a speck of light in sight.

Using every bit of courage and wit gained from his past life, he tries to survive in this alien world.

However, little does he know, his first steps are just the start of a journey that will lead him through a thousand worlds. On his odyssey, he will encounter countless empires of men, machines, demons, cyborgs, titans, unknown species, and even gods. All connected in the diverse web of worlds known as the Darkbbound Dominion.

Despite the overwhelming technologies, armies, and might of these civilizations, he will learn even the mightiest empires and gods steer clear of the cosmic nebulae of darkness surrounding the dominion, for within the dark lie terrible, terrible monsters.

* This story has a proper litRPG system with all the associated RPG parameters but they're going to come up in later chapters

* Rather than the traditional game-like system headed by an omnipotent god, the system in this story is very unique and organic. it is a natural part of the universe and is not led by any god. Every living being (including gods themselves) in the universe is subject to this system.

* The story has a lot of fast paced action scenes with generous amounts of blood and gore so it is fiction for young adults and adults.

* The protagonist starts out as a boy but throughout the course of the story he will grow to an adult.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2023
Author: Observer in the dark

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.0/ 5.0
Followers: 51
Views: 14,998

Chapters(29 total)

What readers say about The Darkbound Dominion - a litRPG progression fantasy

“The start seems promising although I’m pretty biased toward giant bugs lol The premise of a world without any light at night is pretty interesting. I just hope things don’t fall off with the mystery. The protagonist is smart but not over the top and is not…”
Taber singhRoyal Road5.0 / 5
“The story is actually really unique, I've read many litrpgs and this one is definitely unique in its storyline. Being trapped in the dark, not being able to see or really understand what's going on is an interesting setting and plot choice. Some small gramm…”
Jesse TrudelleRoyal Road4.5 / 5

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Community Reviews(3)

Taber singhRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The start seems promising although I’m pretty biased toward giant bugs lol
The premise of a world without any light at night is pretty interesting. I just hope things don’t fall off with the mystery.
The protagonist is smart but not over the top and is not overpowered at all, in fact I’d say he feels weak.
Jesse TrudelleRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
The story is actually really unique, I've read many litrpgs and this one is definitely unique in its storyline.
Being trapped in the dark, not being able to see or really understand what's going on is an interesting setting and plot choice. Some small grammar errors but very minor, easy fixes everywhere.
This story definitely has unique aspects in this genre and I think plot wise it's really well thought out. I'm excited to see where it goes.
Some areas I think could improve is the fluidity of the story. Currently a lot of the story is 'he did this' than 'he did that', or 'he moved here' or a lot of 'he did this action'.
I think you could improve the fluidity of the actions that he's making and add more fluff to make it seem more smooth, in other words making it sound like actions being made are more natural, not more robotic movements. It's kind of tough to explain, but I think adding more fluff and a little more details could be a huge improvement to the fluidity.
The boy is really smart for the environment and I like that we don't really know why he's here. It adds a sense of mystery and I'm interested in seeing where your going with this. The idea that there's creatures lurking in the dark waiting to pounce at any time makes the story tense.
I think that this story has a lot of potential and I encourage you to keep writing, I think you've definitely got something good going on! Keep up the good work.
EldritchPotatoRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
The writing feels clunky. More like a screenplay than a story. It is very much this happens, then this and this and this. The way it's written does not immerse the reader in the world, instead, it provides us with a play-by-play.
Additionally, the formatting is a little weird, with each sentence having its own line. It makes it somewhat hard to read. There is also some head hopping between characters which makes scenes confusing.
I do quite like the setting, alien planets are always fun and the total darkness at night is a cool twist. The MC’s backstory is also fairly interesting though the exposition it is revealed through is a little tedious. The monsters and creatures of this alien planet are also quite fun though I wish they were described a little more.
I really liked the way the colour energy provides different benefits, it's a cool twist I haven't seen done before. Blue being defensive, red being offensive, yellow being speed and such. It's a cool way to depict these abilities.
In conclusion, I really like the setting and system however the grammar definitely brings this story down. If sci-fi LitRPGS are your thing then you may enjoy this. This does have some real potential and if the grammar and structure improve I think it could be quite good.