The Chaos Immortal

Self-Published

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Description

Before the beginning of time, there was chaos. Or rather that was how many thought. The one being that knew the entirety of the matter did not have the thought to correct this. He would rather observe everything in silence.

One day, due to boredoom, he decided to personally experience the universe. He has experienced all yet he is a complete novice at the same time. Read about the epic (or not) adventure following our hero on his adventure.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: nanda322

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Rating: 4.2/ 5.0
Followers: 262
Views: 212,434

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Community Reviews(2)

Forgiv3n324Royal Road
★★★★ 3.5
I like your story, quite a lot honestly, but like stated before super rushed, I feel that because your chapters are short you feel like something worthy of a chapters worth of experience should have occured. Though with your length of chapters you either cram it together and rush it or you write more in detail and it feels like the story goes no where which leaves you stuck, so my advice is either release the same length chapters and go into more detail but release them more often, or write longer chapters that go into proper details of events and scenery less frequently.
( Though me and the other guy agree that it feels rushed dont try to forcefully change that instantly or rewrite or something like that it's a gradual process to prefect writing skills and im guessing that is why you're here to practice.)
- P.S I dont want you to rewrite because im selfish and don't want to wait for you to release enough chapters to catch back up LOL
MastersgtjamesRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
AMAZING PREMISE, lots of potential, only problems I can see are
1. Characters are too shallow/weak. they feel rushed and without any real character.
2. the story is definetly rushed, each chapter so far feels like you crammed 3 or more chapters into one with how empty the descriptions are and how rushed it all feels.
other than those issues, i like the premise, feels like it could be amazing. but needs work.