Strife, Stride, and Thrive (Isekai)
Self-Published
Community Rating
Description
School life wasn't getting any better for Walter. For someone who was fairly average all around, he barely stuck out from the rest of the class. He had a few friends here and there, juggled around a few hobbies and sports, and regularly burnt the candle from both ends.
So when an incident involving some witch, a large glowing circle, and the void occurred in his class it was safe to say he wasn't having the best of times. Stuck in another world with the potential to do whatever it is he wants, Walt decides to better himself, preparing for an uncertain future outside of the mundane. Now given too much freedom.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2022
- Author
- balls 1124
Tags
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.0/ 5.0
- Followers
- 4
- Views
- 1,031
Chapters(3 total)
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Community Reviews(1)
- JusttryingtofindawayRoyal Road★★★★ 4.0This story has some serious poetential. I quite enjoyed both chapters that are currently up however there are some serious things that need fixing.
1) The dialogue is clunky and sometimes inserted into a paragraph. It's hard to know who's speaking and in what tone at several points in the first chapter alone.
2) Pacing. We go from in a school with an unnamed female charcter to a forest with another creature. Then he had amnesia which felt cheap given the previous chapters backstory.
3) Paragraph size. Its either too big with messy dialogue embeded in it or not big or detailed enough for me to feel like it added something meaningful to the story.
All this said it has the bones of something good here which warrants four stars. I will be following along to see if these issues are addressed and I look forward to updating my review to an advanced one in time.