Slaughter Princess: War Against Beasts(dystopian fantasy)

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2023

Author

Lleayaa

• Chapter 48
  Jan 11, 2024
• Chapter 47
  Jan 10, 2024
• Chapter 46
  Jan 9, 2024
• Chapter 45
  Jan 8, 2024
• Chapter 44
  Jan 5, 2024
• Chapter 43
  Jan 4, 2024
• Chapter 42
  Jan 3, 2024
• Chapter 41
  Jan 2, 2024
• Chapter 40
  Dec 7, 2023
• Chapter 39
  Dec 6, 2023
• Chapter 38
  Dec 5, 2023
• Chapter 37
  Dec 4, 2023
• Chapter 36
  Dec 1, 2023
• Chapter 35
  Nov 30, 2023
• Chapter 34
  Nov 29, 2023
• Chapter 33
  Nov 28, 2023
• Chapter 32
  Nov 27, 2023
• Chapter 31
  Nov 26, 2023
• Chapter 30
  Nov 24, 2023
• Chapter 29
  Nov 24, 2023

Reviews

Community Reviews(10)

• Tu ShuaRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  The first two chapters were intentionally paced for world-building purposes, so please continue reading before forming any judgments.
  The novel is dark, as you might have inferred from the title. Spoiler:
  The beast slowly held her up, and with a swift motion; CRUSHACKSHHHH. It instantly tightened its grip and blood spurted everywhere, the ground and buildings around her clearly sprayed
  Style: It's a dark story where you don't know whether this new character will live for another day. "Whether the character is good or bad, does it matter? The world is merciless, and so should we." This is a motto that I like, and I think it would fit the theme of the story quite well.
  Grammar: I only found a few typos here and there, but other than that, it's good.
  Story: The story is compelling. The world is mysterious and dark, as reflected in the title "War Against Beasts."
  Character: The main character is naive at the start, but hopefully, with time, she will grow to adapt to the world. The characters don't have plot armor.
  Overall, the quality is quite good, but if I had one note, it would be that some paragraphs are excessively long.
  [After Chapter 5 is where the true action takes place.]
• storytopia07Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  I am reviewing this after 5 chapters.
  It had me at a female protagonist. What's better? The protagonist has started off on a really good note!
  Character - This is purely based on the protagonist, whom I feel the author has got spot on. It is deceptively simple, but it makes her more realistic and believable.
  Story - A very intriguing story. We all step into a story with an idea on what it might be. But the story so far has managed to go in a very different and more interesting direction. I am very curious to see where it goes from here.
  Style - The pace of the story in the first 2 chapters is quite fast. But after that, the pacing is much better balanced. The focus is more on action, but the emotions and thoughts of the character are captured really well.
  Grammar - I found a few basic grammatical errors, but they reduced quite considerably as the chapters went on.
  Pros – The world is intriguing and captured my interest. The protagonist is easily my favourite part of the story. Hopefully she becomes even better.
  Minor issues – A little fast paced between scenes, otherwise it is flows pretty well.
• TyZomboRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Overall:
  The makings of a great story, just needs a few fixes.
  Style:
  The blunt and direct style really lends well to the tone of the story. It feels like something bad is always lurking around the corner to show itself at any moment which keeps the tension high. Characters and character moments are told instead of shown more than they should, but the prose is good. The gore and carnage are brutally vivid.
  Story:
  Bit of a jarring start and an early timeskip but when the plot truly hits, things really start picking up. The major inciting incident comes down hard and opens up a much wider fantastical world with even greater terrors hinted.
  Character:
  Mia is a bullied and destitute girl with no one to rely on in the world, which makes her easy to root for and wish to see her situation improve but there isn’t much else to her character. At least at the start. Aira is a bit of a mixed bag. She has an understandable and also sad backstory but her reason to look out for Mia seems a bit forced and her attachment happens too quickly. Minor complaints aside, they’re likable and have a presence on the pages.
  Grammar:
  Some formatting errors here and there and page/line breaks where there shouldn’t be but the grammar itself is solid. Significant improvements after chapter 2.
• William FlattenerRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Style
  The writing style is dynamic and frenetic, making for an engaging read. Scenes transition rapidly, maintaining a high energy level throughout the story. This style suits the dark and action-packed nature of the narrative, which may occasionally feel too brisk for some readers.
  Character & Story
  Character development is a standout feature, particularly in the portrayal of Mia Sanju and her mysterious companion. Their evolving relationship, set against a backdrop of personal struggles and bullying, draws the reader in instantly. The characters' complexities and their interactions drive the story, forward.
  Mia's journey is emotionally charged, and it doesn't shy away from violence and upsetting content. The relationship between the primary characters is an oasis from the ugly world around them.
  Grammar
  The grammar and punctuation are competently handled, with an informal formatting style. This approach supports the fast-paced and intense nature of the story with clarity and readability.
  Overall
  This is a compelling dystopian fantasy that delves into themes of revenge, power, and survival. Its dark tone, coupled with a fast-paced narrative and characters ripe for development, makes it a good read. However, its graphic and violent content may not be for everyone. Fans of dark, action-packed stories with deep character exploration will find this series right up their alley.
• caruruRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Style - The narrative style of the book is original and distinct, although needs some polishing and takes time getting used to. Lleyeaa's ability to weave the narrative and contrast the good and bad of humanity is commendable, creating an organic and intriguing world. Some hiccups in formatting and punctuation, the storytelling remains effective and intentional. There's an inconsistency in tense usage, mostly in action-oriented scenes. The pacing initially appears fast but settles into a balanced rhythm. It's very distinct and even the illustrations of every chapter give the story a unique and niche feel.
  Story - The story diverges from expectations in a refreshing way, and in my opinion is the biggest strength of the series. It is dark and gritty. While the overall narrative is solid and intentionally crafted, I did have my concerns about the rapid escalation of events, but the is a stylistic choice that one may look at favorably depending on the reader. The quick succession of significant life changes within a short span of chapters, despite the narrative indicating the passage of a year, in my opinion, risks narrative fatigue and potential character derailment. But I think that's only as a result of the story in it's beginning/world-building stages. It does get intense very fast. Nevertheless, the story's direction has my curiosity and interest, with its approach and delivery.
  Grammar - Grammatical issues are a minor but noticeable aspect of the book. While basic grammatical errors are present, particularly in the earlier chapters, they tend to decrease by the chapter which is a sign that the author is learning with every critique.
  Character development is a highlight, with Aira and Mia being particularly well-crafted. Aira's motivations and backstory, along with her adoptive-older-sister role, are well-developed, making her a standout character. Mia, although less known and intentionally mysterious, shows promise with her unique traits, like her dual-colored hai
• AshtelleRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  The first five chapters were an introduction and backstory of the main character, Mia, who is one of those characters whose everything in life has gone wrong.
  Poor girl, bullied because of her looks, without parents or any guardians. After finally getting a chance at a better life, everything is suddenly taken away by an attack on the village. It's a nice introduction to the revenge story and a world full of strange man-eating beasts.
  There's violence, little girls getting hurt, and a lot of gore. If you like some of them, it's a good read for you.
  The first two chapters are quite hard to read from a technical point of view. Thankfully, the next ones are better, although there are still a lot of problems with punctuation, especially in dialogues.
  There's a lot of telling, especially in the first chapter, that could be a little boring and could be fixed by just showing us what happened later there at the very start.
  From the first chapters, it's hard to tell anything about the main character. I have a feeling we learned more about her companion than Mia. But we knew she had a terrible life and was now traumatized, so we could guess where it would go from there. The prologue shows us a little of how her life would go, so we know from the start to expect a lot of blood.
  Overall, the story needs some work, but it's promising. For the first book, it's good.
• KatIsacsonRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  I was so happy to find a tale featuring a female warrior set in (a world at least partially) inspired by fuedal Japan!
  I, for one, am looking forward to to seeing how a downtrodden street urchin of a girl grows into a warrior princess of legend in this fantasy. I've only read a few chapters thus far, but hope to see the author lean into the Onna-musha (female counterparts to samurai) role as the story heats up.
  The pacing of the language style and some of the turns of phrases are unusual me, so it's taken a bit of time for me to adjust. This may be a regional thing, so other readers may have a different experience than I have in this regard. I'm just taking it all in stride as it's unique style. There are the usual amount of formatting/grammar points that could be edited that one might expect in a web novel's first draft. If you are drawn to the characters in the story, I think you still find it to be an easy read. There are a lot of sections in each chapter so far. You may want to think of them as "jump cuts" (like in film) as you read along.
  The author adds illustrations! As an artist myself, always enjoy that. So far, the illustration at the end of chapter 3 with the twisty figure is my fave.
  Overall, I'm looking forward to learning more about the main characters, flaws and all. For example, finding out that the MC's savior, Aira is "directionally challenged" somehow made her exceedingly endearing to me.
  Haven't gotten to all the slaughtering yet, but I'm sure it will come!
• TheGreatGazpachoRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  [Review Swap at Chapter 5]
  Style & Grammar: I'll lump these together as the problems I noticed tended to be within the paragraphs. Dialogue for multiple characters tended to get bunched up in certain paragraphs, which made it difficult to understand who was talking at which instance. Separating dialogue into their own lines/sentences helps mitigate that. Another thing that happened a lot was switching between past and present tense, especially during more action-oriented scenes. Usually, stick to one or the other, depending on the context of the scene.
  Story: My main concern is that I felt the story escalated a little too quickly, as Mia received two life lifestyle changes within a short amount of chapters. Even if the narrative states that a year has passed, it's still within a short reading window for the reader. This isn't necessarily bad, but constantly doing this could lead to narrative fatigue or character derailment if you intend to introduce more characters on a semi-frequent basis.
  Characters: Of all the characters introduced, I felt that Aira was most developed as we got to understand her motivations for rescuing Mia, along with getting to have her past explained and see her take on this adoptive-older-sister type role. Mia comes at a close second; at this point, not much is known about her, which is made intentional by the story. She has a strange trait of dual-colored hair, the significance of which isn't made clear, providing an interesting mystery. This does mean Mia's characterization will naturally take a backseat to other characters as the narrative unfolds, but she does have a few notable traits so far — so as a character, she's currently fine.
  Overall, the narrative is a bit shaky, but with some work, it can stand proudly on its legs. Keep at it.
• BootsRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  Style and Grammar – 3/5
  Let’s start here because this is where I think the story suffers most. I’m going to treat these as a single unit because they both hook into each other and exhibit a lot of the same weaknesses. First off, the style and grammar isn’t awful, but there are a number of mistakes throughout. Most come in the form of formatting errors, lack of quotation marks around what is clearly dialogue, and a lack of paragraph breaks when there’s a new speaker. These are basic formatting issues that should be addressed before things go live.
  More stylistically oriented, is sentence and paragraph level clutter, for lack of a better term. We’ll frequently have a character say something out loud that we’ve just seen in narration, or vice-a-versa. These sorts of moments really take away from the flow of the writing, and unnecessarily clutter text.
  Further, there’s also frequent head hopping that I’m uncertain is intentional or not.
  Character Score – 3.5/5
  Things get a bit better here. Mia is deeply traumatized, and it shows. Based on what little we see of her life, she acts in a way that is wholly believable. Very few promises are made about her character development, and given the overall tone of the story (more on that in the next section), things could go in a number of different directions.
  The biggest complaint I have about her character is that her inner world is almost wholly inaccessible to the reader. Aside from a few instances where we get her thoughts formatted as dialogue, we’re never really privy to what she thinks or feels about the world around her. The author really feels like they’ve fallen victim to the standard (and imo, bad) common advice of “show don’t tell.” We see Mia cry, or otherwise react to her circumstances, but we’re never given the sort of intimate access to her thoughts and feelings that written fiction is better at delivering than any other medium for storytelling.
  Story Score – 4/5
  This is the part that comes across best, but it’s s
• IZWRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  Style & Grammar:
  The building blocks are there, but it all comes together a little wrong. The style is unusual. As is the grammar. Firstly, the head-hopping is a little jarring. I suspect this issue will resolve itself as the writer continues to practice. There is also the passive voice, the misuse of punctuation, the odd structure of paragraphs, and other such issues, all of which I believe can and will be rectified. Still, as it stands, there is definitely room for improvement on both these fronts.
  Story & Characters:
  I suspect the story is much better than it appears, much of its true quality being lessened by the issues I'd briefly discussed above. It flows well, never stagnating. There is conflict, determination, suffering, companionship, and many other themes explored here. This is mainly done through the characters. Admittedly, there are times when the harshness of the world seems unjustifiably grotesque, but it does well in exploring the needs and wants of the more central characters, who, much like the story, are not effectively portrayed due to the style and grammar.
  Overall:
  It's a good story that's limited by the author's inexperience. However, personally, I can see the bones of a great fiction that is indicative of a good storyteller. A little practice will, in due time, transform this into a gem.