Slaughter Princess: War Against Beasts(dystopian fantasy)

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2023

Author

Lleayaa

• Chapter 48
  Jan 11, 2024
• Chapter 47
  Jan 10, 2024
• Chapter 46
  Jan 9, 2024
• Chapter 45
  Jan 8, 2024
• Chapter 44
  Jan 5, 2024
• Chapter 43
  Jan 4, 2024
• Chapter 42
  Jan 3, 2024
• Chapter 41
  Jan 2, 2024
• Chapter 40
  Dec 7, 2023
• Chapter 39
  Dec 6, 2023
• Chapter 38
  Dec 5, 2023
• Chapter 37
  Dec 4, 2023
• Chapter 36
  Dec 1, 2023
• Chapter 35
  Nov 30, 2023
• Chapter 34
  Nov 29, 2023
• Chapter 33
  Nov 28, 2023
• Chapter 32
  Nov 27, 2023
• Chapter 31
  Nov 26, 2023
• Chapter 30
  Nov 24, 2023
• Chapter 29
  Nov 24, 2023

Reviews

Community Reviews(10)

• Tu ShuaRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  The first two chapters were intentionally paced for world-building purposes, so please continue reading before forming any judgments.
  The novel is dark, as you might have inferred from the title. Spoiler:
  The beast slowly held her up, and with a swift motion; CRUSHACKSHHHH. It instantly tightened its grip and blood spurted everywhere, the ground and buildings around her clearly sprayed
  Style: It's a dark story where you don't know whether this new character will live for another day. "Whether the character is good or bad, does it matter? The world is merciless, and so should we." This is a motto that I like, and I think it would fit the theme of the story quite well.
  Grammar: I only found a few typos here and there, but other than that, it's good.
  Story: The story is compelling. The world is mysterious and dark, as reflected in the title "War Against Beasts."
  Character: The main character is naive at the start, but hopefully, with time, she will grow to adapt to the world. The characters don't have plot armor.
  Overall, the quality is quite good, but if I had one note, it would be that some paragraphs are excessively long.
  [After Chapter 5 is where the true action takes place.]
• storytopia07Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  I am reviewing this after 5 chapters.
  It had me at a female protagonist. What's better? The protagonist has started off on a really good note!
  Character - This is purely based on the protagonist, whom I feel the author has got spot on. It is deceptively simple, but it makes her more realistic and believable.
  Story - A very intriguing story. We all step into a story with an idea on what it might be. But the story so far has managed to go in a very different and more interesting direction. I am very curious to see where it goes from here.
  Style - The pace of the story in the first 2 chapters is quite fast. But after that, the pacing is much better balanced. The focus is more on action, but the emotions and thoughts of the character are captured really well.
  Grammar - I found a few basic grammatical errors, but they reduced quite considerably as the chapters went on.
  Pros – The world is intriguing and captured my interest. The protagonist is easily my favourite part of the story. Hopefully she becomes even better.
  Minor issues – A little fast paced between scenes, otherwise it is flows pretty well.
• LAScottRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Disclaimer: Part of a review swap.
  I’ve gotta say, I love the accompanying art work, it’s really excellent!
  In terms of plot it reminds me a bit of Attack on Titan. The author doesn’t shy away from the macabre and leverages gore to pack an emotional punch.
  One of the best scenes, in my opinion, is when the bullies are being attacked by the beasts. I didn’t feel glee at their deaths, despite them acting like relentless jerks earlier, because it was one of the most humanizing early scenes. Terror is an effective tool that the author has learned to wield.
  The style makes for a very easy read. The author does have a slight tendency to show rather than tell so I might suggest a bit more scene building instead of trauma-dumping.
  The grammar is reasonable. There’s been comments provided to the author to help them make improvements which seems to have been received. I always like to give credit to authors who are trying and willing to take advice. Two things I’ve noticed: sometimes the spacing seems a little buggy and I don’t love the use of ‘----’ in the middle of scenes (it has a tendency to break up a scene and disrupt the flow). Otherwise it’s cleaning up nicely.
  This is a character driven story and I can tell the author really cares for their characters. However, here lies a risk. The main criticism I have has to do with the characters. There’s definitive improvement as I read through the chapters but the characters start fairly one dimensional. There is obvious trauma which adds interest, but it sometimes feels like the characters are defined by their trauma rather than being complex individuals.
  The author has indicated that this is their first story. It’s a wonderful first attempt and I wish them all the best as they continue their writing journey!
• TyZomboRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Overall:
  The makings of a great story, just needs a few fixes.
  Style:
  The blunt and direct style really lends well to the tone of the story. It feels like something bad is always lurking around the corner to show itself at any moment which keeps the tension high. Characters and character moments are told instead of shown more than they should, but the prose is good. The gore and carnage are brutally vivid.
  Story:
  Bit of a jarring start and an early timeskip but when the plot truly hits, things really start picking up. The major inciting incident comes down hard and opens up a much wider fantastical world with even greater terrors hinted.
  Character:
  Mia is a bullied and destitute girl with no one to rely on in the world, which makes her easy to root for and wish to see her situation improve but there isn’t much else to her character. At least at the start. Aira is a bit of a mixed bag. She has an understandable and also sad backstory but her reason to look out for Mia seems a bit forced and her attachment happens too quickly. Minor complaints aside, they’re likable and have a presence on the pages.
  Grammar:
  Some formatting errors here and there and page/line breaks where there shouldn’t be but the grammar itself is solid. Significant improvements after chapter 2.
• William FlattenerRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Style
  The writing style is dynamic and frenetic, making for an engaging read. Scenes transition rapidly, maintaining a high energy level throughout the story. This style suits the dark and action-packed nature of the narrative, which may occasionally feel too brisk for some readers.
  Character & Story
  Character development is a standout feature, particularly in the portrayal of Mia Sanju and her mysterious companion. Their evolving relationship, set against a backdrop of personal struggles and bullying, draws the reader in instantly. The characters' complexities and their interactions drive the story, forward.
  Mia's journey is emotionally charged, and it doesn't shy away from violence and upsetting content. The relationship between the primary characters is an oasis from the ugly world around them.
  Grammar
  The grammar and punctuation are competently handled, with an informal formatting style. This approach supports the fast-paced and intense nature of the story with clarity and readability.
  Overall
  This is a compelling dystopian fantasy that delves into themes of revenge, power, and survival. Its dark tone, coupled with a fast-paced narrative and characters ripe for development, makes it a good read. However, its graphic and violent content may not be for everyone. Fans of dark, action-packed stories with deep character exploration will find this series right up their alley.
• caruruRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Style - The narrative style of the book is original and distinct, although needs some polishing and takes time getting used to. Lleyeaa's ability to weave the narrative and contrast the good and bad of humanity is commendable, creating an organic and intriguing world. Some hiccups in formatting and punctuation, the storytelling remains effective and intentional. There's an inconsistency in tense usage, mostly in action-oriented scenes. The pacing initially appears fast but settles into a balanced rhythm. It's very distinct and even the illustrations of every chapter give the story a unique and niche feel.
  Story - The story diverges from expectations in a refreshing way, and in my opinion is the biggest strength of the series. It is dark and gritty. While the overall narrative is solid and intentionally crafted, I did have my concerns about the rapid escalation of events, but the is a stylistic choice that one may look at favorably depending on the reader. The quick succession of significant life changes within a short span of chapters, despite the narrative indicating the passage of a year, in my opinion, risks narrative fatigue and potential character derailment. But I think that's only as a result of the story in it's beginning/world-building stages. It does get intense very fast. Nevertheless, the story's direction has my curiosity and interest, with its approach and delivery.
  Grammar - Grammatical issues are a minor but noticeable aspect of the book. While basic grammatical errors are present, particularly in the earlier chapters, they tend to decrease by the chapter which is a sign that the author is learning with every critique.
  Character development is a highlight, with Aira and Mia being particularly well-crafted. Aira's motivations and backstory, along with her adoptive-older-sister role, are well-developed, making her a standout character. Mia, although less known and intentionally mysterious, shows promise with her unique traits, like her dual-colored hai
• MountainSkaldRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Overall
  This is a suitably bloody and violent adventure that starts with an interesting hook. Mia is a young girl severely abused by her village, until she is rescued by a new friend. The opening sets the tone of violence, but doesn’t give anything away about the direction of the story. It’s a nice introduction to a fantasy world, which puts character before complex magical elements.
  Style
  There are some issues with the writing; grammar and formatting especially. It is obviously improving as time goes on however, and offers readable and clear descriptions and action sequences.
  Story
  The story is very engaging. It starts off slowly, introducing the setting and characters without making things too complex. But magical elements soon start to appear, and you quickly get the sense there’s a lot more to this world. Fascinating stuff.
  There’s a lot of very graphic violence, making for quite a dark tale. The action is well handled, realistic, and easy to follow, making for some entertaining scenes.
  Grammar
  My main criticism is about the tense. The story is written in past tense, but every so often a line, or phrase in the present tense creeps in.
  e.g. In the distance a black being is sitting in the foetal position mumbling to itself.
  Character
  I really liked the main character; she is both resilient and adaptive. I am keen to see where the story will take her. Without adding spoilers, the other characters are also engaging, though could perhaps have used some more back story and development.
• KatIsacsonRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  I was so happy to find a tale featuring a female warrior set in (a world at least partially) inspired by fuedal Japan!
  I, for one, am looking forward to to seeing how a downtrodden street urchin of a girl grows into a warrior princess of legend in this fantasy. I've only read a few chapters thus far, but hope to see the author lean into the Onna-musha (female counterparts to samurai) role as the story heats up.
  The pacing of the language style and some of the turns of phrases are unusual me, so it's taken a bit of time for me to adjust. This may be a regional thing, so other readers may have a different experience than I have in this regard. I'm just taking it all in stride as it's unique style. There are the usual amount of formatting/grammar points that could be edited that one might expect in a web novel's first draft. If you are drawn to the characters in the story, I think you still find it to be an easy read. There are a lot of sections in each chapter so far. You may want to think of them as "jump cuts" (like in film) as you read along.
  The author adds illustrations! As an artist myself, always enjoy that. So far, the illustration at the end of chapter 3 with the twisty figure is my fave.
  Overall, I'm looking forward to learning more about the main characters, flaws and all. For example, finding out that the MC's savior, Aira is "directionally challenged" somehow made her exceedingly endearing to me.
  Haven't gotten to all the slaughtering yet, but I'm sure it will come!
• Magius SwiftscaleRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Definitely an interesting read, normally I don't read too much horror style fiction, but the world building thus far is certainly intriguing. I may  have to continue to read into this realm of beasts that consume humans to make themselves whole. This is a dark and atmospheric world, some of the words are crunchy and descriptive, style-wise.
  My only caveats, the paragraph structure does seem a little off. Thoughts inside the characters minds normally get some designation rather than  quotes (usually italics, in my case). The paragraphs also seem a little lengthy, and have multiple characters speak in the same paragraph. Normally the way to break up the dialogue is to notate a new speaker or topic with a new paragraph. Some of the grammer seems a little wonky (pluralities, and some tenses seem wonky. Use a present, active tense, passive tenses should be used to convey previous actions). I suppose these do break the immersion a little, but these are issues easily rectified.
  One other recommend, it's easier to stick to a single POV in a chapter or a segment of a chapter. Designating when the PoV shifts (or if it's ominescent 3rd PoV, that works too) is helpful for the reader.
  One other minor thought, poor Mia is traumatized and the guys rescuing her are like, hey, sorry everyone died, but we want you to fight monsters too! After forgetting she was holding the remains of the one person who showed her kindness. It's pretty dark and callous. I also question  a little bit the build up of Aira only for her to...well, the way she meets her fate.
  I like the sketches, some of the monster descriptions are grotesque and certainly unique, eldritch  evil feeling. Monsters not of this earth, in essence. The use of sounds, the feeling of those primal shrieks, screams and roars gives tons of flavor to the fear these beasts instill. Each carries personality (thus far), and the lore of the hunters using the beasts own power against them is fascinating. It reminds me of Dragon Age, Origi
• AshtelleRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  The first five chapters were an introduction and backstory of the main character, Mia, who is one of those characters whose everything in life has gone wrong.
  Poor girl, bullied because of her looks, without parents or any guardians. After finally getting a chance at a better life, everything is suddenly taken away by an attack on the village. It's a nice introduction to the revenge story and a world full of strange man-eating beasts.
  There's violence, little girls getting hurt, and a lot of gore. If you like some of them, it's a good read for you.
  The first two chapters are quite hard to read from a technical point of view. Thankfully, the next ones are better, although there are still a lot of problems with punctuation, especially in dialogues.
  There's a lot of telling, especially in the first chapter, that could be a little boring and could be fixed by just showing us what happened later there at the very start.
  From the first chapters, it's hard to tell anything about the main character. I have a feeling we learned more about her companion than Mia. But we knew she had a terrible life and was now traumatized, so we could guess where it would go from there. The prologue shows us a little of how her life would go, so we know from the start to expect a lot of blood.
  Overall, the story needs some work, but it's promising. For the first book, it's good.