Reborn as a GOD [Re-written]

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Description

A mortal soul turned divine after death—once nothing but a mere human now reborn as a god, follow his journey as he creates his world, meet other Gods all the while learning what it truly means to be one, as it turns out it isn’t all fun and games as he may have hoped it to be...

Volume 1 is finished, currently working on Volume 2, early releases on Patreon.

https://www.patreon.com/bePatron?u=30466109

For the Discord server link.

https://discord.gg/j23GaZw

Note: Warning, for all new readers the first 20ish chapters are bad, not going to sugarcoat it they are just plain bad, i’m not proud of them but I like to believe that the story picks up after that along with the quality of the story, so if you can stick around till then i’ll be much appreciated, if not I do not blame you for that.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2020
Author: Immortal_Simo

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.5/ 5.0
Followers: 86
Views: 141,036

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Community Reviews(3)

LittleCreepyRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
Hey there,
first of all, thank you for putting yourself out there and sharing your thoughts with us. I will take you up on your offer and rate your rewrite.
I was exited to see your book, as it is trying itself at something not often done and even less frequently done well. Sadly, your book falls into the second category.
It isn’t just the way Characters behave like barely human caricatures. How the dialogue feels just so extremely stilted. Or how uninspired the creation Chapters were.
As this book is a rewrite, I expected to at least see the Grammar polished over the moon, or to be at least legible. You disappointed in this as well.
I tell you this, not to demoralize you, but to point out what you need to improve.
I didn´t read past Chapter 7, as I was quite disgusted with the implications of Chapter 6. The Angel is basically a newborn. So, no points from me for that.
After tearing you down this much, I feel like I need to help you out.
First, keep in mind what I said earlier, try to think through how others would view what you wrote. Concentrate on your characters. How do they see the world? What misunderstandings do they have? What conflict is brewing? How can you portray them as realistically as possible?
Second, plan ahead (if you are not doing so already). Outline your novel. Planning ahead gives you the time to think your story through. Scenes will flow more smoothly and things won’t get lost as you paint your world in our minds.
Third, don’t rush over awesome stuff, just to get to other things. Especially if your writing a God-Story. The Universe the God creates, gives us a reverence to their character. Your Universe is uninspired and absolute standard. It could work that way, but you would have to make your characters pic up the slack. Instead of exploding a giant sun and big earth into existence and calling it a day, it would have been far more interesting to see anything to connect us to the MC. Play with the laws of Physics and mold the Biology to your n
NeoMareRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
As I said, the idea is interesting, however, there are many points to improve.
The main problem is the dialogue. It is horribly done. Not realistic in the slightest and uncomfortable to read. Your transitions are almost non existent and it makes the whole story somewhat cringy and confusing.
NakedFuryRoyal Road
★ 1.0
its too cringy and I cant stand the ridiculous teeenage conversations or the way you handled conversations between many character in this chapter.
another problem is the lack of details in the story. We dont know what they are doing while they talk or where they are, etc.
The god creation part was rushed and even then felt empty.
the story isnt worth it.