Razag [A Dragon LitRPG]

Information

Status

Cancelled

Year

2023

Author

The Commentator

• Re-write Released!
  Dec 28, 2024
• Chapter 1 (Rewritten)
  Nov 1, 2024
• Announcement of Rewrite
  Aug 23, 2024
• Chapter 14
  Aug 4, 2024
• Interlude 1/Chapter 13
  Jul 31, 2024
• Chapter 12
  Jul 13, 2024
• Chapter 11
  Jun 23, 2024
• Chapter 10
  Jun 6, 2024
• Chapter 9
  May 20, 2024
• Chapter 8
  Apr 9, 2024
• Chapter 7
  Mar 11, 2024
• Chapter 6
  Jan 24, 2024
• Chapter 5
  Jan 10, 2024
• Chapter 4
  Dec 29, 2023
• Chapter 3
  Dec 22, 2023
• Chapter 2
  Dec 22, 2023
• Chapter 1
  Dec 22, 2023

Reviews

Community Reviews(10)

• npmRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Wow, this story really sucks you in right from the get-go! You're instantly thrown into the mind of Razag, this newly hatched dragon, and it's pretty wild. The author does a great job of making you feel like you're right there with Razag, figuring out the world alongside him.
  The way everything is described is super vivid, and you're basically riding shotgun in Razag's head the whole time. It's cool to experience his confusion, curiosity, and instincts first-hand. The RPG-like system with skills, stats, and evolutions is pretty neat, and it keeps you wanting to learn more about how it all works.
  The fight scenes are pretty intense and well-paced. You're on the edge of your seat as Razag barely scrapes by or manages to win. It's satisfying to watch him level up and get stronger, both in power and understanding. The author strikes a nice balance between explaining the game mechanics and developing the character and world.
  Sure, there's a lot of focus on Razag's thoughts and experiences, which can get a bit repetitive sometimes. But it kind of makes sense given how alone he is.
  All in all, this story does a great job of putting you in the shoes (or claws?) of a young dragon trying to survive in a tough fantasy world. It leaves you curious about what's next for Razag and what other challenges he'll face. The mix of LitRPG elements with a monster coming-of-age story is pretty cool and well done.
  If you want a story infused with lots of imagination and loads of heart, then I highly recommend this one, and I look forward to seeing what direction Razag's journey takes next.
• CKJ5Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Disclaimer: This review is based on the first chapter and may not reflect the story as a whole.
  “Razag” is introduced as a portal/reincarnation story with progression, action, and adventure elements, featuring a non-human protagonist.
  The first chapter begins with the protagonist’s disorientation after being reborn as a dragon. While it doesn’t delve into the character’s past life, it effectively conveys the significance of this transformation.
  Technically, the chapter is grammatically sound and easy to read. However, the pacing felt uneven. The narrative spends considerable time on the protagonist’s confusion, which, while understandable, left little room to explore the broader world or its context.
  Overall:
  “Razag” shows promise as an engaging story. While the first chapter provides limited insight into the world, it successfully piqued my curiosity and left me eager to see how the story unfolds in chapter two.
• Merlin PendragonRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  From what I've read so far this book is like comfort food. It brings me a warm fuzzy joy that goes perfectly with a nice cup of yorkshire looseleaf. I read the first three chapters as part of a review swap but it is so good that I have to come back later and get up to date.
  Style - As mentioned in my opening statement, this book's tonal style makes it the perfect adventure to read, curled up, by the fire. Following the life of a newly hatched dragon, cast out from its home, is a subject that I have always wanted to see explored and the execution leaves nothing to be desired. In terms of physical style, the way this book is laid out makes it incredibly clear to read and perfect for this medium.
  Story - As stated in the style section, the story is one that I have longed to read. If something has dragon's or vampires (not the romantic kind) in it I'm likely to pick it up. Thus far the story, or rather the author's intentions, are clear and easy to follow - or to predict, but that isn't a bad thing. I refer back to my opening statement. This story is like comfort food. At time's the author relies on concepts that are common knowledge to the community you might find on RR: the idea that dragons have some kind of hereditary knowledge, the concept of a "system" and it being activated by certain things. If you are new to the site I ask that you bear this in mind, not that it's really worth mentioning as in the context of this story it would be easy to pick up this knowledge.
  Grammar - The grammar is immaculate and this book is incredibly easy to read. That said the author does have a propensity for using commas, perhaps overly much. As I have said it is clear but sometimes a comma isn't required before a connecting word like an "and"; unless it is at the end of a list and you're a proponent of the oxford comma (as I am), or if you are separating a subclause.
  Character - This is the only area I haven't rated 5 stars and that's simply because I haven't read enough to really g
• RineeRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Soooooo good! Impressive that you're writing with such quality for fun. Very vivid stuff you're showing me nice foretelling too, just enough for a hint. Although if possible make razag work hard during his next fight while showing the influence of his skills, especially scales. Please continue with similar passion in depicting Razag's journey. I feel like you should up the details on your strength classification just levels won't cut it an identification skill would be a good transistor. If possible can you do a titaness or leviathan heroine? Another suggestion could be applying runes to his scales and claws at some point. If it's not counterproductive for what you have planned can you have him earn an instinct based skill? Just throwing out ideas. Anyway keep going till the end and then put this on audible or amazon or something. I hope you will gain the worth of your effort.
• A. StargazerRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  It’s a cute little story about a baby dragon surviving in the wild. Not much else to say so far.   Aside from the dragon MC getting stronger there hasn’t been much plot yet.
  Kinda feels like it’s building up to something, but no idea what. Anyway good luck author and I hope you keep writing
• S.D. HussRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  So far it’s pretty good.
  The first thing that stood out to me about this piece is the obvious fact that we are following the POV of a dragon. Not just a dragon, but a dragon that has literally just popped out of an egg. This was new for me, and the concept itself has a few pros and cons.
  Style: Depending on how you read into it and at first glance, the hatchling POV has its limitations. You’re following a protagonist that is a baby, so immediate character development takes a hit. But this is a progression story, so the development of the protag’s character will come. From a progression standpoint, I really enjoyed it. There is an air of mystery that keeps the reader engaged, right from the beginning. Razag is abandoned by his parents, and immediately plopped in a situation where he needs to fend for himself and survive. This seemed a very natural response.
  Story: The story at the point of my review is, well, survive. This is fairly realistic to a baby dragon who is plopped in a forest, alone. He tries to find food and shelter. This is exactly what you would expect in the parameter set by the author. Some people may have an issue with that, I don’t. It’s realistic. Razag goes on to fight several animals. I particularly enjoyed the Vulture chase sequence and the fox.
  Grammar: The author’s grammar is pretty good. Other than a few repeated words, there wasn’t anything that really stuck out to me. Traversing the chapters is pretty easy and enjoyable.
  Character: There is only 1 character, Razag. At this point in the story he is a baby dragon. Slowly leveling and getting stronger. There isn’t much depth to him yet, but you can’t help but root for the little guy.
  Overall: I like it. I like reading things that are different, and seeing how authors use uncommon concepts creatively to tell a story. I will continue to follow the story of Razag, and look forward to seeing where it all goes.
• TheRenewalRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  If you enjoyed "So I'm a Spider, So What?" then you will also enjoy this story.
  It's a cute story about the trials and tribulations of a young dragon, who is hinted to be an isekai'd person, navigating a dangerous world ruled by progress stats. I enjoyed watching the little dragon's progress.
  It could use some work on its voice and pacing. Sometimes Razag will make assumptions about his environment that you wouldn't expect him to know without special abilities, such as guessing the hardness of his mother's wings by sight rather than by touch, and early on, he doesn't seem to have much motivation other than to survive.
  Definitely recommend!
  This is a review swap, read up to Chapter 6.
• Jocelyn UasalRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Title says it all, I've only read the first chapter but I'm hopeful ! I think the idea of having specific spell slots is cool, like a DnD wizard or something, and the main character isn't annoying and overconfident like most isekais. If he was strutting around page 1 all "i deserve this, i deserve that wa wa wa" I think I'd be much more turned off
• J. W. WeldRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Hey all,
  This is my first LitRPG so I'm judging it accordingly as someone getting familiar with the tropes and conventions.
  Overall:
  Solid story so far but I'm wondering where it will lead.
  Style:
  In first person POV, which is my style of choice. Only criticism is the main character's POV feels distant from the reader. The writer should consider using deep POV to really get into the character's skin.
  Story:
  Not sure if this is typical of the LitRPG genre but the plot so far is just exploration and leveling up by fighting random monsters. It's pretty straight forward lol but I'm wondering if there is anything more. Will his parents come back into the story?
  Grammar:
  No complaints.
  Character:
  Straight forward. The main character is just a little dragon trying to survive. The only issue is the motivation to survive is not enough as all creatures have that motivation. The character needs a deeper motivation to drive the plot and an internal conflict to flesh out the character. I was also struck by how lonely the story felt. There are no supporting characters, enemies or allies. Adding more characters to play off of would make the story more engaging.
• keiraxstarRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  This was a really interesting read. It feels very much like a personal roleplay, like you're watching someone else play DnD from the sidelines. This means that it has a very specific style and stays in it really well, and everything is given extensive description, every action and object and setting will be very vividly described so you can absolutely see and understand everything happening.
  In fact it's so much so it actually felt like it left LitRPG altogether and was closer to a roleplay book. I was half-expecting to see people in the comments with their own dragons posting responses and joining in. This speaks to the strength of constructing an RPG and basically a game, it is very much a sandbox you're going to see someone else play in.
  However, this means it doesn't have room for any narrative pieces. The character has no stakes (other than live) or motivation or personal goals. There's nothing guiding their actions other than the curiosity you have when you start a new videogame and want to run in circles. I think for the story it is, it should probably stay as it is and really continue to lean into being a roleplay tale. If the author wanted something to be more on the Lit side of LitRPG, I'd suggest doing it in another project because I think it would be too difficult to work it into this story at this point. I also think the set up and the readership it does have would already want that roleplay style to continue.
  If you're more interested in the lit side, I would suggest cutting the amount of detail and giving the characters thoughts beyond reacting to their immediate situation. And a personality! Really without the character motivations and a goal in front of them, I wouldn't really say it's doing a lot of storytelling.
  Still a lot of fun and again, very impressive from a technical perspective. This takes me back to old files I have on my computer of worlds I would design for imaginary videogames and such.