Memento Mori

Self-Published

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Description

CURRENTLY JUST A ONE SHOT, tags are indicative of what future content would contain, but not limited to.

One day, the world stood still.

No one knew what happened.

No one realized it happened.

After everyone was scattered throughout space and time, Leo awakes in a place he only ever dreamed of.

A fully equipped and absolutely real starship of his dreams.

But... now what? What happened to everyone else? Why, or how did it happen? What is he to do now?

... Who made this ship, and where is its crew?

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2019
Author: Tarry

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.1/ 5.0
Views: 740

Chapters(66 total)

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Community Reviews(5)

DuskArcanistRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Overall this was a pleasant read. Nothing breathtakingly new or awe inspiring, it was all okay.
The style of this story isn't my cup of tea. It's pretty cheesy, to put it plainly. It feels like the characters are just in the right place at the right time in this magical way. I would also say that the author should show more than just tell us information. Maybe use internal monologue a bit more often to portray stuff about the MC. For instance in the second chapter, the first 3 paragraphs are just telling which could very easily have been put succintly into an internal monologue with the reader left to figure out some stuff (readers are smart, they'll pick up on certain things if they are left to imagine.)
The story itself is fast paced and engaging, which is always nice. It flows nicely, and the characters are rather unique. My only issue is that too many are introduced at once to my taste.
The dialogue in the first two chapters was weird, idk how else to put it, it just didn't flow too well or sound natural, however it has improved by leaps and bounds in the chapters further in, so do keep that in mind if you are going to pick this up.
Grammar is pretty much spot on. Didn't find any glaring issues in that avenue, or spelling mistakes (but that might just be my eye that is used to reading MTLN haha.)
I Am PlumRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Overall: Really nice character-driven story. The plot is simple and gets going without much wait, so it's very easy to just jump in and read for a nice time. That's that's not to mean there's a lack of some weirder bits, but as of the end of the first arc, they are limited to some planted seeds at the end. Looking forward to what comes out of them.
Style: Sticks quite consistently to a young adult style, with short paragraphs and very liberal use of dialogue. Narration is mostly reserved for exposition, which comes right in the moment after an unfamiliar term or concept has been introduced, which can be an issue in interrupting flow, especially for scenes of tension. The third person perspective changes very frequently from character to character, which can be jarring but doesn't ruin the read.
Story: As mentioned before, the plot for this first volume was quite simple, with the main character's core conflict introduced, and our ragtag band getting together to complete a mission that might be a tad bigger than what it seems. For some, the stakes might seem a little low and there's a lack of significant emotional conflict, but it does its job very well as an introductory plotline. The world at first glance is relatively standard as a fantasy setting, but the author seems to have a very nice grasp on it and the unique traits that make it stand out. It's nice to see different magic systems interacting coupled with more human problems such as malicious, seemingly common discrimination of certain groups.
Grammar: There's hardly any issues in terms of grammar, with only a single typo I came across. The problems of consequence I could find were several instances of repetition, not used in a stylistic manner and thus they can stand out and sour the experience somewhat.
Character: My personal favorite aspect of the story. I ended up liking all of the main characters, with none falling behind in terms of importance to the core plot. One ended up feeling a little left out when
WinnieSallowRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Memento Mori is about a girl named Embla. She's searching for her sister, but while she waits for a lead, she teams up with a party of new adventurers - Memento Mori. It's a solid premise, with some fun characters and good room to expand into something bigger.
Story: The story is pretty standard. The idea that someone is searching for their lost family is common but relateable. Teaming up with a party is also pretty standard, but both of those premises fall nicely into place here. The party goes on a job to deal with some bandits, and adventure ensues. They come across as an inexperienced party - like college kids who have just completed their book learning and need to do some practical experience. I like that, and it will be nice to see their planning skills improve.
The characters inhabit a world named Yggdrasil, and the motif of norse mythology seems to be applied quite heavily, especially in terms of place names and certain ideas of magic. There are also anime tropes running as an undercurrent, so norse mythology meets japanese storytelling.
Style: The style is simple and easy to follow, with a nice fun tone. I noticed a couple instances of head hopping but nothing too major. Grammar is solid, so nothing to see there.
Character: All the characters are likeable, and they have distinct appearances. It would be pretty neat to see drawings of them. We have Embla. Her morals are a bit loose. Pandora and Cal. They're twins. Pandora seems sweet. Cal is a bit more brash. Red the dragon and Yuki round out the party. Yuki has a bit of a brutal streak. Now, since there are six characters, they can be a little hard to hold apart in your mind, especially since they cross skillsets. I almost think it would be best to keep in the heads of only three characters. At least, until readers get to know them a little better. For me the top characters are Embla, Cal, and Yuki.
Here is where the story could probably use some improvement. It needs a glossary of skills or perhaps, a more
lkal92Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
An enjoyable read. A bit outside of my typical style but it definitely fits well into its genre. As another reviewer mentioned, there is some element of 'right place at the right time' that can be avoided to make things fall together less coincidentally. Overall it is fast-paced and enjoyable, with distinct characters and a solid direction in mind.
Style: 4/5
A fairly lighthearted (kind of, since there is action and killing after all) adventurer story with a hunter-type main character. The writing is technically proficient, essentially sticks to a third person limited POV. The author does well in explaining the concepts of the world. There is a sort of eclectic mix between Norse naming conventions and some Japanese thrown in there, though I suppose it's nothing more jarring than Final Fantasy 7 having Yuffie for instance.
Grammar: 3.5/5
Mostly good, but some issues with comma placement on occasion. The author gets this right more often than not, would just review some grammar specifically in breaking up clauses. The dialogue tags here are far better than most stories but something I would do to cut out fluff would be to, for instance, turn:
“Gross,” Embla said. She looked down at his pants and saw a massive wet stain.
into
Embla looked down at the massive wet stain along his crotch. "Gross."
Condense some unnecessary words and take away the "said" tag if the reader can clearly figure out who the body language is linked to. There's often a lot of "___ said while doing so-and-so" that could be simplified down.
So no spelling mistakes noticed anywhere, just some minor comma stuff.
One thing I would also recommend to any writer is saying your dialogue out loud and seeing how it flows. There is the occasional bit of dialogue that seems like it would be an unnatural mouthflow if verbalized. The occasional humor in the dialogue is refreshing though.
Story: 4/5
So far it is relatively generic but the setting has some potential and this is early. There's a formula that peopl
RavnicrasolRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Fast, engaging, a solid sense of action, this fantasy-themed story is good for anyone looking for some light engagement and easily likeable characters. The story is mostly action adjacent with some solid characterization.
The Good:
The grammar is great. Didn't spot any mistakes, an underestimated skill.
The story flows, it doesn't stop. One scene moves to the next and to the next. It doesn't get bogged down much. It's quite easy to take in the whole thing in one sitting (I did exactly that)
The author has a clear idea of the world and the characters. It hasn't had a chance to go into depth in either, but what's been shown so far is consistent.
Good humour. Nothing much to add, some of the jokes are good and it got a laugh out of me.
The Mild: This can be good or bad if you like it (or not).
Scenes flow with an anime-esque sense of drama. The characters and situations have a sense of timing/drama that's well suited for imagining the unfolding scenario like an anime. A good example is a scene where a captive insults one of the main cast, and said cast-member follows by showing anger and doing an abrupt violent gesture... that ends up with a random dangerous animal being killed.
Over-Complexity in the System. The author uses Spells, Prana, Techniques, Skills, Runes, and Artifacts. It is clear many things are lapping up with one another, giving for what might become incredibly complicated interactions (for good or bad).
Short Pay-off cycle. This one's more subjective, but the story pay-off cycle seems short. So, say, a character does something to a stranger. That stranger pops up and happens to be important the chapter right after (connects to anime-esque).
The Bad:
A lot of things go without descriptions. Adding pictures might have helped, but overall it has a lacking amount of details. (For example, the story starts talking about a Sabyr. The only image it gives about it is that it's a predator and it's a "Cat"). This lack of details isn't a deal-breaker, but the sto