Masenia: A Corrupted Wish, Progression, GameLit Story

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[Participant in the Royal Road Writathon challenge]

What happens when heroes are sent back in time to stop a terrible apocalypse, given blessings and physical boons beyond comprehension. In all seven survivors managed to survive the great purge. The only problem was, the heroes fought the gods to a standstill, it was clear no side would truly win, though both sides had losses.

The solution, offer up one wish to each of the survivors.

The only problem, is that the Gods cheat, lie and steal. The first six asked to be sent back in time so they could prevent the apocalypse from unfolding as it had.Of course, only after those six left did Maria, the last of the legendary seven realize the flaw with the wish her companions asked. They went back in time with no clear advantage, with no means to be able to enact the change they so desperately wished to be upon the world.

That was why Maria asked to be sent back with powers. This exception was granted, but modified slightly, making it so she would begin with maxed out attributes, and the legendary exceptional growth skill. Feeling confident in her amended choice she accepted the compromise and was sent back.

The only problem, none of those who went back in time to prevent the apocalypse from happening, asked to retain their memories the horrors they went through.

Now Maria finds herself in the past, her body and mental acuity has seemingly changed over night, the only sign that something life shattering is about to happen is the fact that she keeps remembering bits and pieces of her past life, in her nightmarish dreams that constantly warn of the impending doom coming to claim everyone.

Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2023
Author: Lykanthropy

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Rating: 4.4/ 5.0
Followers: 210
Views: 53,872

Chapters(31 total)

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Community Reviews(4)

LordTCRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This story is well written and fun and I really hope the author continues it. It is just starting to build towards something with a lot of potential. The fact that the MC remembers tiny bits of the future from dreams but not as much as most reincarnators is a very refreshing take on the genre.
Robin den HertogRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
At the time of reviewing this story is just starting out, it is a bit slower paced then the author's previous steampunk story for sure. Early reviews are tricky but well writen characters and world are a great start.
It's basically a system apocalypse with some time travel with partial memories thrown in.
I'm looking forward to more, the author seems to be getting better all the time!
There are some shallow characters like the other heroes send back or the parents, but thos either don'tmattertothestory or will hopefully be fleshed out further later on. The whole meeting with forces outside of this dimension is super vague and I'm not sure I like that part just yet.
InkedRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
It was an extremely abrupt and unfinished cutoff to an otherwise enjoyable read.
The entire story feels like a setup for a payoff that never comes, large scale intergalactic conflicts with factions and politics that the Earth is a victim of are all set in place. A few of the major players are mentioned in a way that looks like future plot lines, development paths for the MC start to finally hit a stride, her family is somehow still oblivious to an ongoing apocalypse and she hasn't shown them any of her powers, the invasion/apocalypse is less than a day old......and then the story just stops.
It felt like a lot of setup and beginning of story arcs that then all finish right when you expect the story to start hitting its stride. For as much as I enjoyed while reading, the ending gives me a great feeling of unfulfillment as "MC now getting stronger faster" while every other plot hook remains entirely unresolved. It is technically an ending, but it feels like the ending of a prologue not a book.
Previous complaints aside, I enjoyed the slowly developing world building and ongoing struggles of development for the MC. The emotional and family developments were lacking, but felt like they would be coming soon.
dpayne20000Royal Road
★ 0.5
Nothing to rate
Not sure how to write 200 word minimum on a book that does not seem to exist
I started reading this book and it was ok
About 9 chapters in to the book it was removed as i was reading
I went to the next chapter and got a 404 error message
So i went back to the main menu and looked up the chapters as the book was marked as complete before I started.
And as i refreshed a few times i could see the chapters disappear as it was being removed
From what read
It was ok in what i did read, wasnt bad enought to remove it.
Still wont accept my review as not 200 word minimum, so just got to keep going, the premises was good, and i liked the characters from what i did see. Guess i should have bought premium and just downloaded the whole thing first. Ok still not 200 words, so i just got premium, so i can download future books as it is a bit anoying to commit to a book only to have it removed after i stared, still only half way there. Ok what else, i did read his other bookbthe 13th loop that was great and tge reason i started this book.
I have gone looking for publishedd works as i woukd be happy to purchase the book but could not found them. Not sure if it its a regular thing to have books removed from here this way i have seen books removed once published sure to things like Amazon polices and that's understandable. Had the book been published its so happy to buy it as i find it annoying to start a book and not finish it.