Magnus (Completed)

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NOTE! This trilogy is finished. It was published by Aethon Books onAmazonstarting with book one on 5/1/2021. All books have been removed from RoyalRoad. This story was posted on RR in its entirety for free before being removed.

Magnus Cromwell kills for a living.

He’s organized, professional, efficient. Like a machine. But when his family’s life is on the line? That’s something else. That calls for the kind of warm-blooded vengeance that scorches earth and summons tungsten rods from space, leaves a whole lot of melted flesh, and no one to tell the tale.

It should've been a blue milk run. As by-the-book as it gets. With his sister Nina out safe and the opposition decimated by hypersonic gunfire, MC wondered where they got the guts to even try. Then something hits him. Lays him out cold, and leaves him waking up to a fantasyland with nothing but his armor and a half-written note to guide him. It's a strange place where even stranger predators eye him for their next meal. Where his life’s on a timer, and where the darkest horrors haunt his dreams, painting visions of death.

There's no right day to mess with Magnus Cromwell. But the universe sure managed to pick the absolute worst one.

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- MC is stone-cold, strong(OP), and gets even stronger, but he'll still face his fair share of challenges, both internal and external.

- LitRPG-lite. No stats and an unconventional system. Expect abilities and progressions, but there will only ever be a handful of them.

- Science Fiction and Fantasy collide, with a touch of mystery, Lovecraft, and body horror.

- Professionally painted art scenes!

-This series is finished.

AHugethank you to RoyalRoaderMikeWefor the banner, and toNoDragonsfor his help editing the synopsis. Cover and scene art by the talentedJohn Molinero

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Information

Status: Ongoing
Year: 2020
Author: Vowron Prime

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.4/ 5.0
Followers: 1,632
Views: 247,636

Chapters(27 total)

What readers say about Magnus (Completed)

“I was a beta reader for this story and really enjoyed it! The protagonist is a badass dropped in a cool but totally unfamiliar setting. The story gets more and more gripping as it progresses and its a ton of fun to watch Magnus learn about his situation and…”
rushiRoyal Road5.0 / 5
“If you took that title as a bad thing, then you are a fool. This here is well-deserving of its high rating. The follower rating could get a double or perhaps, but who am I to say? While I have not yet read all there is to read, everything seems to be on poi…”
BullerRoyal Road5.0 / 5

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Community Reviews(10)

rushiRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I was a beta reader for this story and really enjoyed it! The protagonist is a badass dropped in a cool but totally unfamiliar setting. The story gets more and more gripping as it progresses and its a ton of fun to watch Magnus learn about his situation and apply his badassery to surviving. Highly recommend!
BullerRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
If you took that title as a bad thing, then you are a fool. This here is well-deserving of its high rating. The follower rating could get a double or perhaps, but who am I to say?
While I have not yet read all there is to read, everything seems to be on point. The MC has most things figured out in his life. We know his goals, we know what makes him take a step forward, we know why he takes continuous drowning for days on end like a champ, and we partly know where that attitude came from. All in all, characters in this story are well-rounded, all having their share of flaws without seeming like pretty dolls with artificial problems attached.
I can't say too much about the current plot of course, other than it is utterly fantastic! If this keeps up, I might just buy the book so that I can show some support. Who knows? The only thing I currently know is that I will dread the moment that I don't have any backlog to catch up on.
The style is pretty good. Few words make the most meaning. This story lives up to that phrase well. While it does give a hearty serving of world-building, readers are left to figure out things on their own. Not sure if this is intentional or not, but if it is, then the author certainly deserves a good salvo of claps.
11/10 would review again.
D.DimitrovRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I feel like the poetry is going to be a trend here, so there we go:
Lone wolf against the world.
Grumpy man against the flood.
With a gun all in blood.
Going strong as it should.
One Magnus Army for us to boot.
Moving forward through the mud.
Against the flow to kill the root.
Eleminating all to end the bud.
So let's focus on the story now. Honestly, I'm not a big fan of sci-fi and thought there are some elements from it, the story itself has a high-enough fantasy too. The combination of both makes it unique in its own way and made me keep reading it till now. I like the way in which this story is going. The start was action-heavy and the scenes later show great promise. If you want a lot of action and fun with some mystery to boot, that is the story for you!
Style
The author starts with a unique writing style, which I wasn't used to, but I got used to it fast enough. And I have to say, it's wondefully executed. The flow is smooth and the poetry elements in it just makes it a lot more enjoyable.
Grammar
No problems there. Even if there are, the author fixes them fast if someone points them out.
Story
Going to fantasy/game world? I'm not sure which it is of the two, but that only makes it more interesting. There are many elements that give you only more questions, as the author introduces them one by one, but there are some asnwers as well. It's enough to make you keep reading through it.
Character
Well, the emphasis here is on the main character, and why not? He is the OP MC, a bit cold and aloof, but that is no problem. Though, honestly I wish there to be a bit more work on the side characters as well. As of now, we don't see much in this regard, but that doesn't make the story worse in any way.
Conclusion
A promising story with a lot of elements to grab your attention. It's action packed with mystery in it that brings more color into the picture.
DakingtrexRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
A great example of what Royal Road has to offer. The story continues to follow it's narrative without getting sidetracked and the main character faces realistic struggles in an unrealistic setting. The author is hard working and is always listening to edits and advice and creates a fun environment to read in. The best part about the novel is how well the story meshes together magic and sci-fi themes without becoming too contradictory. A must read for fans of similar concepts involving a mix of mysticism and technology such as Halo.
The MC is not a psychopath, please continue reading as the MC has very understandable reasons for why he commits acts that would typically dissuade the average reader. He is most definitely an anti-hero lead, not villainous.
LaikaRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I have been reading Magnus for approximately three hours and change, and I've just finished Book One. It was a ride. It was an adventure. It was a delight.
If you don't read this review any further, I'd better start with my thesis: a few aspects of the story are a little rough, but it's ultimately top-tier work that we don't deserve to get for free.
The OP MC is a gruff treasure, an action hero who brings a dose of realism to the fantastic world around him. The LitRPG aspects of his powers are (relatively) subtle and delightfully morbid. Don't read the comments if you don't want a (concealed) spoiler about the amoebas, but know that the twist, though guessable, is great.
Every so often, casual languge distracts from the otherwise-seamless prose - an "f'ed up" here or a "badass" there. Even though it's usually a tie-in to MC's thoughts, they take out a sense of immersion. A badass doesn't need to call himself a badass to be badass. (Put more simply, I suppose it's a matter of show vs tell on occasion?)
A fine blend of sci-fi and fantasy that honestly reminds me of Warhammer fiction, from what little I've read!
I'd say more, but I've got Book Two to start.
Mclick90Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
If you love reading OP MC then this is just what you are looking for! Amazing work and cool art work! Thank you!
MikeWe_Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
"Mike, I've got a job for you."
"I'm listening MC... Hit me up."
Cromwell sighs as he musters up the courage to request something important from Lord Protector Mike.
"I need you to review this story, pronto, no delay. Hear me?"
"Magnus, you son of a bitch, I'm in!"
This novel is something else... It really is quite a unique experience. However, I do have to put in a disclaimer here. I've read up to chapter 21, so my review won't cover anything outside of those chapters.
Style
What can I say? It's just amazing how Vowron manages to write in such a competent and interesting style. He's constantly switching around POVs by introducing side-chapters, and best of all, they don't feel like filler at all and are actually relevant to the plot. Now, I do have to warn Vowron since multiple POVs can cause confusion later on - try to limit it whilst keeping the POVs 'unique'. The combat itself is one of the things Vowron perfects in this story, it's smooth, gritty, and doesn't fuck around with you. Sweet mama, I've read a lot of military fiction and this one sure knows how to convey the feeling of supremacy in combat almost religiously - which is good!
Grammar
The grammar is pretty much as refined as can be for a web novel. I may be a lil' harsh (I'm sorry Cromwell, don't kill me) but I've decided to opt out half a star out of my grammar score due to some very, very minor mistakes I found. I'd personally rate it 5/5 stars but I do have to remind Vow to check his grammar now and then. Vow, see this as a reminder and not punishment!
Story
Again, the story feels very much alive and 'active'. It's business, plain and simple. You've got your OP MC blasting through Xeno scum and working his way out of this 'simulation' (I don't know if he actually resides within one but oh well). It has a progression system neatly tied within the story that doesn't feel foreign to the story; MC grinds, unlocks and upgrades new skills and repeats the process. However, I'm rating it 4.5, at least for no
Redeyes EclipseRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
One of the most aesthetically bazaar worlds I have ever read in my life. Extremely well written and with great passion one get engrossed in it like entering a slime. All in all I love this story and can't wait until more of it is released.
Traitorman (JM Clarke)Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Magnus is one hell of a ride.
A genre-fusion of sci-fi and fantasy, Magnus delivers thrills like those you'd find in a good action movie combined with intriguing takes on known fantasy elements. There's a Lovecraftian undertone here that adds a drip of dread to the bombastic fights and exploration of a new world.
We open with a major action scene that feels like the climax of a near future Arnold Schwarzenegger or Sylvester Stallone film, complete with explosions and devastation you'd expect. Shock and Awe.
From there, we are taken to an alien world which is not quite what it seems. We learn about it as the protagonist does.
Style
The style of Magnus is practical, with enough description to get you into the story while keeping a brisk flow. Vowron doesn't flourish that much as he writes, but for a story about a practical tough as nails mercenary, that fits very well.
It really comes alive during action scenes. Vowron is a kinetic writer, which means that he does movement and impact quite well during a fight. These make the frequent combats a pleasure to read.
Story
So far the story has been good, leaving enough questions to keep you going while providing pops of catharsis and answers to give you a sense of progression. It feels that we are very early in the story yet, but it's had a nice build up with good pacing.
The only issue is that sometimes events can feel disconnected. It's rare, but it can be jarring when it happens. It feels like they'll be events that make sense in hindsight and are really solid when reading the entire fiction cover to cover.
Grammar
There is the odd grammar mistake that I found and the odd thing that was phrased to a bit unclearly. Yet Vowron likes to go back and fix things when they're pointed out, so grammar mistakes tend to disappear if someone comments on it.
Characters
This maybe the place where we'll see the most growth from Vowron. Magnus himself is well characterized but feels like he hasn't shown all he has to offer as of yet. Th
DayDreamer_novatwinklerRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
goosebumps and quivers!! Chills and Thrills!! Magnus literally takes you on a roller-coaster ride!!!
If you think the author has been extremely magnanimous with Magnus, when he says he offers Fantasy, sci-fi, mystery, romance, horror, thriller and action all coalescing in one epic story.
Then you are wrong!!!
Because it is all of the above + awe-inspiring!!
MC is definitely someone to revere, admire. Callous character. Soo spunky. As much as he is reserved, he has a conspicuous aura. He is silent, yet violent. If you are inferring that MC is depicted as an unfeeling person, that is far from truth. He has immense care for his family and would go to any length to save his family. Wish I could give 6 out of 5 stars for the character score ;)
Magnus is not modish, because well, fashion is usually what's trending now and that would be ephemeral. The author sets/creates his own trend with the trilogy, one which NEVER goes out of style.
As the story progresses, you will realize each twist and plot leaves you thinking. There is logic throughout and also involves concepts of physics.
Cherry on the cake is---- Author's protrayal of MC as a mercenary has also taught me modern warfare jargons.
Gory & glorious series!
It’s not just Rattling and Riveting! but is Radical! Radical because the author has demonstrated a unique style of storytelling through Magnus. A novel way of writing novels!