Kingdom of Dreams

Information

Status

Completed

Year

2021

Author

KAWrites

• The Sweet Dream
  Jan 28, 2021

Reviews

Community Reviews(2)

• RznRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  This is as of right now an unmarked stub that contains a rather short first chapter, but the work itself is well-written and has some good characterization. The writing itself really does not get to shine in such a short snippet as this, but the author already communicates a good style. I find it a bit difficult to deal with short stubs like this because the unmarked stubs in place of short stories can be confusing and the completed tag might be assumed to be because of their publication off RR. For what remains accessible, this is a good introduction.
• Sake VisionRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Grammar:
  There were some consistency errors like tiger changing gender or Sam turning 8 after her 10th birthday that prevailed from earlier draft of this book. The author fixed after I've pointed them out.
  I also found some missing article and a couple of punctuatin errors here and there.
  Unfortunatley, it's beyond my strenght to try pin pointing every single such error I've noticed, it would require rather extensive editing and re-reading; and I'm no professional editor. Besides, few as they are, they didn't impair my enjoyment of the story at all.
  Unless the author is planning to publish this book on amazon or somewhere,  I think grammar quality alone, it's better than 99% of webnovels.
  Style:
  The strongest part of this story is the style. Written in a descriptive, perhaps flowery language it brilliantly ewokes imaginary of various locations and creatures portrayed in the story. Reading through most of this novel, I felt like I could almost see, hear and even touch things with my very own senses.
  The author is thus clearly talented at writing creative descriptions that are capable of immerrsing the reader without boring them.
  Though, in final chapters of the story, these descriptions seemed a bit..hmm...rushed? The action scenes also lacked what I'd call 'tension', but perhaps I'm judging it from the perspective of adult. If this book is aimed at children, as it seems to be, they are fine for what they are.
  It was obvious everything is going to be fine after the climax point in chapter 10, and thus reading for example the final battle was rather boring; I was more interested in seeing how creative the author will get with fight descriptions rather than what was actually going on in the story.
  I also want to mention that for a story about dreamworld, I expected more unreliable narration. But here, everything is exactly as it seems to be, which was somewhat of a letdown.
  Story:
  The story is mostly written in 3rd person limited, following Sam.... except for the momen