Get out of my body! [GameLit Comedy]

Self-Published

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Description

The world is in peril! Although the Demon King searched far and wide, the Hero to thwart him was still nowhere to be found; and now the king’s given up! He’s ditched the whole conquering schtick to become a NEET instead, refusing to leave his castle until the hero shows up.

Twenty-odd years later, the tardy hero finally makes an appearance.

In any other story, that would have been Cal: an ordinary eighteen-year-old with nothing special about him; well, except for a mum who’s freakishly powerful; a dad who disappeared in mysterious circumstances years ago; and a childhood friend who wants to marry him… So just like you and me, really.

But what if his destiny gets stolen by someone else? Say a gamer co-opts Cal’s body to live out the hero’s journey intended for him instead as an RPG adventure – that’d be a cruel joke, right? Oh… you agree? You think it sounds like the premise for a body-possession horror? Right, well… I mean, this is a comedy, so good thing that’s not the premise here. *whistles innocuously*

What readers can expect:-A full-on comedy novel in a fantasy world, stylistically reminiscent of Terry Pratchett.

-A progression fantasy, but one that takes its time as the main character slowly gathers both power and party members.

-A biweekly release schedule, on Mondays and Fridays.

Information

Status: Cancelled
Year: 2024
Author: Cogs

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.5/ 5.0
Followers: 460
Views: 78,483

Chapters(35 total)

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Community Reviews(7)

GeorgeDBeardRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
A glorious parody of the RPG genre from the perspective of an NPC unwillingly turned hero.
Imagine for a moment that a role-playing spirit could seize control of your body at any moment and for any length of time and that anything the spirit did would be attributed entirely to you. *Any moment.* Say when you are chatting with your friends, or walking down the high street, or in the arms of your childhood sweetheart...
The comic potential of this RPG perspective-switching premise is simply infinite. Cal must navigate his life and reputation while dealing with the whims and objectives of the game-playing spirit. A spirit that leans into all of the absurd game tropes: half-arsing conversations, wanton robbery, adventurer fashion, and on and on...
This is an enjoy-the-journey kind of story. There is a plot. Things are happening. There is narrative movement. But you've got to sign up for the hilarious episodes along the way and the rich cast of comedic characters.
As a taster, there is a choice exchange between an ogre shaman and a bandit woman, in which the two debate whether to slaughter a whole party of adventurers, or to stage a fake rescue to give the woman a romantic opening with their male leader. Cockblocking, hideous morals and a surprisingly wholesome shaman all make appearances.
The style is over-the-top in all the right ways, with a rich vocabulary, perfect word choice and a healthy respect for the value of a digression. Grammar is on point.
SgaireRookilyRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
To be entirely honest, I doubted this premise at the start. It's new and novel and very odd, to say the least.
But, boy howdy, does it pay off.
While I feel terrible for our protagonist, I need to learn what happens next, how this possession works, what his dad has to do with anything, why the entire village is fine with it all!
Poor Cal just wants to live his normal life and maybe shirk some chores, but instead he's yanked along by this unknown entity, doomed to listen to nonsensical commentary about quests and experience and whatnot.
The author's style is quirky, featuring big chunky paragraphs punctuated by asides and color commentary. If you like the footnotes and note-notes of Terry Pratchett, you'll enjoy this style.
My only criticism -- not even worth docking half a point -- is that the large paragraphs on mobile reader can be very difficult to understand. If this was a book in print, it wouldn't be an issue whatsoever. However, breaking up a few of the bigger paragraphs may help your mobile audience in the end.
All in all, I look forward to seeing how Cal solves this... otherworldly plight and whether or not he gets to keep his body for good.
SkarabraeRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Style: I like this story's style a lot. It has literary devices, in particular a lot of imagery that helps with the story's tone and set various scenes within the story. The author has incredibly good word choice and is able to set the tone very well with it. The author's way of writing is also unique. And I can safely say that the tone fits the story perfectly. It is a hilarious story with a lot of humor in it.
Story: The story is great. it is paced at just the right pace. It develops at the right pace too. So, no complaints regarding that. The story itself is about a normal person (well, as normal as you can be in a fantasy world) who ends up getting possessed by an RPG gamer. The story pulls this off very well, and it is a very funny story.
Grammar: I couldn't find any grammatical errors. That does not mean they don't exist, but if they do, they are most likely not distracting enough for most people to notice them.
Character: The characters are great. They are all well-depicted, realistic, and three-dimensional. The story does a great job of developing the MC's relationship with the character who entered his body too, so good job here.
Overall, this is a very good story and I recommend it.
A. StargazerRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I quite enjoyed this little tale. The writing style is humorous, with a lot of the humor coming from the narration itself rather than the action or the characters. It takes a lot to make me laugh when reading something, and this story didn't quite manage that, but it did manage to keep a stupid grin on my face for a good part of it.
Grammatically I saw no issues, but I'm not the best proofreader. Nothing that I did notice detracted from my reading experience.
In terms of story, there's several things going for this story. The primary drama comes from the 'possession' of a young man by a gamer. Not going to lie, the gamer is a little cringe, but the story acknowledges that and makes it part of the story, so it works out in its favor. It's unclear exactly how the MC is getting possessed, whether he lives inside a video game or if there's inter-dimensional shenanigans going on or what. But that's fine, this is a light work and imo that's a more serious question than what actually needs to be answered.
Personally, I found the MC's detour after his first possession to be a bit of a derailment, which is why the story lost a point. While the story in that part of the novel isn't bad, per se, it's a little drawn out and I think it detracts from the overall experience.
As for the characters, for a comedy, there are distinct personalities going on and the interaction between them is where most of the humor comes from. The MC is a reasonable young man in a very unreasonable position, creating the natural humor and drama of this story. Then there's the MC+, the knight/roleplayer who takes possession of him. Very cringe, but in a slightly funny way.
The MC's mother is over the top, as are some of the things that the MC discovers about the past. It's fine, mostly, except that's the part I feel drags on and detracts from the primary story. I kinda liked the childhood friend and her family, although the way that the 'uncle' talks to himself was kinda meh.
Anyway, on th
SonooRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
A funny story, but one that forces a bit of the ridiculous to have continuity. It has various characters that give a bit of meaning to everything, and in this the MC continues his fight against body possession.
That said, here's a quiz: "if one day you were suddenly possessed by a strange spirit, which now controls your body from time to time, what would you do?"
a) Monologue exhaustively internally
b) Try to find out about the history of your long-lost father
c) Don't worry about strange events and/or visions that you started having
d) Ask someone or anything for help about your possession (considering that your mother has already been established as stupidly strong, and a mercenary)
e) Ignore that Option D once existed and do all the others
If you're in doubt about the answer, it's 'E'. Yes, the MC doesn't seek help, not even from his mother who has been established as a former strong, stupid but capable mercenary. MC just moves on with his life... WTF.
AliceHealerRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
People in the comments seem to find it quite funny but I can't help but feel it dull.
Main characters inner monologue makes me wish I was reading Shakespeare instead its so hard to get through. The concept is interesting but no one but the protagonist is serious enough to make the chaos any fun.
And finally, the nail in the coffin. The women exist as pure sex objects. They exist for no other reason than to have sex and the protagonist in danger of rape by his found family is played for laughs.
The story requires a straight man for the comedy to work but the protagonists is not a good one.
Marc'dU4deathRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
like any good sucker i fell for the name Terry Pratchett, this is no where near Pratchett.
the story is fine for a web novel, but i found the attempted humor more often annoying than funny. and since if failed to tickle my humors it ended up leaving me bored. but hey if the jokes land for you you might enjoy it.