Eldritch Railway

Self-Published

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Description

In a world fractured by eldritch forces, the Eldritch Railway emerges as the enigmatic link between disparate realms. Unbeknownst to many, this train transcends time and space, offering passage to those daring enough to board. As the shadows of countless realms stretch across the train's winding tracks, passengers find themselves immersed in a journey filled with horror, mystery, and the unknown.

Follow the tales of disparate characters, each with their own reasons for boarding the Eldritch Railway. From the haunted streets of Raven's Bay to the blood-fueled landscapes of Bloodpunk Alaska, each stop presents a unique realm, teeming with eldritch horrors and untold secrets. As the characters navigate through the ever-shifting landscapes, they discover the dark underbelly of the fractured multiverse.

Thank you for reading and for giving the train a ride. Don't forget your tickets.

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2023
Author
YOGITHEGUY

Tags

ACTIONADVENTUREMAGICSUPERNATURALPSYCHOLOGICALMALE LEADHORRORGRIMDARKMYTHOSURBAN FANTASYPROGRESSIONTIME TRAVELTIME LOOP

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Rating
2.8/ 5.0
Followers
6
Views
1,062

Chapters(4 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

  • Jonathan BRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 3.5
    Thanks a lot for letting me read the start of your story, I love any and everything to do with H.P. Lovecraft, so a cosmic railway is totally my bread and butter. I have a few notes for your story that I think could help improve it, let me know if you have any questions. Keep up the great work!
    I'd go back through your story and do some grammar clean-up.
    There was a typo in the very first sentence, you wanna make
    sure you have the best first impression possible. On that note,
    starting a story with a monster attack is a great way to
    get my attention!
    I liked your opening chapter a lot, didn't expect that woman
    to get killed by the conductor, but that certainly lets us
    know that the Eldritch Railway is really hardcore. The ticket
    scene reminded me a lot of the polar express, albeit much
    less violent.
    It struck me as being so random that Steve has a blackberry
    phone. Is this a subtle way to show that this story takes place
    a few years in the past?
    You do a good job in chapter one of making me like Steve. He
    hasn't done anything necessarily likeable, but I know that
    there's a girl who he wants to be noticed by, and his home
    situation isn't exactly great.
    What exactly is it that Steve wants out of life? What's the
    dude's end goal? How is the Eldritch Railway either going
    to help or hinder that goal?
    I'd make Steve more desperate to get onto the Eldritch Express.
    You point out that he escapes from the other guys and then
    just gets on the train because he's curious. I'd have him
    rush onboard because it's either that or get beaten to a
    bloody pulp.