Chronicles of the Ancient Immortal

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The 3rd Prince may have been weak in cultivation, but he had other talents to make up for it.

When Mais loses everything and becomes blind, he is convinced that he has no reason to live anymore. It is only a short time later that he meets someone blessed with the gift of cultivation to give him hope for his revenge. In that moment, hope is reborn. There was always hope.

Mais overcame the weakness of his cultivation and overcame the limits one by one with his friend. In this world where he lives for revenge, he has reached heights he never imagined in the past. But nothing can be that simple. And it wasn't.

At some point he really became a cultivator. A cultivator, independent of his friend and everyone else, seeking immortality.

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Status: Ongoing
Year: 2025
Author: The Writer Mea

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Rating: 4.1/ 5.0
Followers: 106
Views: 24,364

Chapters(109 total)

What readers say about Chronicles of the Ancient Immortal

“The Prince is only eight and though he is small and somewhat weak we know his strength lies in his brains, not his brawn. We won't forget how intelligent he is despite his weakness, because the author doesn't leave any room for doubt. He tells us this very…”
SheaveRoyal Road4.5 / 5
“I like it a lot and its amazing how the story progressed. Not too fast and not too slow. The brothers were amazing and the emperor being my favorite part of the story. A little more depth would've easily made it top of the charts. Overall: I liked this and…”
VerstappenRoyal Road4.5 / 5

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Community Reviews(10)

SheaveRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
The Prince is only eight and though he is small and somewhat weak we know his strength lies in his brains, not his brawn. We won't forget how intelligent he is despite his weakness, because the author doesn't leave any room for doubt. He tells us this very clearly.
The little prince is quite weak in his fighting and his magic but it is very evident that soon he will grow strong. Readers can join him on this journey with mishaps such as blindness and world-shattering earthquakes and explore new planets full of martial arts and fighting magic systems.
The story starts with the prince playing a game with a ball. In a fun, childish way. This shows that despite his royalty he is somewhat grounded and still at heart a regular kid. It goes on for a while but I assume this is to hone home the point that while he is a magical prince and a genius he is also in many ways just a kid. A regular person. Like us.
Grand, sweeping stakes mean we learn the entire fate of this world will likely be decided by characters we met just seconds ago. This is very daunting and will help keep readers from glazing over with boredom as so many other stories make them do.
Royal Road readers will likely love this. It has everything; a game-like progression where characters increase in strength to become overlords. The cultivation of a magic system that is god-like in nature and multiple, grand princes raging their battles for the heraldry of the world. Also, there are Enuchs. That is a fun little detail.
VerstappenRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I like it a lot and its amazing how the story progressed. Not too fast and not too slow.
The brothers were amazing and the emperor being my favorite part of the story.
A little more depth would've easily made it top of the charts.
Overall: I liked this and yes I would read it again.
WolfLunaRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
The narrative unfolds as a compelling journey of a young prince, Mais, set against a backdrop of a grand yet tumultuous fantasy empire. Initially introduced as an intelligent, socially adept eight-year-old with a surprising knack for strategy even in a simple football game, Mais is quickly revealed to possess a unique gift for understanding the Tao, despite his cripplingly low cultivation talent. This core conflict, his sharp mind versus his physical weakness, forms the heart of his character and his aspirations for the throne in a world where "cultivation is everything."
The plot rapidly escalates from courtly intrigue and internal struggles to a full blown invasion of the imperial capital. The clash between Emperor Laofeng and the formidable space pirates, coupled with the brutal palace battles, establishes a high-stakes, action packed scenario. Mais's vulnerability is sharply contrasted by the immense powers surrounding him, including the selfless sacrifices of loyal eunuchs like Reter, who prioritize Mais's life above all else. This betrayal culminates in a devastating confrontation with his once-best friend, Lagos, who blinds Mais and leaves him for dead, revealing a chilling personal cost to the larger conflict.
Mais's desperate escape and subsequent recovery in a dangerous, Tao infused forest marks a profound transformation. Stripped of his sight, his princely status, and his former life, he is forced to confront his extreme vulnerability. Yet, his unique ability to grasp the Tao, now including the Fire Tao, offers a glimmer of hope for a non-traditional path to power. The introduction of Kasuur, an unlikely, unassuming cultivator, provides a fragile lifeline, setting Mais on a new, uncertain journey of survival and self discovery in a harsh and unforgiving world.
chrisdnyxRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Style:
The author’s writing style is clearly tailored for the fantasy cultivation genre. The narrative flows well, with a clear understanding of the characters’ emotions and ambitions. The early chapters effectively establish the plot and main characters, making it easy to get immersed in the story.
Story:
The story stands out with a unique premise: a prince struggling at the lowest level of cultivation despite his royal lineage. The pressure and constant comparisons to his peers are portrayed thoughtfully. One of his main ambitions to live longer... fits naturally into the cultivation setting, where longevity is a major reward of progression. The Tao-based battle scenes also add a distinct and flavorful touch to the narrative.
Grammar:
There are a few noticeable grammar issues, but they don’t take away from the story. Given that the author mentioned starting from a different language, it’s understandable and doesn’t hinder the reading experience.
Characters:
Prince Mais – I admire his determination to become emperor, even though he’s seen as weak for not yet ascending. His desire for a longer life adds meaningful depth to his character.
Lagos – A strong and reliable friend. Despite his strength, he treats Mais with care and loyalty, always ready to protect him.
Eunuch Reter – Through a servant, his bond with Mais is heartfelt. He treats him like a son and sacrifices himself to protect him.
Emperor Laofeng – It’s always satisfying when the ruler takes part in the action himself, and his scenes deliver just that.
Conclusion:
Chronicles of the Ancient Immortal is a well-crafted cultivation fantasy that shines in its early chapters. With thoughtful worldbuilding, compelling characters, and engaging plot progression, it’s definitely a good read for fans of the genre.
GugumSajahRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Story / Plot: The story is emotionally rich and deeply layered. From palace politics and betrayal to desperate survival and philosophical cultivation, it crafts a tragic yet inspiring journey. The pacing is deliberate, and the early chapters reward patient readers with powerful payoffs. The structure is clean, and twists are impactful, especially the betrayal arc with Lagos, which is one of the novel’s most effective and heartbreaking moments.
Writing Style: The narrative voice is compelling, poetic at times, and full of emotional depth. The use of introspection, monologue, and Tao philosophy gives the novel a meditative tone reminiscent of classic Xianxia. However, there are moments of redundancy and over-description that slightly affect flow. Some transitions could be tightened for smoother pacing.
Grammar & Language: The novel is clearly written by a non-native English speaker, and while most grammar is understandable, there are noticeable sentence structure issues, awkward phrasings, and occasional misused tenses. That said, the meaning is always clear, and emotional beats are rarely lost in translation. A strong edit pass would easily raise this score. (Grammar evaluation was conducted with the assistance of automated tools like Grammarly and Gemini Advanced).
Characters: This is the novel’s biggest strength. Mais is a standout protagonist: vulnerable, determined, and incredibly human. His growth is slow but deeply earned. Supporting characters like Reter and Lagos are multidimensional, with Lagos offering a rare and effective example of a friend-turned-foe whose motivations are tragic, not cartoonish. The emotional stakes between characters feel real and earned.
AngehlRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
So let me start by mentioning that I have barely read any xianxia so I am not very familiar with the genre or the expectations for it, but I will try to be fair and review the story as is presented.
The first few chapters present a really interesting universe, with clear motivations for the characters, intention and enough context to let the reader follow sooth. It is very competent at what it tries to achieve. If you are a fan of xianxia you will probably have a good time.
Style:
On the very first page it mentions that the story was written in another language and translated into english, and it shows. There is a lot of repetition, the story goes around overexplaning certain points and there are a lot of unusual choices of words. None of this to say that the prose is bad, it is perfectly competent and there are no large mistakes, but it is lacking in general quality which I understand is exceptionally difficult to achieve for a non-native writer (i know this by experience). I do believe that this point could be fixed with a thorough line edit, so it should not be a deal breaker.
Grammar:
No notes. What is there is good and competent with no major mistakes or missing anything.
Story:
This is probably the point that I can evaluate the least as I am not familiar with the tropes or expectations of the genre. As an outsider it seems competent and interesting enough, starting with a fall from grace and setting up the eventual regrowth of the character. There are a lot of small things that are not explained that I can only assume are established tropes or concepts that I am simply ignorant to, so I will not consider this a flaw since this is clearly intentional.
Characters:
The main character has solid personality and motivations, the side characters have a clear gimmick and the villains are campy enough to be memorable. My only gripe is that the main character is supposed to be eight years old (if I understood things correctly) but very much does not feel like an eight y
theBacchanalianRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This is a story with high stakes, an action-packed world, where powerful cultivators, PIRATES!!!!, and imperial forces clash. It's good. It's deep. It's introspective. The narrative takes a dramatic, almost cinematic approach, weaving together complex world-building elements with dynamic character interactions. The descriptions are vivid and detailed, particularly when it comes to the supernatural abilities and the intricate workings of the Tao. There’s also a clear attempt to keep the reader invested in the characters’ emotional stakes through their physical actions and thoughts. The prose can be a bit dense, at times, with descriptive details, but I definitely don't see this as a negative! It contributes to the sense of grandeur that the author is trying to invoke.
The tone of these initial chapters is consistently serious and dramatic, with a strooooooong undercurrent of urgency and foreboding. From the very first chapter, there is a palpable sense of impending conflict, as the tension between the demon cultivator and Emperor Laofeng is established. This is further heightened as it progresses, where personal sacrifice, loyalty, and the weight of responsibility become central themes. The tone becomes very tragic and introspective in chapter four, the sorrow and burden that accompany Reter’s decisions are profound and moving, providing an emotional depth that contrasts with the high-stakes action. While the narrative does lean heavily into these darker tones, there are also moments of vulnerability and humanity.
As far as the grammar goes, the writing is mostly clear, though there are areas where clarity could be improved, particularly in terms of sentence structure and pacing. On the other hand, the vocabulary is rich and varied, which supports the high fantasy world-building. The choice of words to describe magical abilities, ancient powers, and grand actions is effective in evoking a sense of grandeur, even if it means some sentences feel slightly dense or compl
Heath BarkerRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
"Chronicles of the Ancient Immortal" by The Writer Mea is a pretty cool take on cultivation fantasy. The world of Emperor Laofeng and all that Star Path Tournament stuff feels solid, not too complicated but with enough meat on its bones to keep things interesting. I like how the author sets up the cultivation system without drowning us in details while still hinting there's a lot more going on in the universe than our main character realizes.
Style: The writing flows nicely between scenes. The dialogue really works, you can tell who's talking without always needing dialogue tags because each character has their own way of speaking. Little Mais talks like he's older than his years but still has those kid moments, while all those authority figures sound appropriately fancy and important. I also liked how the author switches between intense fight scenes and quieter character moments to keep the pacing fresh.
Story: We follow Mais, this young prince who's basically cultivation-challenged in a world where power is everything. Things kick into high gear when space pirates and mystery enemies attack, which immediately raises the stakes. It's pretty jarring (in a good way) to go from watching Mais play soccer to seeing the whole palace under attack. The whole "royal palace under siege" backdrop really cranks up the feeling of "oh crap, everything's falling apart" that drives the central conflict.
Character: Prince Mais is this smart kid stuck with terrible cultivation potential in a world that's all about power. What makes him interesting is how he refuses to just roll over and instead tries to find workarounds for his limitations. He can't overpower problems, so he outthinks them. The supporting cast is fleshed out enough to matter, especially Lagos, whose friendship-to-betrayal moment hits pretty hard at the end.
Grammar: This is where things get bumpy. The writing is clear enough to follow, but there are grammar issues all over the place. The dialogue sounds natural desp
JT MystRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I find this story having a really solid beginning and though it's made clear this is just the very beginning of a longer adventure, the author holds nothing back and gives a showing of what can be possible in his world.
Style:
The author seems to have a direct approach in his writing, leaving the reader to fill in some of the blanks for themselves. Personal tastes will differ here, but I find the direct approach fitting to this story.
Story:
Mais is just a kid that wants to be great one day! Sure, he's a prince, but that doesn't make him more than he is. What the author gives us is a look into how child perceives the great power of Tao, which hooked me more than I'd anticipated. The first few chapters are tense and exciting and leaves me wanting more.
Character:
Mais and his friend Lagos are very different characters, but it's clear they've bonded and become good friends. Up until Chapter 6 there are few more characters with enough screen time (page time?) to really stand out except Reter, the 3rd Prince's assigned eunuch. who gets to shine and show his devotion to the prince.
Mais, the main character is shown to be a weak child in a powerful cultivator's world, though his brilliance, or genius, is made clear. I'm pulling the grade down slightly because of the slightly jarring reminder of his genius in most chapter thus far.
Grammar:
From the very start of the first chapter it is clear that this is a mostly translated story. Sentences are structured in odd ways and caused me to repeat a sentence or two to get the meaning of the text every so often. It gives a feeling of being directly translated without reworking the sentences into what they should be. That said, it's entirely readable for most and the few problems doesn't take much away from the work as a whole.
NotPhoebeeRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This story starts off a bit slow in the first chapter but immediately picks up from there with a series of action-packed chapters that are short and sweet.
The main character, a young boy named Mais, is smart beyond his years and has a lot of potential (magical and otherwise). However, I do think he could benefit from having his emotions explored in more depth. Seeing as there aren't too many chapters out yet, I think it is a safe bet to assume that his character will improve with time.
The story itself is action-packed and awesome. Not to get too spoiler-y, we see Mais suffer great loss and endure a terrible betrayal all within the first few chapters. This tells me that this story is certainly going to be an epic tale of great proportions if it continues in this way.
The grammar is great and there's nothing to note there.
The style, however, is where this great story stumbles. I assume a lot of the awkward phrasing and repetition is due to the fact that this story wasn't originally written in English. I think, because of this, the style of the story falls a bit flat.
However, the style is not a deal-breaker, and this story is still quite good! I look forward to seeing what the future has for it.