Beware the Seeker's Mark of Unbound Destiny! - Defiant Healer Who Fights With Primal Monsters

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2022

Author

Asviloka

• They call him Kevin. I call him padawan.
  Apr 1, 2023
• Anyone who says killing is hard clearly hasn't met you.
  Apr 1, 2023
• See a beehive, poke it with a stick. Or become a beehive and convince someone else to do the poking.
  Apr 1, 2023
• 'Progress' is just a nicer-sounding word than 'failure'. I much prefer 'absolute victory', myself.
  Apr 1, 2023
• Invincibility, I'm coming for you! (Just keep waiting, I'll call you when I'm close.)
  Apr 1, 2023
• If this is what they call 'plot armor' then I'll take my chances with regular armor, thanks.
  Apr 1, 2023
• What do you mean I can't grind my way to invincibility with impunity?
  Apr 1, 2023
• Everything goes wrong, and then goes wrong again. Not my best day to be honest.
  Apr 1, 2023
• If a man asks you for your quest, give him your cat as well. No, wait...
  Apr 2, 2022
• I think I'm getting the hang of this 'almost dying' thing. (The 'almost' is the important part.)
  Apr 2, 2022
• When in doubt, there's always magic salt. (Hahaha, that's a joke, because the system hates me.)
  Apr 2, 2022
• I'd like to see YOU try to descale a primal beast! This stuff isn't easy, y'know? Survival is tough!
  Apr 1, 2022
• Punching dinosaurs 101: A beginner's guide to life in a new world
  Apr 1, 2022
• Being transmigrated to another world? It's actually really annoying!
  Apr 1, 2022

Reviews

Community Reviews(6)

• CatpotatoRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Defiant healer who fights with primal monsters (dhwfwpm for... short?) is the sort of story you'd come up with at 1 am when inspiration strikes. Usually the next day your plans are foiled by the reality that nobody would ever read that, but Asviloka remembered that people will read anything and reality is a lie. The unique concept is actually hilarious to think about, because that really does describe the story. It's a classic isekai, but the system makes the main character guess for his class and skills. With only 6 chapters, obviously there isn't a lot to talk about, but it definitely makes me want to read more so far.
  Style: It's first person, which I generally just don't like, but there's no pacing issues or too flowery language. There's some good similes when I can't really comment on too much, but there weren't flaws or anything in my opinion, so...
  (miniscule spoilers up to chapter 6 ahead)
  Story: Incredibly classic and technically overdone, but it's all believable and just continues along. It's kind of a light hearted isekai, in that the main character doesn't really have any problems killing dinosaurs or (in the fight so far) defeating an insanely strong warrior dude. Unfortunately, I could totally see a ton of plot armor in the future if the story continues this way, but he does have issues with surviving in the forest and again, only 6 chapters. So far the most interesting part to me is the way the author is going to handle these 'primal' civilizations. (I will update this review when there are 10+ chapters out, this is kind of early I know.)
  Grammar: yup. this story has the grammar.
  Character: He's kind of defiant, and probably a little crazy. I did find myself kinda laughing at some of his jokes, and his sense of humor definitely fits with the setting. He doesn't cry at all, jumps from mood to mood like a child, but also he thinks critically and maybe in the future will confront how he's been affected by the situation he's in and I'm sure we'll see some
• MrBadWithNamesRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Seeing as this is only the first chapter it could go any way from here, y'know - but this chapter has good worldbuilding(s), an interesting magic system, clearly visible progression in their mental state/approach to life and most importantly there is a goal!
• RydeniusRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  For the review contest. Hahaha, I kid. But for an April 1st just-for-fun story this is an easy and FUN read; Fun enough that It could merit a comedy tag... not that I'd have any ulterior motive to suggest that or anything. *looks to the side*
  The story is the classic trope of a snarky MC sent to a fantasy world with a game-like system. The system is minimalistic and requires the MC to guess for classes and abilities, but also automatically rewards(?) profession(s?) for actions. This year's chapters are primarily focused on survival, but even in short number of chapters available, Asviloka has thrown a twist at us with hints of deeper goings-on.
  The style is light and good, with enough snark to give the main character... well, character. I̶ ̶d̶i̶d̶ ̶n̶o̶t̶i̶c̶e̶ ̶a̶ ̶f̶e̶w̶ ̶s̶l̶i̶p̶s̶ ̶i̶n̶t̶o̶ ̶p̶r̶e̶s̶e̶n̶t̶-̶t̶e̶n̶s̶e̶ ̶i̶n̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶ ̶f̶i̶r̶s̶t̶ ̶c̶h̶a̶p̶t̶e̶r̶,̶ ̶b̶u̶t̶ ̶a̶s̶s̶u̶m̶e̶ ̶t̶h̶a̶t̶ ̶w̶a̶s̶ ̶d̶u̶e̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶ ̶h̶a̶s̶t̶e̶ ̶o̶f̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶ ̶c̶h̶a̶p̶t̶e̶r̶'̶s̶ ̶w̶r̶i̶t̶i̶n̶g̶ ̶a̶n̶d̶ ̶p̶u̶b̶l̶i̶s̶h̶i̶n̶g̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶g̶e̶t̶ ̶s̶o̶ ̶m̶u̶c̶h̶ ̶d̶o̶n̶e̶ ̶i̶n̶ ̶o̶n̶e̶ ̶d̶a̶y̶.̶ (Edit: *whisper, whisper* Wait, wait! The whole thing is in first person present tense!? *swoons dramatically* I despise present-tense narration! How could I not notice?! 😱 This... this must be the fabled example of first-person present tense PoV done well! Can it really exist?!1!1!)
  And what the heck is with a story posted for a lark having such great grammar that I only found one missing-word mistake? 5.0 stars for grammar.
  I'm already looking forward to next year's installment of chapters and wondering how I missed this in the first place!
• World's PariahRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Blurb highly innaccurate - this is in fact the story I was looking for, which is a stream of consciousness and confusion and dinosaurs. Still legible, of course, and the MC is nicely irritated at the rest of the world for granting his wishes.
  What's not to love? 5 stars.
• sumdumbguyRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  If I had a complaint about this story, there's not enough of it! I can let that slide though since there's so much to enjoy in what exists here.
  System? Check.
  Struggling MC? Check.
  See a beehive? Poke it with a stick.
  That last one hasn't happened yet, but I can see it happening in the future.
• SlackslothRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  You know how in high school your Lit teacher tells you that all present tense and first person perspective novels are trash? Then they immediately force you to read the Great Gatsby, which you actually liked before, and beyond the height of irony of hypocrisy, the English teacher overanalyses the novel to the point that the color of the curtains imply that Gatsby is a paranoid schizophrenic who is also bipolar  for some reason. That episode not only shows you that English teachers are not only complete noobs about mental health but that they also have no idea what they're talking about.
  The protagonist reminds me of my English teacher. So far, character: 4.5/5.
  A very distinctive sort of personality cannot thrive without an equally distinctive world. Asviloka just manages to create this world. The isekai intro was a classic, but an event that transpired early in the story
  He was pressured into giving his quest up
  convinced me that the author has thought deeply about the world and the implications of a RPG diegetic system. 5/5
  Grammar is meh. Prose is meh. Mediocre and I would say slightly below average. Punctuation was used... adequately. God, I sound like a snob. But its an easy thing to fix. 4/5
  Story: Rule of cool subverts all else. Narrative tension is often forgoed for a quick punchline/joke. This is okay at the beginning of a story, but unsustainable long-term. For a cautionary tale, look at  " The Blue Mage Raised by Dragons", another fic on this site. It eventually turned into a hot mess. Author, I recommend you read "Dungeon Crawler Carl" if you haven't already done so. Perhaps you can parody the isekai genre as it did with the dungeon crawler genre. 4/5
  Overall: OK, better than average, but can become much, much better. Style and Character are the two highlights and I believe the author should develop those two aspects of his story.