Automage Adventures - A LitRPG Story

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Description

As a university freshman in the fictional nigh-third-world country of Broica, Sean, finds himself falling into a bottomless rabbit hole as the "System" integrates Earth into itself, allowing for him to see the world as it truly is. He soon finds out that his girlfriend, family, and even hometown aren't as they all seemed --a conflict between vampires, werewolves, hunters and mystical forces rages in the Undercity as alien forces try to overtake the City Above, all the while Sean struggles to understand even a tiny bit of what is happening. And he wonders... had the System changed his life, or had it simply made the transition faster?

Arc 1 - Integration

Chapters: 1 - 15

Word Count: 62,399 Words

Status: Complete

Arc 2 - Darkest Nights

Chapters: 16 - Current

Word Count: 70,000+

Status: Ongoing

Release Schedule: Tuesday, Thursday, and Saturday (GMT +8)

Average Length: 2.5k - 5k Words

Discord Link:https://discord.gg/kScZ5fsWH7

Disclaimer: MC isn't nice. The story is Grimdark and the overall vibe of the story is somewhat dark.

Information

Status: Cancelled
Year: 2021
Author: Rainmeter

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.0/ 5.0
Followers: 585
Views: 127,302

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Community Reviews(7)

AlexaLeeRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Warning: This is one of the first GameLit/LitRPG I have ever read so I may not be a good judge of the genre.
So far, this is an extremely engrossing book that has left me wanting to read more. As a gamer, I enjoyed the style and use of LitRPG elements.
Style: As a whole good but there were some strange word/phrase choices (e.g. a whole another deal) which meant I had to reread a couple of lines to work out what was meant. As someone who doesn’t reach much of the genre (but is a gamer), I found the LitRPG elements easy to understand and didn’t feel that they were overused.
Grammar: There were a couple of missing commas and run on sentences but it isn’t bad enough to interfere with enjoyment. It might help to turn on reader suggestions so that these can be picked up and changed easier!
Story: The story is honestly interesting so far. Sean, a university student, finds himself transported to a seemingly fantasy world that is much more technologically advanced than his own where he must complete tasks (such as kill a giant) in order to advance. I’m looking forwards to learning more about the system and the new world.
Characters: There is a small cast of characters so far (Sean, Clara, Fillmore) but it gives a good insight into Sean. Hints about his history and background are sprinkled in very naturally but so far, I am missing something. I know from other reviews that after Chapter 4, we get more of an insight into why he is strongly relaxed about being dropped into this world but it might be world considering adding this sooner because it struck me as strange. Clara feels a bit flat but she is only in the first chapter (so far) so it makes sense that her character doesn’t feel fully developed yet.
World building: I felt that the world building was worth noting specifically because it is such a great combination of showing and telling than flits between the two seamlessly.
Overall, this was very well done and I’m looking forwards to reading more!
BullerRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
It's something. Definitely something. Started reading it due to a request by the author, but I am not sure if I will ever really pick this up again. The ideas behind the setting were kinda confusing to me, and the style reminds me of LNs at some point while being something else at others. A good part of it just feels like a mish-mash of things that weren't meant to be put together in what they are now.
I am a person who loves transition periods, the times where a new character has to get fully accustomed to their new power, failing at every step and getting up just a well. And this story did try giving that at some level. However, I just feel like it progressed past that way too quickly. I haven't skipped ahead on this one to see how it is in later chapters, so I can't really comment on how it is later on. It might be better and it might be the complete opposite. No way to really know.
Going past that, I have to give some standard criticism on the grammar and style department. Some points just really needed some editing, dude. This story doesnt have that much filler, but that doesnt necessarily make it better in my eyes.
It did some things well but others were a bit of a failure. Sorry if this sounded harsh. 4.5/5 from me.
HyperAlphaKingRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Automage doesn't do anything new in terms of the litRPG genre, which may be a turnoff for some, but I find this novel to still be captivating as I binged all the chapters so far. It is your classic litRPG goodness.
Style:
Pacing is really good in this novel, everything happens at a good speed. Some lines can be a bit clunky at times and paragraphs can be a bit too long. It would be best to trim some stuff to make it more concise.
Grammar:
Very well written prose. I didn't come across any typos or errors.
Story:
The setting, Story and Plot are all something we are familiar with. The protagonist's world merges with The System, and he has to navigate his way across the new world. Nothing new here. So if you want more of that, this novel is perfect for you, although personally, I would have liked to see at least some novel elements.
Character:
I like the character of the protagonist, Sean, a lot. He is a clearly flawed individual with being a bit prone to anger and somewhat of a coward. It's interesting to see him interact with other characters and his dialogue is fairly good. What I dislike about him is how his top priority is to reunite with his girlfriend (who's not really his girlfriend). I feel an intelligent character like him would not really worry about something like that.
Most of the side characters are interesting, like Fillmore, the farmer who has seen countless others come before the MC. And Brandon, a berserker boy. Other character's like Clara are shown briefly and not too developed.
Overall, this story is basic and doesn't really reinvent the wheel. But with decent writing and good characters, it can be quite gripping.
Invictus21Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I have started reading this novel and its looks it is up to a great start. The background setting was nice and the way the character was dropped into the midst of everything was exciting as well.
Style: I liked the overall story and how the status messages are used. The various skills and progressions are very good as well. The only thing I would suggest to improve in the story is that in some places I felt the story could be more concise. Again that's just my view.
Story: I think the story is to a good start. Though similar to some of the other stories, you could make out that it has its uniqueness and will develop along the lines. So definitely looking forward to it. Some of the differences can also be spotted early, which looks interesting
Grammar: Grammer looks good as I couldn't spot any errors. So kudos on that :)
Character: Good introduction to the character and his interaction with others. The monologues also help with knowing him more and understanding his thoughts and approach.
Overall a good start and would look forward to reading more of this.
Will suggest to my friends as well :)
chazziRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Quick summary - 'Magic user' in a 'World of Darkness' type world with a litrpg system and possibly world merge(s).
The world building is pretty expansive at this point, with hinted semi-unique factions operating independently of the MC POV. Not to mention the potential other worlds, aliens, gods etc.
The main character is reasonably relatable and if not necessarily logical has a reason or seems to for his actions, thoughts and decisions.
Some other characters that we see in the 'interludes' seem a little one-dimensional so far but hopefully with further worldbuilding and character interactions this can be fleshed out further. For example the 'Villainous'(?) factions seem a little evil for evil sake so far.
The MC's abilities seem a little unclear and hand wavy but with a story called "Automage Adventures" it is somewhat expected.
In terms of grammer, seems pretty decent, though a small amount of sentences that have unclear meaning need a little work.
Overall a pretty decent story, premise and world building from a new(?) author and I am looking forward towards the future plot and world building.
BarnmaddoRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Maybe I'm just tired, but I find this story confusing. At times it drags on and on going from one psycological extreme to the next, and nothing seems to really happen, people just confusedly talking with each other. Then there's action and it's all over in a couple confusing words.
In general the story thematically seems to heavily rely on mysterious/confusing and terrifyingly strong monsters. So, much like a horror movie, where the monster is completely unkillable... until the the suspense peaks and it suddenly dies. Then repeat all over again for the next monster.
TheSandsOfDeceptionRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
The MC in this story is a first year University student granted a System and then thrust into a trial to determine which class, and which rewards, he will get.
The only issue is that the MC isn't really a first year University student. Instead, he is apparently the hidden reincarnation of the god of Instincts. He gets a vaguely useful power? A day later, it's Instinctual to use it at any and every oppurtunity. He chooses to study a branch of magic that has supposedly cause scholars to end their own lives out of frustration? No problem, his insticts have got his back, and he picks up the basics in a day and change. Have to learn magic that the book you're learning from says you have no chance of pulling off yet? Don't worry, he just knows he can do it. RIP to those scholars, but Sean is just built different I guess.
There is no gradually getting used to new situations. There's no reaction to being required to kill things. There's no trial and error period with what I'm assuming is a difficult branch of magic - given that people have literally died rather than figuring it out. It feels a lot like the author wanted to write a character that was already halfway through a powerup arc and used to the new state of things, but also decided they wanted an origin story, and somehow got those two muddled up in the process.
The grammar isn't amazing, and has errors thrown in here or there, but nothing that a quick editing pass couldn't fix. The style is mostly unremarkable, but that's not necessarily a bad thing.
The story isn't anything trailblazing, but it also has potential to be interesting enough to not be immediately boring. Just, for the love of god, let the MC work for something rather than just being good at it first time.