Ashes of Eternity

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Description

An ancient conqueror awakens to find his galactic empire in ashes. A street rat discovers a core that changes everything. A noble woman must fight for her place in her family and for her very survival.

Vengeance. Artifex spent hundreds of years, forging an empire that could protect humanity from the endless hunger of the Unity. Now he finds himself in the ruins of all he built, and the people who betrayed him have made a deal with the Unity…

Power. The brutal sands and endless struggle for survival is all Safira has ever known. But a lucky find gives her the chance to be so much more than a scavenger. But opportunity and danger go hand in hand, and escaping with her life just got that much harder.

Ruthlessness. Elinor North has spent her entire life struggling to prove herself. As the head of a cadet branch of the powerful Montclair family, she must fight against enemies from both within and without, for her rivals are not just outsiders - they are her own kin.

All of them are light years apart, but inexorably tied to the ulterior motives of those around them and a shared destiny that will shake civilization to its foundations.

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Information

Status: Cancelled
Year: 2019
Author: J P Koenig

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Rating: 4.7/ 5.0
Followers: 595
Views: 106,101

Chapters(22 total)

What readers say about Ashes of Eternity

“To have the chance to read a real epic Sci Fi on a free side, is a chance you can’t let pass, not only does the universe have a rich history on a level you could easily compare to the foundation serie, full of backstabbing politics and old and future Wars,…”
weedisdabossRoyal Road5.0 / 5
“It's too early in Ashes of Eternity to give a very thorough review; at just 81 pages in length, the story hasn't even begun to begin, instead continually expanding its scope as some kind of large-scale prologue. I respect that quite a lot, though that means…”
B. A. Baker (Thedude3445)Royal Road5.0 / 5

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Community Reviews(10)

weedisdabossRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
To have the chance to read a real epic Sci Fi on a free side, is a chance you can’t let pass, not only does the universe have a rich history on a level you could easily compare to the foundation serie, full of backstabbing politics and old and future Wars, but evry character introduced hace deep/varied life experiences and diverse lifestyles, you can only wounder how they are going to know each other in the later chapters and mutch less how they are going to work together.
So give yourself the chance to read a Sci Fi you would normally have to pay for.
B. A. Baker (Thedude3445)Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
It's too early in Ashes of Eternity to give a very thorough review; at just 81 pages in length, the story hasn't even begun to begin, instead continually expanding its scope as some kind of large-scale prologue. I respect that quite a lot, though that means I can't review it except as the prologue it appears to be.
So far, Ashes of Eternity has all the hallmarks of something that could be great, but it's on some rocky terrain that could slip into mediocrity or worse, if the story takes a poor turn. Why is that, you ask? Well, for these first eleven or so chapters (I think the "main plot" looks to start around Chapter 15), we've gotten FOUR completely independent, self-contained POVs that are almost completely unrelated so far.
The story of this web novel is one of an entire galaxy, a thousand years after its Emperor disappeared. The decay is evident in the pretty crapsack world everyone lives in; aside from the Emperor's story, every world we've been shown so far is far from a fun place to live, and characters are faced with great quandries, whether that be pure survival, or advancing in a harsh aristocratic society. All of these disconnected storylines add up to one truth-- the galaxy sucks.
This is incredibly ambitious. Giving us all these completely separate parts of a giant universe and showing us completely unrelated characters is a setup to something that could be a space opera ensemble story on an unparalled level of sheer size. Whatever the main plot of this story is, involving all of these current POV characters is going to be a feat in megaplotting.
However, as a serial web novel, that may have been a mistake. In just eleven chapters, we've been given four completely separate storylines, jolted from one tale to the next, and with almost no connective tissue between them because they all take place (literally) worlds apart. That kind of thing is going to be a bit hard to follow in serialization, especially when there are only chapters about once every 2 or
JPwritesRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I wish there were chapters for me to review but I'll make do with what is on offer.
There was nothing wrong with the grammar that jumped out at me and ruined my reading experience which is a rare occurrence on RR, kudos for that. However, your style wasn't to my liking. There are too many repeated words in close proximity and the prose gets a little monotonous at points.
What shines is your characters. Your first chapter had very little dialogue but still got me very interested in the emperor. Safira is an amazing protagonist.
Spoiler: Spoiler
It is very rare that I care about a character this early in the story but Tanque was lovely. It saddens me to see him die this early in the story.
John MarcusRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Good stuff through and through. Characters are all fairly proactive and each have definitive challenges they are striving to overcome. A lot of the context the author provides actually comes through side charactets, many of whom are surprisingly compelling. Having read to chapter 19, which at the moment is the latest release, I can say, so far, it's pretty good.
Rubygold153Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
With the intro of Safira, I think you did an excellent job of showcasing her outlook and circumstances, as well as showing the connection to Tanque in a realistic fashion that didn't take long to set up. As the first really developed character, I believe you've done very well in making her three dimensional.
As for the great galactic emperor, I'm interested to see how he develops.
In regards to the plot, I know there are still a couple more main characters to introduce at the time of this review, but I hope that any worldbuilding that is shown with them doesn't reveal that the old empire headed by the first MC just fell apart immeadiately after he was removed from the picture. Like the review prior to mine indicated, if that were to be the case, it would make the idea of an intelligent space fairing civilization completely unrealistic.
However, from the quality I've seen so far, I have plenty of faith that you have a solid history stretched out past his removal. That's what the mention of the junkyard origins has me believing anyways.
Aside from that, I don't have anything to really gripe about or offer you. Your writing is top quality both in style and grammatical correctness. Honestly I'm just waiting for more.
Anyone who is looking this over and considering picking it up, I suggest you do so.
tarakisRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I am absolutely hooked on this story. The story is awesome with it's different characters that have a very well thought out depth to them. The style and grammar are top notch. I cannot wait to read more. I wait with great anticipation how the Author will combine are the character's stories into one great story.
:D CHEERS (c)
AzadkielRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
My impression of this piece is similar to Mooderino’s Deeper Darker but less comedy and more empire building. So the scores are as follows.
style score: 5/5
I very much prefer the world-building and information be delivered through the character’s viewpoint and experience and the author does just that (I follow every artist that employ this style because its a more easy read than being spoon-fed information irrevelant to the current situation that you would not remember anyway).
story score: 3.5/5
This is an inaccurate score because the story has just begun, the characters are just introduced and the the first step into the story is still underway but i can see a lot of potential via the character introduction.
Grammar score: 5/5
No grammatical errors whatsoever, the ones that are there are too minute that you can just gloss over them and those hicups do not impede the reading experience.
Character score: 5/5
The characters are the main selling point. Their backgrounds are well written and the author has thought them through. Most of the time the main pitfall when making a character is how to properly convey their drive and determination. Simply saying it outright does not cut it and i find it cringy. The character’s drive and determination in the story are shown through how they deal with their loses and not only does it let the reader know the extent of their conviction but also let the reader sympathize and relate to the character.
Author, i wish you well and may your inspiration be overflowing as ever.
ElaikasesRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I have been enjoying the development and the multiple threads as this pulls together.
Well worth reading.
IsTiredAndNeedsToPoopRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
A very well written scifi story, far beyond the average RR standard. The story has multiple interesting plot lines right from the start to grab and keep your interest. Expert writing skills are really showing here.
Also I'd like to note that although this story features 3 main characters as clearly shown in the prologue blurp, this does not make the story hard to follow at all.
I think many will enjoy this story even if scifi is not your usual fare, and it's an absolute must for scifi fans.
BeyogiRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
After reading the first four chapters, I think I've got enough of a first impression of this story.
Overall there seems to be two strands. The scientist emperor's return and a rags to riches story of a street rat following in the wake of the scientist emperor's return.
The story is well written so far, the only criticism I could offer at this stage would be to not rely too hard on tropes and clicheed plots. The whole rise of the scientist empire and subsequent fall of civilisation opens a bunch of questions and makes galactic civilisation look really idiotic. Like can't they wipe their ass without the scientist emperor? I hope that'll be explained better in the coming chapters. Meanwhile street rats make good "hard men" protagonists, but they can be hard to identify with.
Overall interesting story so far.
Thank you for writing.