A Yearning

Self-Published

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Description

Crashing into a new world-- Something he so desperately wanted to happen-- Our protagonist makes his way through this new interactable sight-seeing tourfullof rather fucked up realities of several races existing in one planet. Deep in these rather pitiful situations however, are opportunities waiting to be wrung for its fullest potential.

And whether he uses it to cause chaos or to change it for the better is for his own choosing.

Of course, that's only looking at all the bad stuff. Hobbies? Competition? Friendship? Romance? Hm, maybe he'll try that too.

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2023
Author
Sen Sekai

Tags

ACTIONFANTASYADVENTUREMAGICANTI-HERO LEADSUPERNATURALSCHOOL LIFEPSYCHOLOGICALMALE LEADPORTAL FANTASY / ISEKAIREINCARNATIONWAR AND MILITARYGRIMDARKHIGH FANTASYSTRATEGY

Royal Road Stats

Rating
4.6/ 5.0
Followers
12
Views
183

Chapters(1 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

  • Sam TolanRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 4.5
    There are parts of this I really do like. I enjoy that it pays attention to interpersonal relationships between characters. I find it is rather uncommon in this genre so that alone has my interest.
    The story has obvious effort put into writing it. However, there were many things that took me out of the story. The shifting of point of view was one thing but how the way narration was treated made it hard for me to focus on  the story.
    Grammar is by far one of the weakest links. The countless tense changes, as mentioned, pulled me out of the story and halted it for me.
    As another reviewer said, there is something off about the story. There is little to no consistent world building and there is too much terminology that doesn't suit their world being used by the natives. The story is very slice of life, which is fine, but it doesn't have the tag for that. There is no focus on events making them a non-issue or even pointless, when that would be the catalyst for the characters actions and reactions.
    I have mixed feelings about the characters. They are developed well but I have little to no connection to them. Admittingly, a large part of it is due to the inconsistent worldbuilding and natives using language and context they shouldn't know.
    It's not a bad story, though I can see how it would have trouble on Royal Road.