Within The Soul: Supremacy

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2019

Author

DriftingCloud

• Chapter 2: A Literal Twist Of Fate
  Feb 11, 2019
• Chapter 1: Original Sense
  Feb 9, 2019
• Chapter 0: Failed Journey
  Feb 8, 2019

Reviews

Community Reviews(10)

• Zachary DugasRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  So. I would like to start this review by saying I don't like cultivation novels, but even I was drawn in by the world building and excellent characters that show a lot of three dimensional characterization. The TLDR is read this one it is really good. Now onto the more in-depth review...
  Style:  5 out of 5, very good, the writing has just enough flair to keep me interested, personally I like more descriptions but I understand that I am in the minority their lol, all in all a good balance of detail and fast paced description, quite good.
  Story: 5 out of 5, it really is quite good, I can't say I have read many books of this genre, but I highly doubt many of them have a futuristic physicist as the main character, and I find it refreshing to have a mc who actually thinks instead of simply flexing their Mc muscles.
  Grammar: 4 out of 5 this is the biggest downside of the book so far, the first few chapters are a little rough but as the book goes on they get much better, I think the author is doing a wonderful job especially when English is not his first language, keep up the good work.
  Characters: and now we get to the highlight of the story, the characters. Each and everyone is fleshed out to an amazing degree, honestly I find it amazing that this is a debut novel, I am subscribed so keep it coming lol I will be reading it!
• ivoSFRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  i binge read the first 28 chapters.
  i really liked the story so far.
  i hope you can make the complex plotline hints blossom, if yo can this will end up being a great novel instead of just having great potential
• FOTCRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Of course I haven't been able to read that far cause it only has 2 chapters but it's a nice concept, especially the unusual way of reincarnation that seems to be going on, some minor grammar mistakes but nothing too annoying that might disrupt a reader's experience
  Good luck man
• RobinsRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Good promise so far, interesting story and whilst familiar to a number of other reincarnation / cultivation stories its different enought to to be well worth the time taken to read.
• dak'konRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  As with most transmigration stories, this one starts slow and confusing. Once we are past the shaky beginning, things start to pick up.
  The characters are believable, with understandable motivations.
  The world building is not particularly original but clearly thought out.
  Those that like Cultivation stories should definitely give it a try.
  My only worry is the signs of power creep, while not immediately relevant to this story, it is a valid concern in any story in the genre.
  Overall a Good Cultivation story bogged by transmigration start.
• some total kretinRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  I read the first few reviews that talk about extremely slow start that is kind of tedious and how it gets better. I have to say it's not nearly as bad as they described.
  It's a slow burner cultivation novel for sure and the grammar and style at the start are atrocious - that's mainly the reason I thought about giving you less then four stars, but it really got better.
  Now about the novel as such. Your style of writing could improve, mainly the switching to first person present tense at the beginning was really bad. If you have time, rewrite those sections to the third person past tense you're using and the whole prologue "mini-arc" will get much better.
  I have gotten to chapter 27 in one sitting and I have to say it's exactly as I imagined it would go. That's great. Please do not introduce sinister background conspiracies into your story and keep it light as it is.
  The MC is the many times tried and someties atrociously butchered trope of reincarnated scientist (you probably read the "age of adepts" or "warlock of the magus world" or the novel that they are derived from that I forgot the name of) and in your case seems to be done very competently. Mainly the use of knowledge of our world in the cultivation techniques.
  You made the MC lean more to the OP side, but still not badly so. That reminds me! Please when rewriting the earlier chapters, FOR THE LOVE OF GOD make the MC use inner monologue instead of talking to himself. It's really immersion breaking.
  Oh and in the scenes where he is taken away from the home he reincarnated into - use some exposition to explain a little bit more. You probably tried to express the disorienting feeling the hero was living through after the reincarnation, but in the process managed to disorient the reader as well. I had to reread the pasage three or four times to make sure I had not missed anything.
  What threw me off was especially the use of doctors name out of nowhere without context just before the beginning of the journey. It g
• ChryissRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  The style felt staccato at parts, I think, due to sentence constructions. The grammar is ok overall; it’s understandable and the few mistakes don’t detract too much from reading fluidity. Most of the mistakes are just proofreading ones. For example, semi-colons in run-on sentences, commas in complex sentences, proper consistent capitalization, and spelling (one example: chapter two, dismay instead of dismal.) The verb tenses are also sometimes off at times (again, using chapter two as example, touched instead of touch). A proofreader can help you with this fine-tuning. As the chapters progress, the mistakes do decrease. Also, the improvement can be visually seen, at least, with the capitalization.
  I actually missed the science fiction aspect in the beginning of the story. Maybe it’s because I’ve read too many cultivation stories, but I was hoping for something different. Of course, in the synopsis it was explained that this would happen, but after reading those chapters, I felt like you could’ve made a good sci-fic story. The scientific connection to cultivation elements was different from usual though, so that was nice. But in the beginning, the cultivation explanations were a little long.
  I’m not sure what to make of Matthew/Aleran. If one were to ask me to describe him using adjectives, I would be rather stuck. The only word that comes to mind would be ‘excitable’. But that description would be applicable to basically all of the characters. So, a little more distinctiveness to characters could be added.
  The action scenes are described in depth. They may be a little long to some. But like the general writing style of this story, there is a good amount of detail to every action. For those that like cultivation stories and don’t mind a slower pace, then they will like this story. Aleran’s encounters with various creatures, for example, were well described and made one immersed in the world; however, to some, this might be too much roaming around. Actually, if anythi
• CestarianRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Title really says it all, I'm not in the mood for a lengthy review, I went into this expecting yet another xianxia novel, like the ones this site and webnovel are littered with, honestly I don't know why I keep reading them, I guess I love to hate them? All of them are pretty much exactly the same story...
  This one wasn't however the same story. So far (ch 29) we still don't have some random girl cozying up to the MC like he's the hottest shit in the world, nor do we have the beginnings of a harem, in fact I don't think there have been many female characters at all in the story so far it's completely void of romance. This is good.
  Because it allows the author to focus on the important bits. Now the story has shoddy as hell grammar, and it's not particularly well written, but underneath the subpar writing skills is an actually exciting story that so far, despite the heavily flawed character interactions (stereotypes, no, so much worse, xianxia stereotypes...) the underlying story has kept me intrigued all the way until now.
  It's one of these rare stories where it doesn't feel like the protagonist has a plot shield, and everything that is good in the world doesn't just happen to fall into his lap either. He can't fight for shit and he has one trick he can use to save himself from sticky situations, that's it. It's a very versatile trick but he's not particularly powerful yet.
  Whether or not the story remains good once the protagonist has progressed beyond his humble beginnings however remains to be seen.
• KarolusRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  This is a hard one for me to rate. A couple people have noted here that the beginning is tedious to say the least. I have a little bit more of a problem with the start than most. It takes 12 chapters to really get up and running. That is way, WAY too long.
  The most important piece of a xianxia for me is the characters, specifically the MC and this MC, after the 12 chapter slog, really stands out. He is inquisitive, driven, and constantly fighting adversity. He does not mope or pout about his shitty circumstances overmuch and his path to power has proceded at a generous clip (again after the initial 12 chapter yawnfest).
  Assuming you can stand the beginning and get into the meat of the story, it is worth taking a look at (I would almost recomend skipping to chapter 8 or 9).
• octonusRoyal Road

  ★★ 1.5

  The first four chapters are a poorly written mess that sum up to: "I'm about to start writing an Isekai story." Maybe it will improve, maybe there will be some plot later, but I can't bring myself to read any more.