Wings

Self-Published

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2014
Author: iRaine

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Rating: 4.4/ 5.0
Followers: 31
Views: 18,913

What readers say about Wings

“This story is excellent, it grabs the reader almost immediately and compels them to continue reading. I did this review as part of a review swap, but I also added it to my favorites and follows. I intend to stick with it, it is truly enjoyable. The Style: T…”
Dreamer's RiotRoyal Road4.5 / 5
“Review Swap Grammar: Not much issues with the grammar other than a few errors and rather convoluted sentences that could be shortened that tells the same story. Sometimes less is more but other than that, the grammar is fine. Style: The style is pretty good…”
M3CR_1Royal Road4.0 / 5

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Community Reviews(4)

Dreamer's RiotRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
This story is excellent, it grabs the reader almost immediately and compels them to continue reading.
I did this review as part of a review swap, but I also added it to my favorites and follows. I intend to stick with it, it is truly enjoyable.
The Style:
The style is good, it is very descriptive and is constantly painting an engaging and interesting picture. It is also used to great effect with world-building. I didn't give it five stars because it can go a little too far at times. Metophor is great and lots of metaphor is better. But there are times in this story where overly descriptive language or overzealous descriptions are actually more distracting than anything. Usually the descriptiveness is captivating, but sometimes, less is more.
The Story:
Six stars. I was captivated from the first chapter on. The story is so interesting and intriguing. It grips me and leaves me wanting more, wondering more. Leaves just enough breadcrumbs that you need to keep reading to understand more, and more importantly, you care to find out.
The Grammar:
The grammar isn't bad, a few minor mistakes here and there. There are several confusing sentences I had to re-read a couple times to understand, which isn't a big deal but these are what held it back from five stars.
The Characters:
This ties in to story a lot. I find I want to know more about most of the major characters. Not because they didn't tell me enough but because they told me just enough to know they have depth, they have secrets, and if I read just a few more chapters, maybe I will get to understand them just a little better.
Overall, this story is well worth reading and I intend to follow it.
M3CR_1Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Review Swap
Grammar: Not much issues with the grammar other than a few errors and rather convoluted sentences that could be shortened that tells the same story. Sometimes less is more but other than that, the grammar is fine.
Style: The style is pretty good in my opinion. I like the use of the metaphors that the author uses. It really helps me to visualize the worldbuilding aspects to the story, which is something I enjoy. The author's style truly helps you to understand and immerse yourself into the story. Pretty good.
Story: From the very beginning, I've been hooked by the story. The author does especially well with creating mysterious setups and enough suspense that makes me go 'Why does it have to end already!". If the author fixes some grammar errors, I'm sure the story will be even better!
Characters: I love the personalities of the characters. I must say that they are well done. However, I wish that more info about the characters would be revealed. That would really help me to relate with the characters more.
With that said, I'm sure this story would become successful with a few more edits and run-throughs. Definitely would recommend!
storytopia07Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
There is a lot to like about the story. It has a dark tone to it and originates from the mysteries it tries to setup. It shows promising start to exploring the characters within its story.
Grammar: I didn’t find any issues with the grammar. I didn’t have any trouble with the readability of the story so far.
Style: The writing aims to build mystery around the story, but I think it is a little confused about it. I have expanded on this in the end.
Story: The story so far has been really intriguing and has me hooked. The mysteries setup has the potential for some theme heavy exploration.
Characters: As with the story, they some good amount of diversity so far. Though one of the main character falls into clueless protagonist category, it didn’t bother me too much.
Coming to my only big complaint. I feel like the first few chapters could use a little more clarity. Much like its prologue, it enjoys holding on to details and creating puzzles a little too much. I think clearing up some character setup and revealing some details to prevent confusion can really help the story hook its audience even better.
realnotperfectOfficialRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Minimal technical errors. I admire the vision here.
In no particular order, here were my thoughts on this story. This may be the hardest review I have written so far; it may also be the “harshest,” depending on perspective. Please note these are only my opinions, and my opinions are not even necessarily of value. Take everything that I say here with a grain of salt- or ten grains of salt. I will be honest and these are my observations.
1) As mentioned, the technical errors were minimal. Grammar or spelling did not put me off or throw me off from this work of writing. Great job there!
2) It’s good that the author incorporated dialogue into the chapters and in between segments. It’s also great that the author tried to give more insight into some of the characters, because at times, this was really needed. So that is also something I truly appreciated. This was not a terrible story at all. This story really did have a lot of strengths, and I admired multiple lines throughout the chapters.
All of that said, here were my other observations:
3) This will be in no particular order. One of the minor issues was the occasional syntax error. These included:
3a) “And what exactly is my Headquarters keeping from the people, Jeremy?” versus possibly using “are” in this case
Sometimes, the name of the same character (its actual spelling) didn’t seem consistent, and the error would repeat itself.
3b) “Lilah” becoming “Lila” at random, and back and forth and again.
Other errors, such as
3c) “She wondered if she was she ready to disobey” versus, possibly, “She wondered if she was ready to disobey”
4) Descriptions of places, or locations, or visuals, or houses, or any area where the characters were, or anything that could help the reader to create an image for themselves, were often not present. It was often very hard to picture where they (the characters) were, and to connect wherever they were with what they were supposed to be doing and what they were supposed to be achieving.
5) F