Try Again Alvis (BIG REWRITE COMING ON FEBRUARY FIRST)

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2024

Author

Real Tensai

• Announcement: The rewritten version of TAA is now out!
  Feb 1, 2024

Reviews

Community Reviews(10)

• Mob999Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Wow what can I say, this story really hooked me. I am a big fan of time loop stories so I know I might be biased. Still, this story is incredible. The first chapter was enough to make me fall in love with the main character. The way Alvis deals with the time loop and also his twisted personality are incredible. His character growth at the end of the level was also nice. But what I like about him the most is how cunning and smart he is. I am already convinced that he will solve any mystery within the time loops with given time.
  What also really stood out was the world building. It's a unique futuristic world with magic. There are different races like humans, vampires and more. I know for a fact that the world building will be expanded in the future chapters and I am already looking forward to it.
  The writing is solid and engaging. There is really nothing I can complain about. Well done.
  If you want to read a good time loop story this is for you!
  Here is an update after chapter 28.
  My view on the story hasn't changed and to be honest it only improved. The second arc is different from the first, because in the second Alvis is confronted with a problem out of his comfort zone. He has to deal with something he has no experience of and he obviously isn't perfect at first. I guess this is why some people say he has become stupid, but I hardly disagree with that. Alvis is not perfect! I guess some people just don't want to believe that. With the second arc his character develops which makes him more relatable and real.
  This story has become even better but in ways I wouldn't even have imagined after the first arc. It's a deep character driven story with up and downs and lots of action. Paired with the time loop for the mc to learn and become the best and also strongest version of himself, I think Try Again Alvis will be at the top. If you think you will like it after reading my review, then give it a shot and be a part of Alvis' journey.
• DabossUnberogenRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I've always likes incremental progression loop stories, and they are pretty hard to come by. This story scratched my itch as soon as I started reading it. The loop part is not overly long, and there is a clear sense of progression to it that is interwoven with the storyline.
  The style was serviceable and comprehensible, with no apparent issues. Sometimes the sentence structure could be a bit stilted, but it was still good. In general, well done.
  The story was really well done. I like the system and the way that Alvis levels up within the story. There is a lot of mystery within it, and the answers to the inevitable questions that one forms reading it are slowly revealed. Very well constructed.
  The grammar was fine, and I had no issues with reading it. It was simplistic at times, but nothing that caused any issues. Arguably it might have been better than some of those books that seem to be written by a thesaurus bot. it was clear and concise the entire time.
  The characters were interesting and compelling, but somewhat basic. Then again, barely any stories have exemplary characters, let alone a whole roster of them.
  In general, a job well done and a story that does not deserve the negative ratings that it has been getting. Just keep at it, and eventually the trolls will move on. That's all I have to say.
• Sm4llgumRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  First thing you need to know. This is a Time loop story with some LitRPG features but the time loop is the main focus. The characters all feel alive and don't feel like puppets after a few resets which I love. The story is engaging and needs more attention give it a read.
• AurathasRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Character: I have to admit that Alvis’ introduction surprised me, but he did come off as someone he has suffered for years and has come to terms with his fate. I also felt that his character responded realistically as he wanted to die, but the only thing that made him reconsider was his loved ones. Sure, the MC makes some questionable choices at times, but he is after all a teenager, that’s what they do.
  Grammar: No issues that I could see. Spelling was perfect and punctuation was accurate.
  Story: The story has some compelling twists, such as the MC actually gaining experience for dying during a loop. The setting is interesting and fleshed out, with it being established very early on that there are multiple fantasy races about and tensions between the races and even the authorities. The system is also quite intriguing with stat points on level up being variable rather than fixed amounts. Additionally, there is enough mystery to keep you hooked and hoping to get answers to that mystery.
  Style: The writing style is to the point and gets the job done. The only downside is that information is often repeated unnecessarily. However, this did not detract from the story for me, but I could see it being an issue for some readers.
• Otaku221942Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Alvis try again is a special light novel
  It does a lot of things differently than its related predecessors regardless of whether these changes are good or bad but I still have a lot of fun with the series.  The author's style of writing draws me into a world that is not so alien to ours. Nevertheless, the writing style of the author is not perfect and capable of expansion, which in my opinion does not necessarily destroy the work itself completely.Themes such as love, happiness, family, friendship and even the negative aspects such as hatred, grief, sadness and despair find a place in the world of the author.The characters in the very possess depth and a certain kind of complexity even if this is not to be understood at first glance. What convinced me was the main character Alvis. Alvis was introduced to us as cold and emotionless.He was introverted and never allowed himself to be connected,so as not to hurt himself or others,because of his heavy fate (the disease).Except for his one friend Dane and his family,Alvis had no one in his social environment who meant anything to him.But it was this Alvis of all people who after overcoming the Mana disease (this is of course also due to the quest) on people approaches.Alvis who initially would never interact with other people, changes and we as viewers experience this.For Alvis, this social world is completely new and we readers accompany him on his way.Of course, he makes mistakes such as not knowing how to address girls or etc.. However, he also makes successes such as saving a girl from his class from bullying and know this girl again on a personal level. Alvis is not an all-knowing main character and I personally do not put the demand on him, because he is not..Even if he is presented to us as smart, he can make mistakes exactly that is what makes Alvis so interesting.Alvis has meanwhile already a relationship, which would be unimaginable for the then Alvis.Of course the work is behind in some aspects such as the diff
• PaulTBRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  This isn't terrible, but it didn't catch my interest. The characters (so far) are very straight forwards, I guess it's early to say they don't develop but they haven't really yet. The author shoved a great many plot points into the start and I don't see that all of them are needed. As others have pointed out in the comments, there are plot holes (or at least weak points) and some rather odd stereotypes / developments.
  I'm going to guess it's the first story the author has published? (EDIT: I checked, it's his second on Royal Road). It's a decent idea, so my advice is to keep trying and not be too discouraged.
• EcthelRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  The story is the usual kind of "weak to strong" time loop, nothing special so far but that's fine. There are some very good novels on this site based on those very same tropes, so I expect it to go well. The grammar is good, and while the characters aren't very developed yet it's understandable since at the time of this review only 17 chapters are out.
  But I really can't recommend this story for one simple reason : the narrative style isn't engaging. At all.
  Instead of crafting one or two sentences to describe a situation the author usually uses four or five basic sentences, and kill the rhythm of the story.
  For instance, he will use at least 4 sentences to say something like "X got to his classroom early and, having played late in the night, took a quick nap waiting for the teacher."
  When saying that a character is frozen by the surprise of an unexpected situation, is it really necessary to immediately add another sentence saying that he can't move, then yet another saying that he is paralysed ?
  I think this novel may be for you if you can set aside the style and just enjoy the story, but I don't recommend it.
• scarstoboneRoyal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  TL;DR
  If I were to guess what two genres would be tied together in a Sci-fi/ fantasy world, a time loop and a LitRPG would not be my first guess. For this story, it isn't working yet, but at 23 chapters in I can say that overall it's going to take more chapters or edits before the genres mesh well enough that I'd recommend this story to every passerby. While this story has moments of brilliance, they get buried... so the thrilling ideas (on paper) of a 17 year old mage in a time loop with mysterious assassin vampires and a school romantic comedy don't always flesh out the best. Though if you love either genre a lot, read a chapter and you'll know real quick if you want to keep reading, otherwise give this a pass for now.
  Time Loop story discussion (relevant but can skip to next bold).
  Time loop stories tend to have a few common themes and questions that come up. Who is your main character, why and how do they start looping through time (I.e the first run and the realization of the loop existing) , how does it change the character as time progresses and how does the main character change the loop or get out of the the loop (or a goal to be met) . So far this story has a MC whose starting point is a 17 year old about to die who is shunned by society and only cares about his one friend and his parents. All in all, not a bad set up. The how and why are a magic system which takes the mana (which is what was killing him) and turns him into a mage class without a good indication of why. If he was born with it,if it was some sort of supernatural interference, god or devils (considering the occurrence of devils mentioned, this is my guess) or any other reason our MC is being put through the time loop. With no indication of the end goals of the loop you run into a couple of common issues that can arise, such as other people knowing about the loop, how knowledge gets carried through loops, if the loop is there as a power up for MC or if MC is a part of a bigger picture, how th
• MotcoJColdsRoyal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  I like the idea behind this, the mix of genres has potential. However, there are definitely many ways to be improved.
  Style: The style is decent but there are sometimes points that get repeated too many times just in different ways
  Story: The idea is there, and has plenty of potential. It feels like the story as written jumps too much, despite being a timeloop. it feels abrupt how quickly things move along and could use some smoothing out.
  Grammar: There aren't too many spelling errors, but there are many times the word used to describe what happens is wrong. This makes it feel chunky as I'm often trying to understand what exactly the author is trying to say.
  Character: To me all the characters feel very flat, they don't don't have the depth that makes me think of them as real people. The main character, Alvis, feels like his personality changes too much to adapt to whatever happens around him. As for the others, when interacting with him they seem to treat the way he acts as if he's always been that way, despite him having become near psychotic in previous chapters. The rebound from trauma to just fine seems unnatural.
  Overall I see this as a work in progress. If you keep writing you will improve, and I look forward to seeing a polished up book.
• VethrinRoyal Road

  ★★ 1.5

  This story feels very much like it's told by two angsty teenagers: The narrator, as well as the titular character (who, to be fair, very much is a teen).
  Some of that may be due to the limited omniscience displayed by the narrator, who also knows what's in the mind of the titular character at all times, yet at times seems indistinct from him.
  While that technique can work, it mostly serves to create a sense of dissonance in this work.
  Grammatically the story is decent enough for RR, but it suffers from what seems to be a limited mastery of the language itself: Short sentences relying on simple structures to convey meaning.
  Narratively, there's an old saying that a good narrative is about showing, rather than telling, and this story feels like an example of the inversion of that: Telling the readers what exactly happens, rather than showing how a scene plays out through their interactions.
  Nonetheless, it's a fact that as authors write, their mastery of their chosen medium tend to improve, and this should be considered an early work -- if you read this author, please don't be too discouraged. Keep at it - that's how you improve.