Trithenar Innovation -Outdated-
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(story is in the process of being deleted. See the new version here.https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/108828/trithenar-innovation-rewrite)Nobody likes the tax collector, not even intergalactic AIs. So when they show up and draft 4 billion people, I get caught in the crossfire. Now dumped onto an inhospitable world, where the air itself wants to give me cancer I must figure out how to fight an alien war. Good thing I'm a macro-god in SC2. Armed with Nanofactories and biopools that can spawn anything my mind imagines, so why not stick with the familiar and innovate from there?---What to expect,1st person POVSolitary to CivilizationMomentum gathering, once that first marine pops in, the next fifty come easyStarcraft References both obscure and obtuseNumber go up every FEW chaptersRomantic undertones that take 50-100 chapters to play out.Slower Burn with occasional breakthroughs and sprintsWhat do I mean by 'slower burn'? Glad you asked, I considered not giving the supply depot til chapter 21 cause it takes 21 seconds to build in SC2. Buuuuttttttt that was too slow, so we went double proxy racks with tech labs before depot. Guess that makes Thena a bronze league hero.
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- Cancelled
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- AnimpatientHole
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- 4.0/ 5.0
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- Bloodmoon5Royal Road★★★★★ 5.0So in the beginning of the story it just chaos. The couple chapters are fast paste but it get to the fun war games. Now that were the real story beginning. So when she get to the war game Planet. She has a build up a army and takeover the plant then save earth but There are other factions on the planet. All fighting over how much land they can get because they need the land for rare resources.
- KanzibrixRoyal Road★★★★★ 5.0Honestly, the pseudo-hivemind aspect is really interesting, and the plot is intriguing in a way most civ-building stories aren't. One SC nerd getting to play with at least two factions (maybe more as the story progresses) is a neat exploration, and the subtle twists on classic units are pretty great.
Now all you need is mechs and you have the perfect story - Queenie IVRoyal Road★★★★★ 5.0Style Score
I love the style of the story, the cybernetic, Al mix with alien is really fun to read. I've never really read stories with such tones but this was quite enjoyable.
Story Score
So the story really grips you, you want to know what happens and understand more. There are plot points which I'm curious to see how it develops. The story also has its own identity which I like. The story is also kind of dark which personally I like.
Grammar Score
I am not excellent with grammar but this story has pretty good grammar from my opinion and the dialogues don't clash with each other. Good job!
Character Score
The characters are interesting, they have personalities and I enjoy Athena as a MC, she feels human and her internal dialogues can be quite funny. You find yourself rooting for her to survive and personally I like Jim as a character, I just love characters that twist your mind about their true intentions.
I would definitely recommend this story to anyone. I like the feel of it and I really want to know how it will end and how Athena avenges earth in this new world - PugwritesagianRoyal Road★★★★ 4.0Its not perfect but enjoyable and while its got parts that have issues it is at the it reads just fine. one issue I have is it can be a little hard to tell who's perspective it is but again that can probably be fixed easily. (I don't know how to make this review 50 words with out padding it so uhhh WORD WORD WORD WORD WORD WORD WORD WORD WORD WORD WORD WORD WORD WORD)
- Marc'dU4deathRoyal Road★★★★ 3.5Honestly, i'm still somewhat confused about what i read, I blame 50% on it being midnight, another part to rapid POV shifts, and the last to how this opened, if this is published I suspect the author will have to redo the first 8 or so chapters.
i think my main issue is that early on it feels like alot of POV shifts are just to introduce character personalities and world concepts. It feels abrupt and distracting. As though the author wanted to jump right into the action as quick as possible so just shoved a diatribe of world info to make that feasible. I barley have an understanding of the MC at this point, I understand more about Merchant/masskidnapper than the MCs [Athena+[Hygieia/Alaea arguably all 3 should be considered as the MC]] right now.
honestly abrupt and distracting is the best summery of the first 8 chaps.
Despite that, the setting has potential and so far that author seems to make characters that seem interesting.