Tourism Record of the Origin Dragon

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Description

In a Fantasy world with a game-like system...

This world is at risk: the Origin Dragon has awoken! He is trying to take the world's heart away from its protector and will probably get it destroyed!

Oh, he is the world's heart itself, by the way... He's me, your MC.

This is a slow-pacing record of a fragile Dragon; who is, ironically, that world's Most Important Being.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2016
Author: Demintika

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Rating: 2.9/ 5.0
Followers: 114
Views: 191,346

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Community Reviews(9)

aisenfield-kunRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
didn't read it yet, but the low stats seems anoying so take me compliment to the fullest.
WhoCaresRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
WC's Mutual Review-As of chap 29
Overall: 4/5 Based on the casual, light novel genre I'd say this is a great read. Grammar can get iffy but you can understand it well enough especially the later chapters and the style is light hearted and funny. Not a traditional OP story so it'll get a lot of hate but the 'M' elements are interesting too :P
Style: Nice and consistent and keeps you immersed in the story and the character's emotions. The narrative voice is done well and fits the mood of the genre perfectly. Haven't really seen much of the world yet but there aren't any info dumps, which is good, and the exposition is good too.
Story: 4/5 The plot is light but well crafted with a little mystery, an end goal or moral dilemma and so on. Would appreciate a little more world building but that'll come with time i guess.
Grammar: 4/5 I know you're not a native speaker so I was lenient but you do have to work on your grammar a bit. I don't mind typos etc but when thoughts end up switching too fast because sentences were cut short or something, then it becomes a problem to follow your story. Perfectly readable though and in the upper tier of grammar as far as rrl is concerned.
Character: 4/5 The side characters need serious work because they all melt down to the same personality which is disorienting. The MC is well fleshed out and interesting but you need to work on the side characters. Basically, they can't all be sadists/bullies however, for a light read this is good enough i guess.
Conclusion: Fun story, light read and easy to digest. Very light novel-y and M but since that seems to be the intent of the author, I'd say it's well done. Definitely has potential and certainly worth reading. ^_^
forgottenslayerRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
i must say that i find this story hilarious.
style; it's fine as far as RR goes it follows the MC, though some chapters have five POV changes and i would have to say that's a little excessive.
story; the story is a classic comedy, the mc creates reality and in a moment of extreme laziness leaves it up to other people to do everything else but forgot to strength himself and now has to deal with the consaquinces, just a great place for lots of laughs.
grammer. i am not allowed to critique grammar by order of my Proof Reader. but i will say that it wasn't bad enough that i though anything wrong with it.
characters; while the main character is somewhat fleshed out, other charters... not so much. in this style i would recomed you keep to a few charters that are around all the time with a set of peripheral charters that have set roles.
all in all this was a great comedy that had me laughing for a while and with a bit of improvement it could be even better. ⌐■-■
SpaceManRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
After 29 chapters I had to drop this, I found it not to my liking and filled with broken reasoning.The storie starts off really good but after the prologue it turns to crap.
MC dies, has his soul randomly appear in a newly born universe to then create the laws for that universe, he sleeps for 12000 years after he creates a few laws and a dragon body.
Universe apparently has one world based off MC's memories when he developed games. First life forms are the deity's who mind rape him for knowledge, use it to create a fantasy world.
I dislike this story because the MC fails to show any of his life experience in his new life. He is way under powered, has a pet wolf that thinks it's fine to want to kill its master and the deity's are bitching about him. Also I hate how 99% of the world worships him yet they want to keep him as a slave.
I should also add that the Universe will die without his mana, he has unlimited mana yet can't use it properly and has no self-preservation instincts.He was still level 5-7 by the time I stopped reading this, dexterity impacts his casting speed and this I dislike.
The whole system looks like a prison for this immortal soul, I also find it hard to belive one moment he is trying to befriend some humans and the next has no feelings when he commands his wolf to kill them. The reason this upsets me is because he later feels guilty over a Knight being sentenced to death for almost killing him when the others also tried to kill him.
His mind-set is more of a wish-fulfillment but at the same time he is not sure of what he wants, wanting to travel the world then commit suicide makes this story have no suspense. The part about the son before he died also makes no sense.
Done being ungrateful
Keep up the writing author
DonDrurugiaRoyal Road
★★ 1.5
Really its nice to read an the style of this is actually something i like. BUT why would i read something where the mainFUCKINGcharacter, is basicly getting mistreated the entire time no progress is happening and everything he does will automaticly harm him.... i have read til chap 30.... and he is 90% captured and mishandled by a priest a god or something else. you shoud change the name from "Tourism Record of the Origin Dragon" to "I like my MC tortured". beacause the is simply put, no travel involved. he gets captured or is in a den sitting around. dont understand me. i do like it when a character has to work to get something. but im not a sadist so i see no point in reading this story.
so if you like to read 30 chapters of how somebody is mistreated with NO stoyprogress at all, read the story. to everybody else. Search for something else.
ps ignore the title of this review. I had to make something up because WTF was to short. i also did originally not wote a score, because stopped while there would be more to read. but seeing how the system wants me to put a score in i m doing it in my honest opinion.
wraith26Royal Road
★ 0.5
ohhb goddamnit.. the mc is just a useless scumbug who cant do a shit… hes always caged like a stupid dick he is..
Dark427Royal Road
★ 0.5
MC created that world, but he's so fuckin under powered, gets to be a wolves bitch's, and did I mention he can't do shit?
StrzalkaRoyal Road
★ 0.5
I agree with Dark427 i'm not recommending this to anyone who has brain
BoredBeyondBeliefRoyal Road
★ 0.5
Mc is a weird god who decided it makes sense to become a weak dragon rather than just becoming a god and sleeping all day in your realm.Also he decides to spare people who try to kill him.