Time—Smith: The Flesh Mage’s Journey (Post-Apoc Adventure)

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Description

At his coming-of-age ceremony, Evan discovers an unprecedented ability to time travel, as well as teleportation, placing him in grave danger in a world where unique Skills are mercilessly hunted and traded by the elite. His encounters will lead him to uncover multiple capabilities, including the ability to absorb skills. His journey through time, dungeons, and worlds is a quest for strength to confront adversaries who challenge the very limits of his newfound powers.

Slowburn gamelit with a focus on progression, action, and depth.

Multiple releases per week for the first month before returning to a regular schedule of a chapter released every Friday at 8pm GMT

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2023
Author: Godlyskeleton

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.5/ 5.0
Followers: 371
Views: 63,131

Chapters(32 total)

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Community Reviews(8)

LuminstateRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
STORY
A lot of children who gain skills get two of them. Evan’s two new skills are both mundane, but they combine in an interesting way with his third skill to give him a really powerful effect which he has to hide.
Also the particular superpower he gets when he combines his skills is, without me giving any spoilers, one that can create interesting scenes and give the reader a lot of information about other characters and the world in general.
There is a clear sense of threat hanging over Evan from the beginning, which doesn’t diminish as he struggles to get to grips with his new powers. The story sweeps along quickly and you don’t know what’s going to happen next.
STYLE
The writing is fluent and descriptive, switching from light-hearted scenes to dramatic fights and back again.
GRAMMAR
The spelling and grammar is at a high level, much better than average. There are a few typos and occasional errors, but not a huge amount.
CHARACTERS
There are a variety of contrasting characters, each one with their own individual background and motivation, including at least two scary and intimidating antagonists, so it will be interesting to see how all that resolves.
DeikonRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Okay so I've read up to I think chapter 23 which is the latest one today.
And I like the MC. I like his friends. His abilities or skills are unusual and handled well by the author.
I like how he can slip back into potential or real pasts. It's interesting how it's written.
I also like that the MC takes care of his friends and I hope he enhances them further.
What I don't like is that it's listed as litrpg and I don't see anything.
Sure, a few italics mentioning sub skills but nothing truly describing skills, skill sets, abilities, etc.
If anyone's ever read the great cleric I like having a status screen. I like having a system not to OP but if I train or can do certain things I can gain skills and then they can level. I mean I like seeing the quantification of that. I don't know how unusual that makes me, but I'm tired of real life being iffy on how good you are something or how terrible you are. Something well actually. How terrible will Darwin you out?.
Anyway, the story is enjoyable and I hope it continues. I'm not going to worry about patreon until it hits 100 chapters because then I know he wants to write it.
OsiriumWritesRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Lovely story so far. Can’t wait to see how the story of Evan develops over time.
First off, the time travel aspect was very well done. I usually dislike the gimmick, seeing as how OP it can be, but here it was done very well, clever even.
The chapter sizes were decently chunky, and although it was occasionally a bit description heavy, the author did a very good job of keeping the flow of the story and the sentences going. There wasn’t to much prose, or major grammatical errors that I could see when I read it.
The best part of the story where the raw emotions woven through the story, no doubt due to the detailed descriptions and the chaotic nature of the first few chapters.
The only thing that really stood out was the MC itself. It was occasionally hard to follow his actions and what actual goals he had. Still, nothing a second editing wouldn’t fix.
All in all, solid writing and I’d love to see more chapters in the future!
SkarabraeRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Style: The story's style does a very good job of capturing the feeling of the work. The word choice is pretty much perfect and the writing is fairly unique. As for literary devices, there are quite a few, and they help convey the story's feeling. I have no complaints.
Story: Some people have said the story feels rushed. It doesn't to me, at least. The pacing is very good in my opinion, especially for what the story's trying to do. The plot develops exactly how it needs to as well. The story is also quite interesting, being a dark fantasy where there is an incredible disparity between social classes and people who have certain powers or a certain amount of powers become targets for their higher-ups.
Grammar: The grammar is mostly good; however, there are some spelling errors and they can be somewhat distracting.
Character: The main character is fairly well-developed, 3 dimensional, and realistic for the situation he's in. However, he's about the only character that is this way. Most of the other characters either appear for a short time or they are simply thought of in the main character's mind. To give an example, the MC doesn't talk to his parents. He simply thinks about them, so I can't say they have the same development he does or much like it.
TheJournalistRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I've got to say, I immensely enjoyed reading the story! It's got this rich dark fantasy vibe teetering on grim because of the actual reality of the word written going on that I absolutely love. The whole dynamic with the class divide adds this intriguing and complex layer that gives the story an extra flavor. The promise of both depth and tension that I could see unfolding has got me itching for more!
The main character Evan, is very multi dimensional and fleshed out. His journey is like a rollercoaster ride of emotions and newfound powers, and I'm totally here for it. Sure, there's a bit of ambiguity in his actions sometimes, but that just adds to the intrigue, you know? I'm really looking forward to seeing how he grows and evolves throughout the story.
In terms of grammar, the narrative is pretty solid overall as this isn't the author's first rodeo. There are a few hiccups here and there—like the occasional spelling error or inconsistency—but nothing too major. I do agree that clearer explanations of magical concepts would definitely enhance the reading experience and keep readers fully immersed. But overall, it was engaging and vivid.
Overall, I'm really digging this story. The characters are likable, the abilities are intriguing, and the world is compelling, the entertainment value is off the charts. Can't wait to see where this story goes next!
Jonathan BRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I liked your story a lot and have a few small notes, keep up the great work!
You're very detailed with your descriptions, that can be a good or bad thing, just make sure they're not overindulgent to the point of distraction. But there are also other times where you're incredibly scant with description like when you mention mana and some of the different ways magic works.
I'd personally like to know a bit more about Evan before he goes to experience this status-quo-shifting testing. We barely know the guy, and now his life is about to change forever. What is the world like for a normal person who isn't magical?
You're power system seems interesting, everyone gets two of something, either extraordinary or mundane.
Evan wants to get powers, why? I know any kid would want powers, but how does this testing ultimately serve to either help or hinder in the pursuit of his goal/dreams?
You mention the room is bathed in mana, what is mana? I know what it means in a typical magical/tv show context, but is that different to this story? And if your book was someone's first exposure to this concept, it'd be a good idea to briefly explain it.
I like the idea that people can steal/extract skills from others, that can set up a lot of interesting plot hooks in the future.
Kind of a weird twist to follow this random kid and then jump to Evan's perspective, but I'm glad you immediately saddle him with a goal, to escape and see his family again.
Time travel in stories is always interesting to me, I'm excited to see how Evan ends up using time travel combined with his other powers.
God Of KnowledgeRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Interesting plotline, feels a bit rushed, mc acts like an npc and doesn't seem to have the slightest clue about laying low. Paragraphs are repeated for no apparent reason than to stretch the wordcount. With an edit and polishing it could be a great story, as long as characters aren't 2d.
Mc apperently has another skill, mentioned that he always had it, but then the novel cuts off and it isn't mentioned in a flashback or anything. Just, "No mattet how many times he felt this power, it would never get old" or smth.
Overall its a 7.5 at best.
NikisRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
The work feels unique. The premise of the story is really nice. Everyone should give at least the prologue a chance.
The story begins with a really nice scene. It built up the world for me, set the power structure, brought emotions. It got me into the story. I feel like I'm there. Despair, anger, powerlessness permeates the air. There is something really messed up in this world and I can't wait until we fix it together with our MC. And that's where he comes into the picture. Out of nowhere everything is gone. I'm in some mess of a fight that feels chaotic, illogical, stretched, unexplained, and bland. And as the story continues I can't really get out of that chaosy mush ever again. Some parts are over-explained. Things are happening, yet I don't really know why. I don't see the drive of the characters. The story just feels chaotic and rushed. And I can't find any more emotions around. I can't find a reason to care about the MC.
But this is all just my subjective opinion after all.
Author, you have my respect for writing the story and I hope that going forward you will make it better and better.