The Zone

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2018

Author

Typist kid

• Update (Yes, this again)
  Nov 25, 2018
• Art
  Apr 7, 2018
• Ruit
  Sep 22, 2018
• Req
  Sep 9, 2018
• I'm not dead! (Update)
  Aug 10, 2018
• A Silly Error
  May 5, 2018
• Clicking
  Apr 25, 2018
• Piece
  Apr 22, 2018
• Divide and Conquer!
  Apr 14, 2018
• To Land
  Apr 4, 2018
• Intercept
  Mar 31, 2018
• Lecture
  Mar 31, 2018
• A Gift
  Mar 20, 2018
• End of Arc 1
  Mar 18, 2018
• Replicate
  Mar 14, 2018
• Unfriendly- Part 2
  Mar 9, 2018
• Unfriendly- Part 1
  Feb 28, 2018
• Ripple
  Feb 24, 2018
• Excursion
  Feb 21, 2018
• Birdy!
  Feb 17, 2018

Reviews

Community Reviews(5)

• Hephaestus0Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  A great story with a lot of potential. Future readers should be warned that this is not a story that runs to the finish line and I do hoop the autor will finish at least the first story arc before dropping it, it would ofcourse be better if the storry is finished but beggars can't be choosers.
• MightsinRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Well done! Can't wait for more.
  I really enjoy the story and characters so far (upgrade in hand), and can't wait for more. The World you have created holds so much potential!
  The only thing that can be jarring sometimes is the transitions from one character to another. Seems like a formatting thing. I find myself realising that it's not Dan anymore very slowly.
  Thanks!
• SovereignofAshesRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Disclaimer: This review was done as part of a review swap.
  First Impressions: From the first chapter you’ll find yourself reading what seems to be a young adult ‘slice-of-life’ kind of story, but within moments everything changes. You’re plunged into the main character’s stream-of-consciousness right away, seeing what he sees, experiencing what he experiences, and hearing him describe what his tinkered implants tell him about the world. It feels at once like you’re inside his head, but also like he’s telling you a story in the very moment that everything is happening.
  At first blush, the story reminded me a lot of the Dead Space series of video games, only instead of the protagonist fighting space-zombies, it was a more light-hearted, young-adult story filled with adventure and character. The idea of a young man trained at building and tinkering, with a specialization in cybernetics and power-suits reminded me a lot of Isaac Clarke from Dead Space if he were younger, less grizzled, and thrust into a much brighter setting. This young man is searching for his identity and purpose, by tinkering with himself seeking a semblance of perfection, and tinkering with his tools while occasionally screwing up in the process. Another character I thought of would be Amanda Ripley from Alien: Isolation. Instead of seeking out her mother and corporate evils, this character is still finding their purpose and has far less bad luck with xenological entities. Yes, most of my sci-fi intake is survival horror at this time, mea culpa.
  Content: The narrative doesn’t hit you with everything all at once and exposition, with regards to the setting, occurs conversationally as the protagonist only gives you exactly what you need to know in any situation. This is an enjoyable, direct, and light read. If you binge on chapters, you’ll find yourself quickly flipping through the story and becoming embroiled in the adventure without any fuss. The conversational style is refreshing and allows your ima
• christos200Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  This review was done as part of a review swap.
  The story is a sci-fi adventure that focuses on a teenage protagonist who trains as a Builder and in the process meets a lot of interesting characters. The style and story are pretty good and the side-characters are, as noted, interesting. The grammar is also good, despite a few typos. All in all this story can easily be recommended to anyone who likes to read sci-fi novels.
  Style: I have to admit that at first I was a bit skeptical as I do not usually like first person but you managed to pull it off. You allow the reader to get inside the head of the MC and follow his trail of thought. The sentences are short but that isn't bad; it allows for faster reading. All in all, the narration is entertaining and we can get into the MC's head but at a few points the transition from first person to third can a bit abrupt (an example of this is in chapter 'G', at the end) but this is only a minor inconvenience and not much of a problem.
  Story: The story is really good. The beginning is intriguing and the part with the pirates was pretty good, especially the action during his escape. The transition to the school was a bit abrupt but once in the school the MC meets many interesting characters (Dyne, his old friend, Grace, the Mentor, etch) that keep the reader interested in reading more. I also like the use of flashbacks, although the transition to the first one could have been a bit better; It took me some time before realizing I was reading a flashback. The transitions to the other flashbacks though were far better. The worldbuilding is also good and there aren't many info-dumbs. All in all the story is intriguing and keeps the readers' interest.
  Grammar: The grammar is very good. Of course there are a few typos and a few cases where there is misuse of tenses but this isn't really a problem as the casual reader will not notice it. The style of writing (stream of consciousness) also excuses some of the word choices, as another revi
• AshkariRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  So, this title was one of those I find somewhat difficult to put all my thoughts together into one score. One of the ones that makes me wish we could score a lot more individual things.
  Style: Writing style is pretty good, actually. While I’m not a huge fan of first person typically, the author manages to pull off a pretty believable stream-of-consciousness first person kind of narration that’s reasonably entertaining. The only issue I had was use of backstory flashbacks, which felt like unnecessary infodumps that didn’t really show us anything we couldn’t have learned through other means, and were a bit jarring thanks to the first person narration. However, in the end I decided not to dock points for that, as they’re still written well.
  Story: This is one of those sections I wish I could break down further. The setting is solid, and the beginning is pretty intriguing. Unfortunately, once the MC actually gets to the school a number of chapters in, it devolves into a fairly typical ‘MC is a badass’ type of deal. Normally this isn’t an issue, but at some point character consistency seems to go off the rails and there’s a lot of what comes off as showing off for its own sake. I don’t mind super-powered protagonists, but there still needs to be some struggle there. There were also few segments later on that I needed to reread more than once, because I just couldn’t figure out what the author was trying to describe as actually going on, such as the scenes involving Grace and Lucy. Points are also deducted for a fairly large issue with ‘Talking Heads’ syndrome when there’s only two people present.
  Grammar: This one’s a little complex, mainly due to the narrative style. When you’re doing stream of consciousness, it makes sense to skip out on a lot of ‘standard’ grammar rules, so things I might normally complain about instead comes off as ‘this is just how the MC thinks’, and it works just fine that way, so I gave it high rating. There’s are a few odd word choices here and