The World Before It All Began

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Description

After finding his wife and son dead, a boy is falsely accused of their murder. In a frantic escape, he is shot and left dying, consumed by guilt and regret. In his final moments, he meets a mysterious woman who offers him a chance to be reborn, free of painful memories—all his memories—but with all the skills he’s learned. She urges him to protect those he loves in his next life. As darkness takes him, he faces the uncertain future of a new life, unsure if it's a chance for redemption or an escape from his past.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2024
Author: Hi_Zoda

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Rating: 5.0/ 5.0
Followers: 13
Views: 5,732

Chapters(34 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

ZackReadsRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
So far, everything about this story has been really enjoyable, and I’m genuinely interested in where things are going. The world you’re building feels like it has a lot of potential, and I’m excited to see how it continues to grow. It’s clear that this might be your first time writing a full length story, but that's to be expected with first-time authors. That said, I want to acknowledge how much your writing has improved as the chapters have progressed. The flow has gotten much smoother, the dialogue feels more natural, and the pacing has become more consistent.
I also feel like we're beginning(1-26 where I am) to get a solid understanding of the foundation for the few characters introduced so far. They already feel distinct and interesting, and I’m looking forward to learning more about them. One of the most intriguing elements for me is the mysterious woman and the dreams, there’s clearly something deeper going on there, and it adds a nice layer of suspense. I can sense quite a bit of foreshadowing throughout the story, which makes it all the more engaging.
Keep writing and keep growing, I'm excited to see more, and I’m definitely here for the journey!