The Watcher

Information

Status

Completed

Year

2020

Author

Ochroleucous

• The Watcher - Short Story
  Dec 21, 2020

Reviews

Community Reviews(3)

• David KRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  A household spider observes the interactions of a human couple who are new to the dwelling and apparently to each other. There are a lot of ways that a story narrated by a spider can go wrong, but this one doesn't.
  Observed by the spider, a new couple moves into the dwelling and commences with their lives. The spider reports their actions, and comments on how those actions affect him.
  The writing is polished and the story is well-written. It's easy to read, enjoyable to read, and everything makes sense.
  I sympathize with the spider and am definitely on his side.
  Grammar is fine. No errors.
  Our hero, the spider, is observant. He describes the young couple and their actions. He expresses his concerns and annoyances. It's like listening to someone talk about their lot in life. The spider is everyman.
  The side characters — the man and the woman — are revealed through their actions. Both are perhaps stereotypical, which in this story is perfectly fine, and both are not very likeable, at least not by me.  (In the sense that some interesting characters are not likeable.)
  It's a fun story to read!
• ~HOLLOW~Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Very entertaining. I haven't read a story for the perspective of a spider before!
  Reccomend if you want something quick and nice to read before you head off for the day!
  My favorite part was how the spider called days "legs". I wish there were more, but I guess that's the point of a short story.
• RznRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  This is interesting, though the abilities of the spider are well beyond what could be perceived by its senses. The almost stalking behavior and actions are interesting, having the effect of putting relationship troubles through a foreign lens while remaining ignorant of the specifics itself. It was interesting, but it also had its stumbles in presenting the information in a natural way that might have been better handled by expanding on conflict a bit more directly. This watcher seemingly is almost omnipresent and yet us readers are left to fill in the gaps.