The Unnoticed Dungeon

Self-Published

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Description

A newly formed dungeon core awakes with no memory of who or what he was.  In fact, he just found out that he died.  He has no idea or when or how he came to pass, and now finds himself being forced to start all over as a dungeon core.  Worse yet, he isn't even your average run of the mill dungeon.  No, the Overseers, whoever they are, have designated him to be an experimental core.  This means he doesn't have to play by all the rules, the bad news is that if the core oversteps his boundaries as a dungeon core too far he's more than dead; he's erased.  Now he has to struggle to figure out what kind of dungeon he wants to be, all the while very aware that he can't play it safe.  The overseers don't want safe, they want lines redrawn and limits reset.  The question is, can he do it and survive?  He asks, because he overstepped before he even made it to his new world.

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2021
Author
RJ Dale

Tags

LITRPGACTIONFANTASYADVENTURECOMEDYSUPERNATURALGAMELITMALE LEADLOW FANTASYWUXIADUNGEON CORE

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Rating
4.3/ 5.0
Followers
1,231
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393,745

Chapters(54 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

  • Lavelle JacksonRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    RJ Dale has a winner on his hands with this story. Just when I thought there were no more unique angles for a dungeon core, I read this one. It's fresh and awesome. There are several twists and turns that I was not expecting.  I'm following this till the end and I wish the author the best of luck
  • DrajaxRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    Nice, I just benched read everything and man this story is good, it has many uniqe concepts that are integrated really nice into the story. Although this story is not perfect, sometimes it feels like it is a bit streached, but that is only a small thing.
    The style, story, grammar and character scores are in my opinion above avarage, although it is true that at some points, like already said, the story feels boring, it is offset with the moments were the there is so much information at once that one can feel overwelmed, so they somewhat balance themself out without many problems. But the still exsisting problems should be changed in the future or this will with certanty will become a problem in the long run of the story.
    All in all it is an enjoyable experience to read the chapters, because there is almays something new and unexpected in this story that fits into it really good. (/^_^)/
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    STYLE: 4.5 / 5
    STORY: 3.5 / 5
    GRAMMAR: 4 / 5
    CHARACTER: 4 / 5
    The advanced review feature requires me to wirte 200 words but I don't want this review to be to long, so this is my solution.
  • irreverenthopeRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    This story is less a techical breakdown of a dungeons lived experience, and more a delightful narrative with some dungeon tropes mixed in, but it's well thought out and well paced. Even a statblock lover like me was hooked early on. Don't expect to see a lot of climbing numbers, instead keep your eye on the ensamble cast. They are very likable. (as long as they don't start rhyming)
  • WonderAllRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    This Dungeon Core Story has a unique charm. With a great mix of comedy, mystery, and creative puzzling, The Unnoticed Dungeon should definitely not escape your notice.
    The best part of this story, for me, is watching the slow reveal of the characters' personalities. The two main characters are discovering themselves at the same time that we are discovering them, which endears me to them immensely.The characters all feel multidimensional and well realized.
    Other highlights:
    - The setting is detailed and rich with interesting features which I look forward to seeing more of.
    - The mystery subplots are still just beginning to simmer at the time of this review, but it already has my interest.
    - The author spoils readers with a very rapid upload rate, which is excellent if you're like me and never learned how to handle suspense.
    Overall, this is creme of the crop among Dungeon Core stories. I'm looking forward to reading more by this author.
  • toddRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 4.5
    I'll admit, I was a bit unsure if I was going to continue reading after the first few chapters. The two characters feel stilted when conversing in the void, and it doesn't make much use of the 'understand anything spoken, despite a lack of memories' mechanic, instead, writing their conversation and duplicity naturally. That said, once the core makes landfall, it feels like the gears finally catch and they're off to build their deviant dungeon and interfere with the lives of the city around them. So while the introduction is a bit rocky, it smooths out into an interesting dungeon-core story shortly after the characters have something to do.
    The premise as described in the summary seems constrictive, but without spoiling anything, is fairly rapidly discarded. So too are the protagonist's more unlikeable personality traits explained in a satisfying manner, with his soul being the source rather than a plot hole regarding their lost memories. From there, interactions with the townsfolk and the comically inept criminal conspiracy of the town serve to greatly build out the world outside the walls of the 'dungeon'.
    Overall, it makes for another potentially entertaining entrant in the heap of dungeon core stories, with enough of a break away from standard dungeon stories to make it interesting. It seems likely that there will be a conventional dungeon of sorts eventually, but the initial efforts to gain power and avoid notice take it in a distinctly different direction. There aren't any poor, plucky adventurers lined up to make it big and befriend the dungeon. Demons aren't invading the world conveniently near the dungeon start. Badlands full of the undead aren't slowly expanding towards them. It's just two pals setting up a highly unconventional scheme and having a bit of fun while they hide out from the authorities. I'd recommend reading to at least chapter ten to see if it appeals, and deciding whether it really justifies a scathing review at that point.
  • ValentineNRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 4.5
    This is something different from the usual dungeon core reincarnation stories.
    The story moves around the two main characters (core and sprite) and less on the "dungeon" itself.
    Also, the author seems to have some sort of confused/love/hate/respect feelings about ducks.
    It's worth the time to read. The short term threads of the story are entertaining and the long term ones will keep you curious, even if they're blatantly revealed early on in a few infodumps.
  • Wieland VandebotermetRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 4.5
    So the novel has a decently original idea. Its probably done before but what is not these days? So to get back on track the story writing is good and i am looking forward that this novel will hopefully stand the test of time for at least a while.
    And ofcourse hoppefully our main character won't get unexpectedly stabbed ;).
  • failiraRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 4.5
    The story is well paced and well written, no outstanding grammar mistakes (at the same time I'm not a native english speaker so who am I to judge)
    The caracters are fairly well written and although it is early in the story they do appear to undergo development which is always a plus.
    The world is well built and (once again a bit early to say but so far:) the main plot is brought in a good way.
    All in all, a well written story which will quench your boredom for a bit .
  • Not_A_HatRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 4.0
    I mean, I'm a fan of dungeon stories in general, so I'm not a hard sell, but yeah, it's pretty good.
    The idea behind this novel is that the dungeon can't act like a dungeon. I've seen similar stories - dungeons that want to make towns, or inns, or I think a school once, but this story puts its own flair on the idea, and it's enjoyable. The reasons causing the dungeon to do this are also well developed; it's not just author fiat, it fits with the worldbuilding and character motivations.
    The MC and his companion are the only characters that have gotten any amount of screen time so far, but they're both enjoyable to read about. They've got some camaraderie, they've got some funny quirks, and they've both done some growing; in short, they're pretty well written. Hopefully the cast will expand a bit. (But not too much.)
    If there's one problem that seems systemic to the story, it would be the exposition. Most of the lore and worldbuilding has been devlivered through straight-up explanation infodumps. It's not the worst? It actually makes sense for the characters and their situation, and it's not absolutely boring to read, but it can definitely be dry in spots. I'd honestly like it better if the information was given out more slowly over a longer period with more stuff happening in between. It's more of a pacing problem, really, but still.
    The second thing that... well, it's not really an issue, but is a bit immersion-breaking, are the fourth-wall breaking references. There aren't a ton? But there have been a few. And some of them are kinda big. Let's just say that if there are a bunch of wizards, who happen to live near a coast somewhere, that decide to conquer this dungeon, it'll be par for the course. :P
  • HiroldRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 4.0
    The story is full of imagiation, ideas from generic fantasy mixed with a pleasant naration (with some rarely seen words) and the all giving it a good vibe. I like both the style and subject, the begining packs some information but nothing too hard to understand. The point that makes me like it is that even without writing a lot, the mecanisms are describe so that you understand it, but still has some holes in it so you can try to guess.