The Undead Dungeon

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2018

Author

Bezarius

• Chapter 3 - Open For Business
  Jun 30, 2018
• Chapter 2 - Obligatory Tutorial
  Jun 29, 2018
• Chapter 1 - A Second Chance
  Jun 27, 2018
• Prologue - Another Accident
  Jun 26, 2018

Reviews

Community Reviews(8)

• CliffHangingRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I like the overall plot of the story.
  Kill all those Harem MC.
  The grammar could use some work though.
  I hope that you don't stop this novel mid-way like a lot of novels.
  I can't wait for more chapter.
• hatoyin97Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  This novel is actually decent
  I have medium grade expectation...
  And high expectations for longer chaps as well...
  P.S. to thpse skeptical readers, this mc have personality..!!!
• WaytocoolRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Love it, becuase of the zombies.
• Mighty MoushieRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Edited review at the bottom. First review was as of chapter 12.
  I will get the bad out of the way first.  You have issues with grammar.  World building could use a little work just to flesh things out, and you have a tendency to just tell what is going on instead of show, which is more prevalent in the first three chapters.
  On to the good. You recognize that you have issues with grammar, and I'm hoping practice will really help you improve.
  The story is interesting, a lighthearted zombie dungeon story.  There's little bits of humour added in all over the place. It has unique monsters, and fast battle scene.  I also like that you avoid some of the traditional dungeon tropes like a dungeon fairy.
  I really appreciate the dungeon map in the spoilers, as layouts can get confusing. Especially in more complex dungeons. Please keep that up.
  Edited review:  Grammar improves dramatically with several editors. There is a lot more depth to the storytelling, and I found it to be a lot more immersive. Definitely looking like one of the better dungeon core books on here.
• GrimPhoenixRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  I enjoyed the concept and the poking fun at cliches but i think that the grammer is poor and the dungeon design kinda uninspired. That said i love the idea of a proper undead dungeon that isnt grimdark. Would like to see an update or better yet a rewrite. Please.
• MetaldagonRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  Shows alot of promise but you really need an editor. Most of your story is filled with gramatical errors and the structure of alot of your sentences proves that this is not your native language.
• OscbladeRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  So, first of all, let me start by saying that I am not the best at reviews. I have also only read to chapter six so far I will edit this in the future if changes are made to the story. Either good or bad but hopefully good ones.
  The story has potential, the bases of the story from what I can tell after reading a few chapters is quite interesting. Guy dies becomes a dungeon who loves undead. This in itself is cool and sounds very interesting.
  The main issue with this story that is bringing down the scores for style, story and character revolve a lot around the grammar.
  From reading, you can tell that the story goes from third to first pov. This causes a bit of confusion in reading. However, I feel if this is corrected the story would flow a lot better.
  Other than the pov there needs to be major editing done, each chapter the author asks for the readers to point out any issues for him to correct. But with the amount needed I feel that is a daunting task for the readers to help with. I feel that the author should find a proofreader/editor who can go back through and fix each chapter. With that done this story would be lifted again and become even better.
  Lastly, and this is kind of like two things. The story needs a bit more showing in the writing instead of telling. I am not the best when it comes to this even in my own writing. When reading if you showed me the dungeon you created instead of telling me about it. Then I know that it would fill me with awe and excitement. I feel that most of your readers would agree that it would be nice for you to bring us into this dungeon. (Hopefully, that makes sense.)
  Other than that the second part of this is that there needs to be more detail added to each chapter. Right now the chapters are kind of short and weak. They need some more meat and potatoes added to enhance the chapters. Again this ties in with the showing and not telling part.
  Now that I said all this I do want to point out that I like this story. I feel it has pote
• Dungeon_Core_FanRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  Let me start by saying that I enjoyed the Undead Dungeon. Every character is memorable, there are a lot of clever ideas, and I'm disappointed the author has apparently abandoned it. That being said, there are . . ."issues".
  The kickoff is fairly standard for a dungeon core story. The protagonist gets killed in a freak accident, and is offered a second chance at life as the guiding intelligence behind a new dungeon.
  Adam, the newly minted dungeon core, was a huge zombie buff in his last life.  So, of course, he goes for an undead-oriented dungeon, with a strong focus on plague zombies. And - of course - the nearest kingdom hates the undead.
  It's practically a cliche, and I'd normally recommend passing on this story in favor of other dungeon core works, particularly in light of the other problems the story.  However, there are some real gems here.
  For one thing, the author is quite funny, with a gift for memorable secondary characters.  If Douglas Adams (Hitchiker's Guide to the Galaxy) had written a dungeon core story, it might have turned out like this.
  For example, this is a world where dungeon fairies (once a ubiquitous feature of dungeon core) have been patched out (due to being "annoying") in favor of a System-sponsored AI that communicates through pop-up windows. Adam's assistant is prone to melodramatic speeches and gloriously deadpan quotes about how they're both doomed.
  And practically every chapter has at least one clever idea that I'd like to see fleshed out as a full story. The truck driver god, the undead bar . . .
  However, that leads directly into one of the major problems.  The Undead Dungeon seems to be a classic example of someone with a ton of ideas, and no one to bounce them off of.  So many good ideas don't get properly fleshed out, and problems are allowed to fester.
  One that particularly caught my eye - despite being obsessed with zombies, the protagonist somehow missed the Resident Evil franchise . . .arguably the biggest zombie property of the