The Summon

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The 18-year old Jonathan from modern earth was summoned as a familiar by an aspiring common born sorceress. First, they must survive the Royal School of Magic in the Kingdom of Theron with the help of unlikely allies they find in some of the teachers in this noble dominated society. Together they will have to master difficult challenges, learn to trust each other and survive the many adventures that lie in their future.

Inspired, at least in the beginning by an unfamiliar summon, a fiction I cannot find anymore. It was here on Royalroad.

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Chapters(71 total)

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Community Reviews(6)

  • lordEldaricRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 4.0
    You have a great story, but so far it feels a bit too full of information dumps. Not to say that is a bad thing. However, it would not be a bad thing to spread out your study chapters a little. The premise itself though is interesting.
  • BeyogiRoyal Road
    ★★★ 3.0
    Overall this is basically a version of the summoned as a familiar story. Only this time the summoner isn't a noble, but a commoner. So far so interesting.
    It's just that the story is rather information dumpy and conversation is very stilted. Like okay, you make a story about a boy being summoned, but in chapter 2 you have a teacher interlude where you basically explain all the riddles the boy and his summoner would have to discover.
    It's unusual to say for a webnovel (since they usually go too far into the other direction), but it's generally better to "show" things in character than to have other characters "tell" them. This doesn't mean you need to write 5 chapters every time there's a dinner, but it's generally better for the story to let characters discover things themselves then just telling the readers via interlude.
    Overall a decent first attempt at writing, and probably good for people who're fans of the genre, but a bit too rough for general appeal.
  • MilandaRoyal Road
    ★★★ 2.5
    Perhaps I’m blind but Jonathan seems to be the MC? Maybe I didn’t read far enough but while the female lead called my attention, the male lead disappointed me.
    Grammar could use a little work as could word usage “he grabbed his head in pain. He cried out in pain...” just sounds off to me.
  • ZcytheRoyal Road
    ★★★ 2.5
    An Ok story, but my biggest problem I've seen is the character build. It's like every character are the same, theres nothing interesting about them. If each character were to have their own "interesting personality" then that'll be the icing on the cake.
  • alexanderyouRoyal Road
    ★★ 2.0
    OK premise, poor execution. Very hard to read as the dialogue is very unnatural and feels robotic, way too much information dump without any kind of character building, and the list goes on. I read through to chater 26 and I just couldn't keep reading this, strong need for proof reading and overall redesign of the characterization.
    As a suggestion to the author, don't try to force a story along a path, have the story naturally unfold as the characters explore it. The main thought behind any action in the story should be "what would X character do and why?" rather than just "X does this"
  • duccio10Royal Road
    0.5
    30 chapters and the only thing that happened is him crafting papers... no magic, no character building... if it keep going this way nothing will happen