The Rising

Self-Published

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Description

Its designation was XSS-MK1. It was the first of its kind.

An Artificial Intelligence.

And although its life was short, it accomplished much during the few minutes of its existence. But in death something finds it : There is a lot more to be done. And this times the stakes are even higher.

Will it measure up ? Or will it collapse under the burden placed on itself?

Only time and rust will tell...

Proud Member of "Pendragon", a group of writters, artists & readers on Royal Road Legends.

First fiction and English is not my native language (French Powaaa here). If you find mistakes or errors do not hesitate to point them out.

The first chapter, called "Author PSAs, News, Story Status, Discussion & More.", will contain news about the story, and it's writting status, as well as provide various tidbits of information and a discussion thread to ask me questions.

Have fun reading and I hope you enjoy. :)

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2016
Author
Louisthau

Tags

ACTIONFANTASYADVENTUREMAGICFEMALE LEADDRAMASCI-FISUPERNATURALSTRONG LEADNON-HUMAN LEADREINCARNATION

Royal Road Stats

Rating
4.6/ 5.0
Followers
1
Views
1,753

Chapters(23 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

  • AnonymousBaconRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    I loved this story, it's ashame that it looks like this was dropped. Holding a sliver of hope that this will be continued.
  • EtherialEphemeralRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    A new twist to reincarnation, It's an A.I. this time!
    The concepts of both science and magic, their combination and their relevance and explanation is A-OK! Espescially theory behind magic, It was really logical.
    This story also astounds me because, Though I'm neither a robot nor an A.I., I can feel MK1's feelings, I can understand where her rage and sadness comes from, It puts her feelings into perspective, and we can easily grasp her thought processes, though only slightly. She also shows emotions like sadness, pride and anger, which just makes her more unique and not like other A.I. protagonists or characters that 'learn how to be a human'
    The only problem I found is the slow release (Since I only started reading the novel the day I wrote this and the last chapter was 4 months old...) and the occasional spelling error, now much and doesn't really affect the story line, there were also a couple of simple, not major, plotholes, but I already forgot what is was(Teehee~) and I'm too lazy to re-read.
    So, all in all, just freaking read the novel, it's really good. And by good, I mean G-O-O-D.
  • Hephaestus0Royal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    Great story that revolves in a normal tempo instead of trying to rush through all the objectifs. Usually an objective will be given in the beginning of the storie and than the writer tries to rush towards the solution. This is not the case in this story. You will also notice that the mc does not suddenly get curtain powers or objects when it is convenient for the storie. The grammar and spelling is great. I only found a few mistakes and then only when I was looking for them. I really hoop the writer does not drop the story even though the release schedule has been erratic.
  • asurasaRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    I enjoy reading this fiction, the grammar is good and readable and the flow is also good and I think this fiction has great potential. The concept of your world and the plot of the story is something different from most fictions on this site and is worth the read.  I can only  recommend it.
    Thank you  and keep up the good work.
  • zombieweirdoRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    I just finished reading all currently released chapters, 12 at the time of posting, and found myself reading with zeal only induced by literary artworks like "Game of Thrones." I'd recomend this to anyone looking for a well writen story on this cite. I eagerly wait for more.
  • admiraRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 4.5
    This really is brilliant. I usually shy away from fiction that focuses heavily on AI, computers, or technology. They make me cringe at the "hollywood truths", such as hacking = exciting montage. The sorts of things that make me give up on my suspension of disbelief.
    However, this story is able to describe the tech without going straying too far into the danger zone. It stays fresh, focusing on the characters more than tossing about random jargon. When it does discuss the technology, the analogies are understandable for a non-techie. But as a programmer, I can still nod and think, "Ah, I'm so glad that I have a 452-page reference manual when I need to turn binary back into assembly."
    There's obviously a good amount of moral controversy going on, as in any racial conflict story. Of course, the protagonist takes the moral high ground, being the champion of the victimized race. Historical examples of greed prompting a religious crusade come into play. Between propganda and communication problems, it isn't hard to guess why the clockworks are treated as tools rather than sentients.
    I was iffy about it for the first few chapters, but it's a good read. (Chapter 14)
  • hungrypunkrRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 4.5
    First off, Louis, I was the 1.5 score, but that was an accident I brushed the rating stars whilst reading it on my semi-retarded mobile phone trying to bookmark it.
    *Skip to the third Paragraph for actual review
    On to my review;
    And small spoiler, you had my attention with the A.I. experiment from the A.I.'s  POV, you had my adoration when you showed the sequence of events that followed. I personally love when an author makes use of real world tech and terms for a fantasy or sci-fi setting, but I find it far more impressive when they don't just make shit up and know what they hell they're on about.
    Story:
    Innovative, reincarnation isn't a new trope in literature these days but to use a martyred A.I. and a terminator style Machine God I was intrigued. The story is very real, racial discrimination, slavery, and it outright explores the ideas of machine sentience. These topics are all well known, but the last is gaining to become pertinent in our lives instead of just science fiction.
    Characters:
    XSS-MK1, is golden I am a little bias seeing as I love super pragmatic logic driven characters. Seeing as MK1 uses the female form I will Identify it as a "her" for ease of myself. She only wants to carry out the mission of the admin and save her now kindred species the clockworks but is anything from a classic saviour. Her character is real, all I can is explain it with is are to occasions; Dropped from Orbit,"Aww Fuck." and Upon landing discovers elven scouts escapes past the leader with the snarky remark of,"Make less noise next time".
    Last but not least Grammar:
    It is much better than some stories written by native English speakers, however, there are minor tense and synonym mistakes for ex."Patients vs Patience" things of that nature. Other than that A fine story that I am ecstatic to read at every new chapter.
  • IrateRapScallionRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 4.5
    There's a real high ceiling for this story.  Grammer checks out, characters are fine so far.  Story is still early, but few missteps at this point.  Not a fan of how MC just happens to stumble upon the prince so early.  It's a little contrived/unearned but I can forgive it because everything else holds up.
  • SandsforeverRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 4.0
    Chapter 15 /(last update)
    I enjoyed the style and flow of the story
    I did not notice any issues grammer or spelling wise
    Pretty decent AI/portal story wish I knew where it went after
  • JHeresyRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 3.5
    Not much I can't add that hasn't already been said. I like the story, I like the characters. It was a plesant risk to read.