The Prince Of Niflheim

Self-Published

Community Rating

Description

An S-rank criminal named Ariel Lost who lived a lonely and dangerous life because of his weak body and cold personality. Dies to protect his only friend's and partner's life, by giving up his own. Now he wakes to find himself born once more, but in a much different and more mysterious world. What will happen to him, and where will destiny lead him?

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2015
Author: DeltaWolf

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.2/ 5.0
Followers: 1,845
Views: 1,152,439

Chapters(60 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

TralliERoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I'm terrible sorry for this but you spelled the name wrong. It's Niflheim not Nilfheim. Did I mention I'm sorry?
TheLonerLionRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Just loved it
HerrMaickelRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I really like the story, but plz stop confusing they're with their :'(
dualRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
i simply love it. always waiting for the next chapter its been a long time since i enjoyed a story like this one. i really like the mysterious MC and that he is a variant with ice magic, he is strong but i wouldnt call it OP for now
kariRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Story was good so far, but I finished this in one go, so m getting a little tired... :p Too much of a good thing I guess!
The only negative is that the MC shows minimal emotions, which I know is kind of the point but over time it loses its novelty.
MwisRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This is a very good story that I find myself loving especially the MC I like the way he is mysterious and puts his brother in place. I would like to see the MC with the blue haired girl that he met at the party since she seems so cute and she is royalty and that is a plus. Only problem I have with this story is the bad grammar that pops up from time to time and either confuses me or forces me to read the same sentence several times. All in all this is a good story that I hope we get more of , I will at least follow you on your web page.
SiglarRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Honestly the story so far as i read has show potential, but i get tired reading it due to the writing style.
I can't say it's grammar, because often i see clear mistake only to some lines later see the right grammar the author should use in this mistake, but in a different and wrong context.
What i can say is his phrases are short, and when the prolong themselves, the author cuts on the lexical side, by exchanging a good word for a lazy expression, which if not wrong one would consider childish. This cuts the reading flow and instead of enjoying the story, I as a reader feel mentally tired after the first 5-10 minutes of reading.
My suggestion for the author go back, read your story from the start, proofread it yourself or find someone to do it for you. The story is promising, but is far from enjoyable.
For now 3.5 stars, when you fix it might go so far as changing it to 4.5.
TUSFRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Overall I have a good impression of this story. But it’s flawed in various ways.
As someone else pointed out, the biggest issue is probably that everything is too centered around the MC. That’s to say, that the world seems to bend-over backwards for him.
The writing itself is very interesting, and you’ve created what seems like an interesting world, however the characters are all lacking.
They seem to exist, solely because the MC needs friends. No reasoning is given for why the Twins are suddenly able to meet up with the MC, often enough for them to become close friends prior to enrolling in school. It’s also not clear why Ariel suddenly opened up to them either. He just sort of did, and that’s all we know.
And of course he has that cringe “mysterious edgy past” that I won’t get into.
Anyways, the story isn’t bad, but it needs a lot of tweaking, in my opinion.
PS. Earth doesn’t rate criminals via letter rankings.
gyro2deathRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Let's start with the positives. The cast of characters while limited feels nice if cliche. They act like people, even the generic asshole older brother at least isn't beyond overbearing like you often see and has some measure of self control. I also enjoy the main character being a pretty boy, if for no other reason than it helps justify all the female interest a MC gets and I've read quite a few fun ones with this trope already.
Now to the bad...the main character who is supposed to be reincarnated, incredibly smart, and very cool headed makes incredibly stupid choices. I'll try to avoid spoilers but the main characters has talent for magic (shocking I know), yet he hides it completely for NO REASON. Now the author has him monologue to himself how there could be problems if he reveals it but that's it, it's just a monologue and never talked about the problems.
The MC is from a well off family who values strength, despite having something he could show off he instead hides it. Now at first its not too retarded as like most reincarnated MC's he starts cultivating too early to be at all possible thus he needs to not show it at first. However, he laments how he has no proper spells or instructions or meditation methods due to not being able to ask anyone else for help yet he keeps hiding. Even after several other characters show off the same level of cultivation he passed he doesn't reveal it...worse even longer after that he's still hiding it even when going to the equivalent of high school for magic ...which happens to teach officers so he can avoid showing off his magic skills....but oh wait they for some reason which makes no sense allow non-magically gifted students to attend magic lessons...why? So the main character can learn magic through them while hiding it. Not because it makes any sense. He talks in length about all the problems he has from hiding his magic, all of which could most likely be solved by revealing it. It wouldn't even be shocking after the ag
Amadeus1Royal Road
★★★ 2.5
Style: I see a lot of things to describe the MC. That is nice. However, what I don't see is specific description. There are general words like "beautiful," "handsome," or some other entirely subjective word. These things change based on both the holder and the viewer. Overall, this description is poor. On top of that, you use words that seem like they're just supposed to charge certain emotions. Overall, this part is lazily done. Things like "arrogant" that really just don't say anything.
Story: It's aight. Nothing we haven't seen on this site before. Other people have done it better, other people have done it worse. It isn't notable in the slightest.
Grammar: Oh God, this made it so hard to get through. I can spot at least two dozen grammatical errors in each chapter, all of them absolutely blatant. Just because it's centered around a small child doesn't mean you have to use the same level of grammar.
No, I kid, I kid. The grammar isn't atrocious. There are plenty of common, simple errors. Plenty of them are my pet peeves (your/you're, spontaneous commas, et cetera) and wreck the flow and immersion of the writing. This likely bogged down the rest of the ratings. However, a 1.5 on grammar for me is average on my reviews on this site. Take my cynicism with a grain of salt.
Character: I feel 0 connection to anybody. The MC is just a good-looking cripple. There's really nothing else. I see descriptions, I see a guy acting like a late teenager with an IQ around 115 when he's an infant. I see some people with superficial descriptions, and the MC's "I don't like him, he looked at me funny" rationale. Lackadaisical at best.
Overall: It's poorly executed and not a new concept. Keep going, though. I like to watch people improve as writers, and I'm sure you will become greater by leaps and bounds from where you started.