The Power of Systems

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2019

Author

Pandalicious

• Chapter 5 - An OP Gift
  May 8, 2019
• Chapter 4 - Greatest Telekinesis User
  May 6, 2019
• Chapter 3 - System Upgrade
  May 5, 2019
• Chapter 2 - He Thinks I'm a Monster
  May 3, 2019
• Chapter 1 - I’m Dead?
  Apr 30, 2019
• Prologue
  Apr 30, 2019

Reviews

Community Reviews(9)

• Avid reader 79Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  This novel is so much better than your first one I think! After reading the reviews of Omega System and then seeing this novel instead really makes me wonder how easily someone can improve!
  Style:
  Way better than before. Storytelling is unique, kind of like first person japanese novels which isn't very common this site. Great work!
  Story:
  Story is good so far and you can tell was more planned out than Omega System. This time, everything that happens has a reason behind it and not just random thing.
  Grammar:
  Perfect, nothing else to say about that.
  Character:
  Character is ongoing and doing well. I would've loved if those characters like Dochet and Chiyian had more screentime beacuse I would've loved to see their character develop alongside Ryan's. Don't know if they may come back in the future though.
  Nice job writing a second novel man!
• Is that a referenceRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  What doesn't  kill you makes you stronger or in this case what does kill you gives you new skill to play around with
  I feel that the events in prologue might happen in the near future not close  but it might be much farther in
  honestly like the take on the skill taking mc type hope this gets more attention in the future
  comedy is ok  not much to say right now (chapterr 4)
  Try reading it  This might turn out great
• MrBadWithNamesRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  This story is like SAO - some people love it and say op characters are great, others point out how they don't like seeing Kirito being a badass, let's just say - I like Kirito being a badass :D
• The ReviewerRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  The Reviewer on another novel:
  Nice job on your second novel man! (I noticed on your fictions tab) Continue to write and I guarantee you'll get somewhere. Review as of Chapter 1.
  Style:
  Personally, your style of writing is pretty creative and I enjoy it. The funny remarks Ryan sometimes makes is enough to bring a smile to my face. If you continue to write in this styel, you got me to support you, but if you decide not to. It's fine by me, I'll just update my review then!
  Story:
  I'm liking the story right now. I know others might say isekai is overdone, but I can't get enough of it. I've read all the good ones and been looking cosntantly for more. If this can become big like the more well known novels posted elsewhere, notify me when you do.
  Grammar:
  Easy and concise. Perfect, can't see any mistakes.
  Character:
  Once again, the character has already made an impression on me within the first chapter. He's a funny and cool guy. I don't know if you'll change his personality later on, I'll just wait and see.
  Conclusion:
  Nice job on the start of your second novel! It's been a great read so far, and make sure you don't stop until the end!
  P.S. Hope this wasn't demotivating in any way.
  -The Reviewer
• Thunderpuppy21Royal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  (Bad punctuation incoming) Ok I wanna start out by saying that everything I’m about write is directed too the author as constructive criticism. I don’t want you to feel like I’m attacking you or your story. Because I do genuinely respect you putting it on the internet due to your desire to write and improve. The reason I say this is that I can be harsh and tend not to sugarcoat when trying to give CC. Okay with that out of the way I want to say this story is one of the most action filled stories where I literally felt like nothing happened. Oh ya just wanna say I didn’t finish the story I don’t like reviewing without finishing. But honestly, the first ten chapters left me with no desire to even read any more so I couldn’t, sorry. Now I want to delve into where the problems with this story lie because I’m trying to be constructive, so let’s start with the protagonist. So the main protagonist is a emotionless protagonist who doesn’t care about things around him. And this type of protagonist brings his own issues that need to be addressed as a writer. Namely that how are we the audience supposed to care if the protagonist himself doesn’t. Best example of this is in the torture scene I read through that whole thing and felt NOTHING. Not because the torture wasn’t something horrifying to imagine happening (though I’ve seen and read much worse) but because of a myriad of reasons, but the main one being the protagonist didn’t care at all, no anger,injustice,sadness or anything. And that’s the issue if he doesn’t care why should I care. Alright next problem, is a writing problem, the problem is that things happen too fast there is no buildup to climactic events and no payoff for those climactic events so instead of things like his slaughter of the royal family feeling rewarding and intense they are as flat and lifeless as his talk with the farmer. There needs to be buildup to these kinds of things and I can see you trying to do so. You have the antagonists do bad things to
• LeumasRoyal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  A story about a boy who is treated unfairly on earth, dies and reincarinates on a fantasy world, and is treated unfairly. Alas, he gains the power to defeat his wrongdoers, and goes on to be treated unfairly.
• NobodySpecialRoyal Road

  ★★ 1.5

  so far the story can be summarised as, MC gets stronger by reviving after death and if there is any way the MC can die he will
  Spoiler: Spoiler
  his first death i guess could be called bad luck, randomly spawning with a goblin on top of you, the fact mc couldn't even manage any form of retaliation could be blamed on surprize and complete lack of preparation
  second death, gets stuck in a hole because he was too hungry, when he tried to get help they just decide he must be a monster and murder him since there is no way a human would fall for such an obvious trap, this is bad logic, mc is human so it is possible other humans could get stuck by accident too
  third death, in the middle of the city the murderer from his second death recognises him and murders him again, why did nobody stop this? that murderer then sticks around his bleeding body long enough for mc to revive, but after the princess appears he seems to fade out of relivance for no reason
  fourth through hundredth death, despite the researcher being caught off guard due to mc's reviving ability, the mc is still unable to muster any substantial form of resistance and escape, which he only managed after a literal wish come true where he gets deus ex machina'd into becoming so op nothing should be able to stand in his way
  by the end of chapter 5 i was very convinced this novel is basically just a wish fulfillment powertrip, anybody looking for a well thought out story should look else where because it most certainly isn't here
• LandiRoyal Road

  ★ 1.0

  There are so many plot holes here that i could use this story to drain pasta.
  I sometimes close an eye on the stories written on this site, because everyone is an amateur in some way. But this one expects me to gouge them.
• ObviousRoyal Road

  ★ 0.5

  Continued to read it and it's bad. I tried, I really tried, but the author just forces the plot along, disregarding and neglecting character, setting and ironically... plot. It's bad. Seriously, have some care for your mc. He doesn't even think about ANYTHING and not in a way that makes any sense. It's like a loose daydream that is being rushed.